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From GobletofFenrir on April 18, 2017
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From ANON - YaoiCracker on April 07, 2013
Please Keep it going! The chapters are very short, so i hope the next one will come very soon and finally, you know, get to the point. Its written well, and the anticipations bulding up, im looking forward to it a lot!
But five chapters! I hope 6 is the golden one.
Anyways, good job! Can't wait!
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From ANON - Anon on April 06, 2013
So Naruto is a BDSM prostitute? Not a surprise considering the interview he had. I like mysteriousness of The Council, though I'm at a place where I'm starting to get a little anxious for some of those mysteries to be solved. Are they some kind of major criminal organization, or just a high class prostitution ring? I'm doubting they're all that nefarious, despite Haku's story, since they were advertizing for new recruits by putting up flyers on university campuses. What sort of major criminal organization does something like that? Talk about leaving a literal paper trail for the cops to follow.

One thing though, I really don't like the "pity me" vibe Naruto has in the story. Is someone putting a gun to his head and FORCING him to do this job? The Council seems shady, and Naruto apparently has "contractual" obligations, but based on Kiba's conversation with Sakura, people can get fired and leave. So as far as I can tell, Naruto signed up for this job of his own free will and continues doing it of his own free will. So he's not a victim. He has a college degree and a father waiting for him back in the United States. If he's really sick of it all, he could ditch London and this lifestyle and start over in the US. I'm just complaining about this because Naruto is always so forgiven in fics no matter what he does, and this is a case where, if he's unhappy with his job and has been "corrupted" by it or whatever, he put himself in this situation, keeps himself in this situation, and therefore has nobody to blame but himself. So why should we feel bad for him?

Instead of making him pitiable, I think it would be more honest to give him a flaw which explains why he'd keep on doing a humiliating job he hates. Maybe he likes the easy money he gets for this job more than he cares about his self-respect. (A flaw is good for character development anyway since it's something he can grow out of and overcome.) I'd suggest just making him like being a sex worker and not having it be a problem, but it's already clear he thinks of his job as a problem and is unhappy with it, so the why of it can't be avoided.

So next chapter Sasuke shows up? The expected route is that Sasuke is the birthday boy, he and Naruto don't initially like each other, Naruto ends up blowing his mind once they get down to it, and then Sasuke gets obsessed and wants to keep doing it with Naruto, even going so far as to find out his real identity and track him down in person, outside of work. Will you do it that way, or will you have some kind of twist for us?
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From ANON - Athrun434 on April 06, 2013
that was so cool. I was just getting into the story. cant wait for the next chapter
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From smint45 on April 05, 2013
Interesting story so far^^I still only have a vague idea what naruto does but the next chappys will probably clear things up^^ See you again soon!!!
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From ANON - AJ on August 12, 2012
(3) I've heard the term before, and it's the only way to describe her hair appropriately�Yeah. Moving on.

...What was wrong with "Sakura"? Eh, just because other people write "the pinkette," "the raven," etc. doesn't mean you should do it. Those phrases are clunky and silly and your writing is much better than that. (I promise, he/she + [character's name] will work every time, whereas stuff like "the ramen lover," or "the cerulean-eyed boy" rarely does.)

This storyline is unique. Naruto has just been recruited to be ...a high priced hooker? A spy? An industrial espionage expert who uses sex? Sakura is calm and professional in this fic, much better than her normally grating tsundere personality. She's still in character, but without the tears or abusiveness, which is refreshing.

I'll be eagerly awaiting future updates. Good luck with the rest of the fic. :)
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From Violetwylde on August 10, 2012
So happy to see another chapter! Though I have to say, this chapter raised more questions than it answered. It was amusing and revealed personalities quite well, but I found the ominous under tones to be disconcerting. Why is everybody so damn sad? I get the "leading the lamb to slaughter" theme with introducing Naruto to a nefarious organization (whatever it is that these people are), but they ALL seemed depressed by the end. If it had just been Kakashi OR Tsunade OR Sakura to be giving Naruto those pitiful looks, I would have been like - sure, makes sense. But with ALL of the them doing it... well I just found it unsettling.

Now, I know this was supposed to be a flashback and therefore, only a glimpse into Naruto's past... but I still feel like he should have gotten some kind of explanation - a general overview of job expectations. I understand he is hard up for cash, but still it seems he should have demanded at least a hint at his expected duties (especially after being asked to disrobe during his interview). Also, I noticed that he exchanged no information with Sakura and was given no instructions for where/when/how to prepare for his first job. How is he supposed to get all gussied up for his first job if he doesn't even know that he needs to be? I thought maybe that would be in the next chapter, but you said that was the end of the flashback... so now I am a little confused.

Don't get me wrong, I am still in LOVE with this fic but I think there was some gaps in the plot. I could be wrong of course, this could all be explained in the upcoming chapters (and really it isn't so much important, as it just seemed to be an oversight) so I won't dwell on it.

