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By : DarkRainFiend
  • From ANON - Aice on July 12, 2007
    Wow. This is good.

    Ehm...though I can't decide to end it here or there.

    Anyway... really love Shino and Naruto.
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  • From ANON - Ana on July 12, 2007
    It doesn't really matter to me which one you pick. I know indesicive people are the worst but if I had to pick i guess I would pick the two-shot. I actually really like this couple but I guess many authors dont or dont know how to write them well. I think that you are doing a great job. Until next time ^.~
    ~Ana~
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  • From blueinu on July 12, 2007
    full on descriptive lemon with lots of fluff and devotion of two souls in love,finding love and creating it...maybe add fluff along the way to help boost plot line devlopment, as well as add some drama for effect.

    plz dont chop up the chapters,i like how long they r it feels like they r long enough with out becoming overly so.do keep up the good work and i do so hope to see some more of this wonderfully made piece soon...

    ja ne
    blueinu

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  • From ANON - Anon on July 11, 2007
    2-shot please! ^_^
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  • From nekoleopard on July 11, 2007
    make it a twoshot please it's so good add the lemon but also as your takein suggestions i think you should empisize the love factor between shino and naru as you have been doing during the smut and when shino and naruto return sakura has just concived a child so sasuke is starting to feel better, well a couple days after they get back sasuke sees them at ichrakus and is going to talk to naruto and tell him he is sorry and that sakura has conviced when he sees shino and naruto kissing passionatly then reviled is shino's sadistic streak as he sees the uchiha staring at them and furthers the kiss then shino lets go and naruto turns around to see what shino is looking at and finds sasuke who is writhing in anger and says something along the lines of "oh sakura's pregnant" and either naruto or shino say that naruto is too makeing the uchiha bastard feel like shit.

    or at least something that makes sasuke look like the retard he is, but you don't have to follow my suggestions i just want to see sasuke feel even worse than he made naruto feel

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  • From serenagold on July 10, 2007
    I really hope you do update and finish this story (and in one long chapter too,) hehe.

    Personally, so long as you're taking suggestions, I'd love to see the story continue with maybe some nervious first experience ShinoNaru smut that ends with Naruto's overwhelming joy at waking up to find Shino cuddled up against him the following morning, leaving the fox vessel with an unfamiliar feeling of warmth, acceptance, worth, and love. ^^ Then a flash forward to Sasuke back in Konoha. 8 months have passed with nothing regarding Naruto. Sakura still isnt pregnant, but is constantly around feeling somewhat secure in their couplehood. Sasuke is filled with nothing but regret regarding his decission, but figures he's not going to put all that time spent with Sakura to waste so he's been putting up with her to hopefully impregnate her and be done with it. When Naruto and Shino return to the village, Naruto is completely over Sasuke and moves in with Shino. Sasuke, hearing that his dobe is back, goes to the blonde's apartment to confess his true feelings, only to find that the blonde has moved. Tsunande will not tell him anything about his whereabouts and Sasuke is miserable. After some legwork and finally comming across Naruto with Shino (whom he does not know is with him romantically), Sasuke somewhat angerly attempts to yell at Naruto for avoiding him, only to be shocked speachless at a sight of a pregnant Naruto who is just starting to show.

    The whole thing needs to end with Sasuke feeling a massive loss and Naruto telling him off with Shino wrapping his arms around him. Sasuke sees that everything he ever wanted walking out of his life forever (go Naruto! Hooray self-worth!) and quite frankly could go die in a ditch somewhere afterwards since, quite frankly he deserves it the bastard(!), but the whole ditch part should probably be best left out of the story since it would ruin the impact of the ending. Happy Naruto and Shino walking off together = best ending ever!

    =^^= hehehe.

    of course, feel free to end the story anyway you like. your first chapter has already more then proven your skill as an author and story teller so I'm sure whatever you decide on will be fine. keep pu the good work!
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  • From ANON - TimeFlys on July 10, 2007
    I love this story- You never see this pairing and it makes me very happy that someone has done it. Shino never gets the loving he should and I feel that Sasuke constently take Naruto for grantet. (not that I don't love SasuNaru fics....) I hope you continue to write more to this. I'm very intrested in the plot and were it is going- not just the sex. (that doesn't always happen. lol) I want to find out how naruto gets over sasuke and how sasuke responds once he finds Shino/Naruto together. Looking forward to your next update!
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  • From Pyrokage on July 10, 2007
    I think that you should continue this fic. I would like to read about the reactions of everyone else in Konoha and the Rookie 9. Please send me an email when you update.
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  • From ANON - sapphire11224 on July 09, 2007
    Please continue the story. I really want to know what happens next between Naruto and Shino (one of my fav pairings) and what happens with Sasuke after that.
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  • From avila7989 on May 16, 2007
    i would like to c more chapters in this fic. i want to see wat happends between naruto and sasuke and of course the relationship of shino and naruto going further. sasuke MAJORLY hurt naruto and i want to see wat happends when they meet agian seeing as sasuke still loves naruto. i hope you update sooooooooooooon!!!
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  • From xunerasablesinx on May 11, 2007
    Personally, I think it could go either way. The tone of the story wouldn't be destroyed if you added one (and it would satisfy many people's inner fangirls), but at the same time an implied lemon would compliment the relationship building you're trying to achieve. I would also like to see this become a mini multi-chaptered story because, although you've succeeded in writing a complete one-shot, you've also peeked my interest in the ShinoNaruto pairing and I would love to see more from you on this couple.

    Either way, I'm a big YES! Good luck and I can't wait to see more beautiful writing from you.

    Ja ne
    ~Sin
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  • From Kare on May 09, 2007
    I personally love this fic. I like the way you've written it, and I like the way that Naruto and Shino are progressing towards each other. If I had my way, I'd say that this would be a long multi-chapter, because I love well written long multi-chapters. I'm interested in how their relationship would progress long term. And I can't help but be curious of the kids they'd have.

    But since I can't always have my way, I do think that it should be a multi-chapter for as long as you're willing to take it. I wasn't sure about this pairing at first, but you wrote it very well and I love it.

    I think that a lemon would be a sweet/romantic add-on, I mean like the sappy kind and nothing too crazed. So, there's my two cents. Please update!! ^_^
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  • From LadyAquill on May 07, 2007
    ...half my reveiw got lost....>.< no lemon if it's gonna ruin the story. would be good if u can swing it but its not vital. ^^ might i just add that i reckon u are the AWESOMEST for writing a shinonaru fic?
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  • From LadyAquill on May 07, 2007
    many chapters, coz it makes it easier to read and possibley more story time....>.>
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  • From Nekoastrid on May 05, 2007
    this fic is really good, and I think you should continue it, it would kinda of ruin it or throw it off if you just threw in a lemon out of no where and it should be about the relationship. so it would be nice if you wrote out a few chapters and then maybe after everything is said and done you can add a lemon, but if people complain just add a few intamate parts here and there like you did in the first chapter. yay for shino and naruto there really arn't enough of this pairing around. sasuke you ass how could you! >,< and the pink wonder is just a bitch for going along with the bastard.
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