Reviews for To Be HokageBy : MrVectorPath |
Wish Hiruzen left the panties be! Good chapter
a luxury chapter 10/10 I will look forward to the next one
I liked that chapter, but I feel that the last one was too short.
I have to say that I would have liked that last part, of "Kushina's dream", maybe it would be good if you made it longer next time.
maybe have her read a part of the book icha icha, and have her act out those situations in her dreams and see how she experiences them.
If she doesn't know what to think about what she experiences, if are dreams that she likes or if she just lets herself go without being aware that it is a dream.
I think for this point you can make some good scenarios.
the plot is good, not too fast and not too slow
I really enjoy your story, and I like a lot the "side stories" one, I will waiting for the next.
I like this kind of story because no is just porn without context
Story is getting more fluid. Pacing makes a lot of sense. Are we still getting the school visit arc.
I say yes it's a slow....slow burn but by God at least it's well paced in its way to it. So keep it up
Good pacing. I like how you added backstories to your OC so it's more than just so or so charactering lusting over Kushina. Along with snippets of their inner thoughts, it adds a lot of extra flavor to the story. The subtle hints for future storyplots also builds a nice tension for a slowburner like this.
Great chapter. Looking forward to more, hope you update soon. :)
Love the slow buildup. Enjoy the scenes where people fantasize about Kushina (whether through dreams or what not). Looking forward to the next chapter.
Hola me parece una maravilla de historia muy bien el manejo de kushina poco a poco estoy emocionado por el proximo capitulo
Me gusta como estás desarrollando la trama, es una historia entretenida, además de que me parece muy bien que los cambios en la personalidad de Kushina sean poco a poco, espero con ansias el próximo capítulo y dónde creo que la personalidad de Kushina va a sufrir su primer gran cambio.
Sobre la longitud del capítulo creo que debes hacerlos tan largos como creas conveniente.
Espero tu próxima actualización y también quisiera saber si harás una historia con Tsunade como protagonista que tenga una trama parecida a esta.
Me parece una buena historia hasta ahora, espero que continúes actualizando hasta terminarla y no abandones esta historia porque realmente me está gustando.
Liked this second chapter I hope we get to read more from you now
Hey man don't worry about your English, the story is easy to follow along and that's all that really matters. Been a while since your last update so I hope everything is going well and we see which direction this story will go. I see that you're a fan of the other slutty kushina story, there's been a lot of ideas shared by people in that review section so feel free to visit for inspiration. If you want more detailed ideas or any help l then click my name and you'll see how to reach me
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