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By : onesickmind

From on January 17, 2008
nice. i really like it.
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From ANON - Tessa on January 08, 2007
Wow, I love your fic. Someone recommended your stories to me and they were right, you ARE very good. I loved this story and can't wait to read the sequel.

So you like non-con, violent bloody sex involving Sasuke? You are my best friend, since that it exactly what I like. I don't know if you are still accepting requests like you said at the end of this fic but if you are, would you mind writing this story:

Sasuke and Kakashi on a mission are captured by Kisame and Itachi and the two Akatsuki members use (read torture) Sasuke to make Kakashi talk. I've had many wet dreams about this unwritten story and was tempted to write it, but I want someone else to write this one so I can read. You seem to be the perfect person for that so would you please please consider my request?
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From ANON - Horong on November 28, 2006
Yah Holy shit, get some sleep and write more of this pairing!!! It rocked!!! And yah, holy shit it rocks. Duh, I'm bad at curses -.- Please write more^^
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From ANON - spiritualized on February 13, 2006
hi xD
hmh, i doubt you get this =/ *mostly writes reviews for nothing*
anyway, great story and one of my favorite pairings ^^ (ita/sasu, kaka/sasu *mwaha* *twisted mind* )
beautifully written... i guess, non-con doesn't really fit kaka/sasu (or it'd be shota maybe, then... i just don't like one-sided kaka/sasu)
um, request... hmh, write more kaka/sasu ='D i liked kakashi in this fic o.o not giving in is somehow more interesting. poor sasuke, though =3
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From ANON - Shari on November 28, 2005
Aw, I like this story a lot. Your quite good at consensual. Very nicely written, sufficiently in character, and I'm a sucker for unhappy endings.

As for requests, I agree with a previous reviewer that I'd like to see some NejiSasu (I'm a fan of uke-Sasuke, so really anything like that is great), or KibaSasu/ShikaSasu might be interesting since not many people seem to write it. I like "first-time" kind of stories as well, by which I don't necessarily mean losing virginity, but rather any instance in which the characters do not already have an established relationship. For some reason that tends to come across as too routine.
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From ANON - Nushi on October 12, 2005
I really liked this. Kakashi is sooooo awesome in this fic that it makes me want to write him like that too. Sexy bastard could do that to me anytime�except for I�m a girl�and I don�t have a penis�

Oh, and I know you said you'd take ideas for Sasuke X someone but...would you consider doing a Yondaime X Kakashi fic? ~gives you big sad puppy eyes~ I'm just getting into the whole yaoi thing (YEAH FOR PRETTY BOYS HAVING SEX!) and want to find a YonKaka fic that is actually good. You could definitely pull it off.

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From ANON - LauRa on August 19, 2005
Woot! Now THIS, I LOVE. It was great! Angst and smut. *sigh* If the request box is still open, anyhting concerning Sasuke will do.
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From ANON - Anon on July 28, 2005
Ok, here's my request: I noticed that you rec'd The Heart of Konoha, which is one of my favorite fics ever. Ever since I read it I have been LONGING to see the prequel in which Sasuke is held captive and raped by Itachi. Since you like Sasuke and noncon I think you may be just the person to write it! Or just a random fic in which Sasuke is held captive and raped by Itachi, doesn't have to be prequel to Heart of Konoha :) But I'm sure you get the idea!
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From wherdatcomfrom on July 18, 2005
I found this to be a very well written story and the descriptions were vivid. I was in no way disappointed by the ending, Kakashi is a pervert after all, and he would only give what he wanted to keep his student happy, well not so happy, but satisfied?
My only concerns are that you failed to research your topic.
Victims of Hypothermia should never be given a *hot* showers, baths or drinks. In fact you never give any fluids to them. Also, they must be kept from any form of walking. Barring that, It was a great theme to go with. Any teenage boy would recover fast, but with his build and size the condition would not be hard to believe of the skinny little Uchiha boy.
I only bring up these point to show that in writing of this sort, giving faulty information could cause some potential harm. If some one read it and actually came in contact with a person in need and improperly treated them. Hypothermia is a dangerous condition.
Keep up the writing, I will keep reading. Love it so far.
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From Kusachu on July 18, 2005
LMFAO..."why?"...heh...you asked for it now...*is opening "The Box"* WARNING!!! TANGENT BABBLING AHEAD

