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Reviews for This is Not a Game [Complete]

By : JaydenNara
  • From ANON - Anon on February 24, 2012
    ooooh yay a friend from within :) there is hope after all! im still trying to figure out... WHO THE FUCK BOUGHT SASUKE???!!! TOBI???!!! lol man this shit is too exciting lol well... not the naruto getting tortured part. thats not exciting ar all lol it makes me wanna cry... poor sasuke, im surprised he isnt broken, poor kid. his parents murdered, he's kidnapped, his boyfriend's tortured in front of him, he's been sold like property... poor poor kid. keep up the good work. im glad you make updates at least once a month. some peopple either arent as dedicated or just simply die. good job, u, good job ^_^
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  • From ANON - Princess Sin on February 10, 2012
    who could it be that wants sasuke so bad? for some strange
    reason sakura keeps popping into my head. could she be the
    one that had sasuke kidnapped. but no, she wouldn't/couldn't
    be that stupid. could she? i can't wait to find out.
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  • From Crosetree on February 08, 2012
    So glad you updated this. been itching to find out what's gonna happen.

    small note, though. you dont use "oh" before fifteen hundred hours or nineteen hundred hours since that would make the time 015:00/019:00. skip the "oh" for any times from ten in the morning (10:00). it's a bit confusing system for those used to AM and PM instead of 24-hours clock.
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  • From ANON - moonprincess90 on February 07, 2012
    OMG!!!!! I
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  • From smint45 on February 07, 2012
    Finally an update!!!!! I'm so happy!!!! Thank you so much!!!! So Sai isn't hte bad guy^^ Thats great that they have some help down there!!! I hope they will be able to get out there alive!!! See you again soon!!!
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  • From moonprincess90 on December 15, 2011
    WOW! OUR POOOR BOYS!!! I really do love your work I hope you keep writing. What will happen? I'm pretty sure the one who paid for Sasuke is Tobi. Will they save them in time? or will Sasuke get taken? If Sasuke dose get taken and goes above ground to leave LEAF will have the looc. for Naruto and he may get saved. Oh so many ways the story can go. I'm looking forward to reading it so much. ^_^ Thanks for the great story!!!!
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  • From moonprincess90 on December 14, 2011
    By the gods your a GREAT writer!! I've spent 2days reading this fic. I'm almost caught-up. I love this fic! the pairing, the style of your work, are wonderful. Keep up the great work.
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  • From ANON - ForeverAndEver on December 13, 2011
    So happy to see an update from you! I know you've been busy with school, but I didn't mind waiting at all. And it was well worth the wait! This chapter was great, and like usual left me wanting more! I like the Naru/Sasu parts the best ;) but they are my bias anyway. Don't be discouraged with a lack of reviews right away...it happened to me as well with my stories. If you are gone for a little bit it sometimes takes readers a little while to leave feedback. Sorry I was late leaving you a review! But I can't wait for the next chapter! I check my FB every day to see if you've updated, haha.
    Till next time!
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  • From Madamdragon on December 13, 2011
    Great update. Sorry for not commenting sooner. Forgive me? But I hope you update again soon please.
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  • From ANON - Teagan on December 13, 2011
    Naw! Itachi is the cutest uke ever! (Assuming he is, in fact, the uke.) What a fucking cutey! And an an an an and, gah! Just, ah, shutting up.
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  • From ANON - Teagan on December 13, 2011
    Ahhh!! >< How cute is little Sasuke all shy and embaressed about Naruto! I just wanna pinch his little cheeks, lol. Im sooo very muchly enjoying this story! Its three in the morning and I refuse to stop reading, lol. Love it! Keep it up! Incase it dosn't tell u since Im a newb at reviewing on this particulr site, Im up to them having coffee and Nar dropping Sasuke at home.
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  • From smint45 on December 13, 2011
    Yay you are back!!!!!! I'm so happy!!!! I really hope Kakashi will find a way to find them!!!! But Naruto is holding up great so far!!!! I so can't wait for more!!!! Hope to see you soon!!!!!
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  • From moodysavage on December 12, 2011
    so awesome to read more!!! I really like that Kisame dies. Served him right. And I like Naruto and Sasuke snuggling and Sasuke trying to protect Naruto. And Itachi and Kyuubi snuggling in Naruto's room and Itachi commenting on all the orange... sweet with a lghter moment. This chapter was balanced very well because it would have been too painful to read if it had been all about Naruto being beaten.
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  • From Daktalakpak on November 28, 2011
    [ "You weren't supposed to." The raven was sure the other man could hear the pounding of his heart as he waited for the answer to the most important question yet. Kyuubi could be forgiven for concealing the truth from him if he truly did love him. It would be enough.

    The car was silent for a moment before the LEAF agent drew a deep breath. "Yes," he whispered, eyes still focused intently on the road. ]

    This part has a mistake that many struggle with. When Itachi asks with a negative, Kyuubi's answer should be negative too since I think you mean that he wasn't supposed to fall in love.
    I know you made it into a statement kind of thing but still just one word answer should be in same form.
    This is how it goes:
    Q: You were supposed to fall in love with me?
    A: Yes, I was./No, I was not.

    Q: You were not supposed to fall in love with me?
    A: No, I was not supposed to./ Yes, I was supposed to.

    So I know you might not have noticed this but it really helps when you constract the whole sentence just to make it clear even for yourself that what is the right answer.

    I know this probably sound like I am some kind of grammar freak but I just found this interesting. :) You are a good writer.


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  • From ANON - Kayla on November 18, 2011
    I'm reviewing to rage on the lack of chapter. Where is it!!!! I need my fix! So yes. There is my mini rage. Hope you enjoyed it.


    P.S. UPDATE!!!!!!!
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