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Reviews for Stone Cold

By : onesickmind

From ANON - Kat on August 07, 2005
Mmm. Sexy. Kinda sad, but sexy. A welcome releif from sappy fics.
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From ANON - DeadUchiha on July 31, 2005
BWAHAHAHAHA!!! You were right, this one was short!!! But geeezus! I had stop in the middle to get up and walk circlrs around the room, chuckling ,while in my head screaming "What the FUCK!?!" You are pure evil! Ah...your sickness pleases me so much!! OMFGBATMAN!!! i want to see your Kisa/Ita fic so bad now!!!! Your aptness at psychotic violence makes me fucking quiver! DAMN GIRL! *claps merrily for you* Never have i seen Kakashi so evil!!! *thinks REAL hard how to describe for you "the sizzler"* WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! Your fics make me experience mad hysterical joy! d(^-^)b

The long paragraph, well, if you want to make it smaller, just make a new paragraph every few sentences. Since it�s not dialogue, it wouldn�t be confusing, and would help the reader be able to keep their place easier. (I lost mine a couple of times�but I�m scatterbrained�heh.)

Fucking goddam! That is so fucking cold for Kakashi to do. WEEEEE! I feel really insane now! The first person view was a nice touch. Sick, but nice at the same time. The thing that freaks ME out about it is that Sasuke, injured severely, and terrified, WAS STILL ABLE TO GET OFF ON IT! THAT�S FUCKING SICK! UBER PSYCHOTIC!!! That says nothing for the fact that THAT may very well have been the first time Sasuke had seen his sensei without his mask on!!! It would be fucked up if Kakashi had had a fucked up face! LOL!

As far as making this longer,,,um...i can't remember your suggestions...shit...well, unless it would be longer with just more fucked up raping�do you want to get other characters involved? Maybe show a bit of Sasuke�s POV either from HIS First person view of the original events or perhaps the aftermath�I guess the way you want to go depends on what main idea you are going for with the piece�My guess is that you just mainly want to fuck with peoples heads, so, that leaves open a wonderland of possibilities! Gah�Let�s chat more about it if you want�
Laters!

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From Potemkin on July 23, 2005
Yeah, you're a sicko. In the best possible way. I found your story by accident looking for Bleach stuff...who even knows why the search returned KakaSasu rape. I do love Sasuke, however...too bad I also love Kakashi and he's an ass in this. Nonetheless, yay for non-con yumminess and *especially* yay for implied Uchihacest non-com yumminess. Good story.
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From ANON - Oboro on July 15, 2005
I absolutely loved this fic!! I can't get enough KakashixSasuke, and this really hit the spot. I also liked the reason why Kakashi did it, it made it seem more.... real. The first person POV was done very well, but I wouldn't mind reading it from other POVs. I'm really looking forward to the next installment of this fic! Oh, and you write the best rape scenes I've ever read. (And I've read a ton, so that's saying alot) ^_^
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From Finality on July 14, 2005
Holy God, that was absolutely... wierd. I never really thought about something so random happening, but it wasn't that disturbing. I like how it was in Kakashi's point of view. Nicely written. Sasuke was kind of OOC, though, because of the crying.

~Finality.
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From ANON - Buras_Mew on July 13, 2005
Omg... that is a compeatly creative reason for Kakashi to rape Sasuke. o_
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From ANON - xxxx on June 21, 2005
Wow. Why on earth did you write this? Why did I read it?? ^__^ We probably need to see a shrink. . .all of us. Oh boy. Why ARE we writing/reading this kind of torture? And requesting more? DO write more, btw! Sasuke in bed with Orochimaru. . .poor kid. He's so messed up already!

The critique: This was unrealistic, but I think you already knew that. (If not. . .Kakashi was OOC. Bastard!Kakashi. [Sasuke? Not so much. Rape is traumatic. You did him all right.]) To fix confusion, just put some more of Kakashi's thoughts into the begining. In italics. Or have him talk to himself. . .help us get into his head by writting out explicitly what he's thinking. That'll get you away from TELLING us what's going on, and move you to SHOWING us. THat's so much more cool! Everyone draws their own interpretations, and the characterization is a lot more solid.