Dear One Sick Mind,

Well...you see...*evil cackle* it's just that...*sounds totally stalker-ish* I feel as though i know you from somewhere...perhaps in another life?? O.o
And then...there's that whole thing about Hiei (with me anyway...*snicker*)...it freaks me out...(because she is a wierd pervert and accepts/flaunts that fact d(^-^)b)
You see...I've never seen Yu Yu Hakusho (or whatever) and quite a few of my pals can't seem to believe it *is talking to one right now on IM* (...lol...he says Hiei is sort of like Vegita...who i just love...) ...and they just keep fucking with me about it!!! And all of them...both guys and girls...just have this huge hard on for Hiei!!!...and then there was that reviewer...also with the Hiei...I don't know who the fuck Hiei is...but for some reason i feel compelled to find out...because you seem to love him too...and Sasuke...and i love you (Barney style LMAO)...and i just LOOOVE Sasuke too...

that reminds me...about Dead Brother...i need to thank you...really...(this also has to do with Itachi and a rasp)...heh...you see...for quite a while now...I've been writing this delicious (in my idiot opinion anyway) scene that involves Itachi...and his squee ass little psychotic foolish little brother...and then...after i read Dead Brother...everytime i sit down to continue where i left off...(because i like to skip around when i write stuff that involves a ton of 'stream of consciousness' shit) i couldn't help but think about Itachi being fucked by a rasp...and it still makes me twitch...heh...so it's taking me a really long time...which is okay...because i really did love Dead Brother and it made me feel cheeful! and also made me twitch...which is a hard thing to do...and now after reading THIS story...i see him there again!!! Hiei! and it made me chuckle...and then there is Sasuke and Itachi and so much rape and (and that rasp O.O !!!*twitch*) and mother fucking Hiei! was that even in this story?? which stroy is this?? OH! duh...*looks at the title* *shivers* FUCKING YUCK! LMFAO! this story is so fucking sick it makes me twitch MORE!!! Your level of sickness...fills me with GLEE! and i totally get why you would move beyond simple RAPE fics to have THIS kind of con! *eye twitch* Fucking BARF! GAAAA! That fucking blow job man!!! it's just so yuck i just can't believe it!

OH! but that person who left you that flame about it (the blow job) was totally a dick and i want you to know that it was VERY MUCH not me that did that...because now i see that you might think it was...since these things are so ambiguous and all...Anyway...you are very talented indeed and i enjoy your madness. *wants to slap the flamer*
I love your fics and have "pimped" them to a couple of folks...who i think also liked them too...so yay!

anyaways where was i?
Oh yeah...Hiei...and Sasuke...and Itachi...and rape...i want to see it. And the image of the cotton candy and carnival rides...makes me cackle madly...but i would never be able to sit down and write something like that (because i can't stop twitching)...so i thought maybe since you are so great at writing sick wierd shit...pehaps maybe...but alas...sigh...you already said that it was a stupid idea...so i became sad...and then i went to get something to eat...and then i saw that mean ass insult that that rude mean person left and didn't even leave an email address...and then i felt like a bastard because i left that reiew about the carnival rides and clowns...and i didn't leave my email either...so, i left that review for you in Dead Brother...i think...about "why"...and "i said what about THIS one" because i saw all of your other fics in a cute little row...and you left Dead Brother out...and i was like "WTF? That one needs to be on the front page too because people need to fucking read it because it is fucking great!" and i was feeling silly and snickering madly and i couldn't resist!! I had to review it AGAIN! YAY! I LOVE IT! OMFG...i need to stop this RIGHT NOW!!! but i just love to rant and go on tangents!!!!
So yeah...um...i hope you are laughing right now because i ranted all this right now just for you. And i'm supposed to be doing H/W...*cries* and really i think i was just trying to make you laugh...when i did all that stuff...or freak you out really bad...but that would be okay too, because you ARE stalking me after all...or so you say...*wink*

Anyways again...
damn...that took a lot out of me! I could have been writing UCHIHA-CEST right now!!! Ah well, time well spent i say.