Nonetheless I am stoked for Sasuke's introduction and cannot wait to see what you have in store! XD
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From Violetwylde on July 31, 2012
I wish this site had an alert system so I know when new chapters come out! Can't wait for the next chapter. Normally these sort of "prequel" chapters irritate me, but this is written with such intrigue that I am anxious to see what happens next. I hope to read more soon! XD
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From BattyBigSister on July 22, 2012
Okay, I take it you've never really been to Britain, have you? A couple of things right of the bat:
1.) there are two mistakes everyone makes when trying to write about Britain without much knowledge. You've successfully circumnavigation one (if only because you haven't mentioned Thanksgiving. Seriously, Thanksgiving is ONLY celebrated in America for reasons that should be obvious if you think about it. A basic rookie error everyone seems to make... every time...), but landed smack-bang in the other. There is no such thing as a 'Freshman year' in schools or universities anywhere in Britain. There are also no Sophomores, Juniors, Seniors, Principles, Vice-Principles, Valadictorians and - usually - cheerleaders. (In fact my spell-checker doesn't even recognise the words 'sophomore' or 'Valadictorian', so apologies if I misspelt them.) Proms are steadily becoming more popular, so you can just about get away with that in anything set post-90s.
Confusingly, universities ONLY, do have 'Freshers' and 'Freshers Week'. Freshers are people who have just started University (never call it college. College in Britain is generally something else) and 'Freshers Week' is a week-long 'orientation exercise' before the formal start of lectures, full of ... alcohol mainly. (In Britain, the legal drinking age is 18. Most Freshers are that age and it's rare for ANYONE to spend much time sober during Freshers Week.) The term 'Freshers' is however generally only appropriate for the first few weeks of the autumn semester, after which it drops out of use. The Freshers having 'earned their stripes', as it were (largely by not dying of alcohol poisoning or general liver failure), we refer to 'First Year' (as the first year of university) and 'First Years' (people in their first year of university), followed by Second Year(s) and Third Year(s). A very few specialised courses may include a Fourth Year and some universities, most notably in Scotland (where Scottish Highers qualifications keep people in school for an extra year), include a Foundation Year BEFORE First Year, chiefly to ensure everyone is up to the same level of basic ability before First Year.
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2.)I'm really going to have to give you credit for trying here. ;0) It is true that most of Europe uses the metric system. Britain/the UK, by and large, only considers itself part of Europe when it doesn't have much other choice. We use a dual measurement system, which is to say, everyone does whatever they feel like at the time. It's not even uncommon for people to use metric and imperial interchangibly, depending on whatever unit they feel is nearest to what they want: for example, 'the body of the tadpole is approximately 7mm in length, but the adult frog can grow up to 3 inches long'. There are a couple of instances though were there is a traditional preference for imperial over metric or vice versa. Miles per hour, is one of them, but so surprisingly (and mostly relevantly to this story) are people's height and weight. Height can vary, but when I tell people I'm 174cm tall they will ask me what that is in feet and inches (and no, NOBODY can convert it in their heads). People's weight is usually given in our own special British unit 'stone', which - you might like to know - is an imperial unit. I'm (ideally) around 10 and a half stone, but if you asked me what that is in lb or kg I wouldn't have a clue... and neither would most other people in Britain. Commercially, on the other hand, the use of metric is more common... and things like cooking guides universally cater for both as you never know what kind of measuring jugs/scales people have at home.
Point being, Naruto's answer of 6'2" (or whatever it was) would have been not only acceptable, but preferred by pretty much everyone in Britain. It doesn't exactly need correcting as Naruto may in fact simply have been confused as to which measurement system to go with anyway, but I figured that was worth pointing out.
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Okay, a couple of minor quibbly bits just for the sake of being thorough. Avoid making people behave too much like they've walked out of a 19th century drama. It's fine for people like Iruka (such a 'specialised' company have probably put it in his job description as part of their 'service'), but I sincerely doubt even chauffeurs to the royal family are quite that deferential, so don't be afraid to make your normal people 'normal' where you feel its appropriate. Secondly, as a general rule, use the words 'Britain/ish' rather than 'England/ish', especially in a cultural sense, unless you are actually talking about the language. It avoids isolating, or worse upsetting, people from the rest of Great Britain (Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland).
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And - that's it. Moving on to an actual review. You write really well. Your portrayal of Naruto and Sai was entertaining and I loved the down-to-earth, homely feel of the first few chapters. You've got a real sense of mystery going, which is nice and I'm really curious as to see what this elusive 'entertainment' organisation is like. Don't get too intimidated by the British stuff (I know I made it sound scary. I'm good at making things sound scarier than they really are. -_-), but just remember 'No Thanksgiving', 'different school system' and 'football is a game played by kicking a ball with your feet' and you'll be fine. Everything else is forgiveable. Your writing is great and that's what people will remember.
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From Violetwylde on July 13, 2012
I too am an ffn refugee. While I am still trying to get accommodated to this site, I thought I would offer a bit of encouragement. I like what I have read thus far, I do wish the chapters were longer - because the story is intriguing and I want more. I can't begin to imagine who the woman is. I hope to find out soon. ;) So keep up the good work!
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From ANON - Dark_Blue_Princess on July 09, 2012
Awwww, I want to see hot man smex in this chapter.
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From Shielded-wings on June 26, 2012
I'm in lovveeee with this! please update soon!
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