Reviews for The Heir & the HeiressBy : eevee_erin |
Yo.... holy damn that was an amazing third chapter. I want to see the honeymoon scene after that. I hate Sasuke’s character as a whole so i’m very surprised I even gave this story a chance going by the name, summary and first two chapters, but damn did that third chapter make up for all of it.
The only thing i’d caution is check spelling and grammar more. You had quite a few misspelled words, you also switch perspectives with Sakura a few times, and words were misplaced or used incorrectly.
I’m looking forward to the narusaku moments in this story. (I don’t want to detract from your main focus of the story, but I want to be honest what i’m reading for)
good luck
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