now for my real review of this story. I did like it. the shower part...i think that the water probably WOULD have felt a bit like HOT NEEDLES to someone who was that cold...it would have been better if the water was not hot but just barely warm...or not there at all because being dry is best for people who have hypothermia (snugly in a blacket or sleeping bag with another's body heat)...but that was not the point of the fic though, so who cares nay? The point was that sick blow job...gak!
now...i have to thank you...on top of the image of Itachi being fucked with a rasp..i have the image of Kakashi giving a very twisted, fucked up in the brain (my personal fav!) sasuke, that ridiculously disgusting blowjob...*madsnickeringensues* and now how am i ever going to finish writing my Uchiha-cest?? O.O

naw, i'll get it done someday...heh. It is my own fault. I can't stop reading this sick shit that you are so good at. So PLEASE WILL YOU WRITE ABOUT THE CARNIVAL?? EVEN IF IT"S STUPID, I PROMICE I WILL STILL LOVE IT!!! THAT BASTARD HIEI NEEDS TO GET RAPED!!! (even though if i ever watch that show i will probably like him)
alright. I'm done. and i'm sorry about my madness...it's 4 am and i have school to go to in a couple of hours...*YAWN*
so again...and again and again...as long as you keep up the good writing, i will keep reading. and thanks for the 'thank you; too! that was damned nice of you! *Hugs*
I hope my tangent has not made you think less of me...i am deprived of sleep right now...and before i was heh...smoking herbs...so yeah. Keep it up! love it!

*Hearts* and *Sparkles*
One DeadUchiha
d(^-^)b

Oh yeah! This one time, at band camp...*smirk*
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From AshtonRose on July 18, 2005
Hiya. I just wanted to say that this fic was a great idea and that once again you pulled it off splendidly... but what I can't figure out why all these people keep bashing how you portray Kakashi. I mean, I'm a big Kakashi fan too, but I think you're writing him totally in character. He's not some lovey dovey person, he's been through alot, and although he cares about his team and all that, he's still a badass. So it confuses me when people are offended by a Kakashi who seems indifferent or is a bastard... of course he's a bastard, haven't you even read the manga? People are ignorant and should try and open thier eyes a little and see what the character is really all about.

Sorry if this came across as angry, I usually don't write this kind of stuff, but when people can't recognize a spectacular fic when they see one, it really pisses me off. You did an excellent job with this fic, and I'd love some more KakashixSasuke in the future (noncon or not ^_^).

-Oboro
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From ANON - Abbyga�lle Leclerc on July 17, 2005
Whoa. I�m amazed to see consensual sex coming from your corner. �Stone Cold� has def been one of my favorite porny fics of late. This one was still friggin� sad, though. The lemon was a bit vague for my taste, but I guess that wasn�t so much the point with this one. I enjoyed it, but then I usually do when Sasuke gets hurt.

You mentioned requests?

I�d totally like to see some Neji/Sasuke. It�s very hot, and they�ve similar problems � major anger issues, curse seals that are ruining their lives, the inability to back down from a fight, and hella bitchy attitudes. I can see somebody commenting on the Sharingan evolving from/being a weaker version of the Byakugan, Sasuke arguing that the Byakugan is crappier, that leading to a fight between said Uchiha and said Hyuuga, and naturally, a fight leading to violent, non-consensual sex.

I�d also totally like to see a non-con Kabuto/Sasuke during the couple years the manga skips. You know, Sasuke getting injured during training, Kabuto healing him and then raping a drugged-out half-conscious Sasuke in the hospital room...
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From ANON - pl on July 17, 2005
nyuuuuu! poor sasuke! -o- I really like KakaSasu and this is actually the second m/m fiction I've read.
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From ANON - snacks on July 17, 2005
"Sasuke and Itachi get in a fight at a carnival and have sex among the dangerous machinery of the rides and cotton candy while clowns watch."

Hmmm...that's not a bad idea. Except, I like: Sasuke and Itachi fight with each other, verbally, while raping Hiei on a dangerous carnival ride. My personal favorite is "The Sizzler". After that, they rape and murder all the clowns, while sharing the cotton candy. Of course, after that, Itachi fucks Sasuke in the ass with the paper cone that the cotten candy came on.
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From ANON - maya on July 16, 2005
I just wonder when an author will write a KakaSasu fic that doesn't make me want to strangle her.

What's wrong with the lot of you that Kakashi always comes out as an insensitive bastard, who for some reason also sucks in bed.

ONE PATHETIC BLOWJOB?! Is that your idea of a hurt/comfort fic, you pathetic talentless loser?!
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