So. Put some of that "I'm fucking him to make him think of me like Itachi-- and therefor be able to defeat his elder brother-- and get stronger. This is just training" attitude into the begining? In the form of thoughts.

Anyway, good start. Try and put some thoughts into it?
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From ANON - KK on June 20, 2005
*glancing up at one of the other reviewers* Wow, don't you hate people who completely ignore warnings, apparently don't even read the summary of a story, then want to complain about the content of the story?

Okay, I'm really bad at subtlety, so I'll just drop all pretense and get this off of my chest, because when reading through the reviews of this story and finding the review by Germaine, I was annoyed enough that I had to tell him/her/it just how much of an idiot he/she/it is.

1) The summary clearly said rape. In fact, I'm pretty sure it said, "Kakashi rapes Sasuke." It doesn't get much clearer than that. Want to complain about rape? Complain about the actual cases of rape, not an example of it in a story, where it doesn't actually hurt any living human being.

2) Don't like incest? Don't read a story that might have it. You see signs there may be incest, you leave. It's that simple. Since you're apparently not fond of this story anyway, that shouldn't be hard for you. There's no need to leave a review about content that you dislike. Content is up to, oh, the AUTHOR of the story. A good reviewer leaves reviews with constructive criticism, but obviously, you know nothing about what a good reviewer does, so I'm probably talking to a brick wall here.

3) I've seen your stories. You have no room to criticise the work of anyone else, especially when their fic was a hell of a lot better written than any of yours could hope to be. I wouldn't usually make a personal attack to prove a point, but... well, you deserved it.

There. I feel much better.

NOW onto my actual review XD To the author of this fic, I'm terribly sorry about that rant, and for taking up your review space for it, but I just had to get that off of my chest. Excellent work with your story. It was well-written, something this site could use a bit more of. Keep up the good work, and if you don't have a beta, I'd love to help. I'll look forward to more possible installments of this fic.
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From eardell on June 20, 2005
WOOTENS!! Very good!! Nicely written, and wow, it was good. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more!
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From ANON - Germaine(2 lazy 2 sign in) on June 19, 2005
No offence...but I won't continue reading this...cause first of all...I hate incest with all my heart...cause I got a brother and a sister....and incest's just plain sick...second of all...I detest rape...and theird of all...I'm already a depressed person...I shouldn't get more depressed than I'm already am...I just can't see how you could write something this horrible...and I'm talking about the whole rape scenario....

~Germaine~

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From ANON - - on June 19, 2005
wow i like the pov that was very well done and the ending was pretty cool to ^^
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From ANON - oOKeairaOo on June 19, 2005
I am SO going to hell for reading this right after church and right BEFORE going to eat lunch with my grandparents. ^^; Ah well.

Anyway, the story was very well-written, great job, and in response to your author's note, I would like to see this continued, after finding out Kakashi's motives at the end. I'd also love to see some ItaSasu from you, as it's my favorite pairing and you seem to be a good author to attempt something like that. >> In fact, I'll go check out your profile, to see if you already have.

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From ANON - Billy on June 11, 2005
I don't know if I'll get any emails that are sent.
You should have it that in time Sasuke starts likeing Kakashi'
and Kakasi justs fucks him even harder and worse till some Itachi makes Kakashi tell from all his mental guilt or someting.
Love ya!!!!!!
-Billy
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From ANON - S2 on June 10, 2005
Maybe you should make a pairing out of it, ne? It would be very interesting if there was a pairing and maybe than Kaka or Ita gets all crazy jealous. ^-^ Plz write another chapter? I really like this.
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From ANON - faith on June 10, 2005
wtf what's up with this fucked up review thingy -_- shit....

um yeah i wanted to say nice fic your my idol!!!
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