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Reviews for Chained to the Whirlpool-Reboot

By : YamiNoKami
  • From Darkling on February 19, 2010
    So good to find a well-written AND hardcore story here :D. You're doing a very good job so far - althrough to be honest, somehow Tenten's training and breaking felt somewhat less exciting than Ino's. Can't quite figure out why though... Maybe because their trainings were for different purposes? You're doing a good job all the way though :). I'm curious about Gaara and Temari's apperence in the story though - is the plan that Temari becomes the next slave, or are they merely there to showcase that they have (or will have) a similar relationship to that of Naruto & his current harem? Looking forward to find out, anyway.

    Keep up the good work!
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  • From shrike8675309 on January 19, 2010
    I love the story. one thought if you wanted to bring Hinata in as an equal to Nurato her soul could be merged with the soul of an OC Umbra Witch.
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  • From jupmod on December 02, 2009
    A very long and interesting chapter. It had taken me several hours to read it through, so I say it was worth the wait from the last chapter. :)

    Interesting development regarding Naruto's social life. The girls meant well, but I do agree with Jiraiya that they aimed too high for the first time. People like Naruto have to gradually fit in or else they would withdraw even more. Least Naruto knew it was an accident that Sakura pushed him.

    Now the ending surprise me. In order for Naruto to get scew with pikes like that, he must have been taken by surprise by shinobi better than him. I understand he's just a genin, but the skills shown in canon, I really can't see Naruto being caught by surprise like that, and even if he was not caught by surprise, he could have easily fought that crowd with his Kage Bushin. So even though I understand the ending was made for the dramatic affect to display Tenten's new side, I really feel it was something that came out of left field IMO. (shrug)

    Another thing that bugs me is that the story has no sense of how much time has passed. Given the chapters since Tenten was taken from the Forest of Death during the second exam, I find it hard to believe that only 30 days have passed, and since there was no indication in the story that there was more than 30 days until the third exam, it left me stratching my head that all those events, from Tenten's capture to Tenten having being broken, took place in the spand of less than a month as indicated in canon how much time was given between the second and third exams. All this is just my thoughts and opinions regarding the timeline of the story.

    Anyway, nice chapter and so forth. I'm looking forward to reading how Naruto will take being attack and Tenten's confession of love. I so love that Naruto being loved by Sakura, Ino, and Tenten. :)


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  • From jupmod on August 18, 2009
    An interesting chapter showing Tenten's training. I was a bit put off that the rape fantasies can go so far to allow scewering victim's hands into the ground, but I guess that is a likely scenerio in the shinobi world when it comes to rape.

    The only thing I found totally out of place in this chapter is the whole conversation between Temari and Naruto. It makes no sense for Temari to come to Naruto and just tell him Gaara's secret, especially given the Chuunin Exams are not even over. Unless this scene is important for future chapters in having Naruto work on opening himself to Gaara and Temari regarding being a Jinchuuriki, I really see the entire converstation was a waste of time with no implications for the overall story.
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  • From theimpacientone on August 18, 2009
    just how 'intimate' gaara's and temari's relationship is? because I have the feeling that she migth end up as Naruto's slave in the future (i hope it happens)
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  • From jupmod on July 22, 2009
    I love this chapter, man. You made Tenten's feelings for Naruto and her 'sisters' quite belivable as she adjusts to her new life. Just like Naruto, being an orphan, she had no experience being with a family and now she is part of one, she definitely will not go back to her previous life, especially she now knows she is loved as well as feeling love toward the Naruto, Sakura, and Ino. :)

    Just being a NaruTen fan, I'm disappointed you ended the chapter when Tenten was going to have sex with Naruto for the first time. Gee, you have to leave it there? I was hoping to read how that special moment. (sigh)

    Anyway, I look forward to reading more of Tenten's lessons and her living with Naruto, Sakura, and Ino. I can already see that they'll be quite happy together. :)

    Oh, BTW... Did you ever thought of having Naruto use his Kage Bushins during any of his sessions with any of his pets? I'm sure the girls will not mind getting 'gang bang' by their master. XD
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  • From theimpacientone on July 21, 2009
    I liek the chapter, but why did you change the point of view to first person?
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  • From jupmod on June 16, 2009
    Great! You added Tenten to become Naruto's third pet. I always love this kunoichi, for she was the first Konoha kunoichi of Naruto's age group in the series to take being a ninja seriously. A matter of fact, now that I think about it, her being a serious kunoichi to accept training to become strong does make her more acceptable to the slave lifestyle. She will obey and do so willingly in order to get stronger. It's in her nature, and I'm sure she will get stronger thanks to Naruto's training as well as along the way love him as Ino and Sakura does. :)

    So I look forward to the next chapter and reading more of Tenten's training. :)
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  • From theimpacientone on June 05, 2009
    still great! but I was wondering if you could do something with Kurenai.
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  • From Yamizenchou on June 05, 2009
    Ya know, I was rather into this story at first but my interest has completely waned. Maybe it's cause I don't really care for Sakura or maybe it's cause I'm not really that much into BDSM. I'm dominant but only so much so. So sorry, but I think I'm gonna stop reading this; I've simply lost interest.
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  • From theimpacientone on May 06, 2009
    love the fic
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 05, 2009
    dude you are a god among literary geniuses. i love this story. it'd be nice to have more of anko and hinata.
    maybe even her losing a bet to naruto and naruto getting carte blanche to have her in his dungeon for a few days.
    i mean naruto ass fucking hinata is such a hot idea and doing it whilst she is in stocks just ups the hottness.
    one other thing when sakura or ino next get into the "tentacle" room describe the place so far you've only said she gets to go there if she's a really good girl but not what the place is or what happens in there! the last thing would be i know you have tenten slated to be naruto's next slave and end his harem there but i think you should add hana inuzuka as well. maybe by her mother offering her because she knows that naruto can properly take care of her needs hehehe.
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  • From Firebullet19 on March 25, 2009
    I really expeted a lot more of Tsume in this chapter then there was but other wise a great chapter can't wait for the next update.
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  • From fenrir7139 on March 24, 2009
    W00T! Update! I loved the exposition, dude! Good work!
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  • From Leaprechaun1 on March 24, 2009
    Yay!!!!!! I was worried that you might not update again!!!!!!
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