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From Mija on March 18, 2012
Omg Omg that was hilarous! Dancing roaches! Singing! God that just hit me in the funniest way and then the last part where Sasuke wanted to scream then slap Shisui as he hobbled as fast as he could to the bathroom, I had the image of it in my head and it was soo funny, and ooooh Shisui and Itachi? Hot! Well Haku is out lol, unless they want to share, oh hey thats what you meant by threesome! lol, but arent Shisui and Itachi cousins? related? So is Sasuke freaking out over the whole gay factor, which I personally think he is the little drama gueen lol, or that combined with the incestiuous aspect? Does Sasuke even Know Shisui is related? Are they related or just friends? so confused, any I am loving this for some odd reason I thought they would be staying out in some ratty off the road jungle sort of place in a hut sort of bamboo shack thingy away from the city, that they are in apartments are soo much better I like it alot and they can blen in better, and omg Naruto LOVES it! how cute and Sasuke is in hell! ooh the horror! again hilarious, and ok ewwwwww Naru hands off Karin, ok she has a bod and all but but well she is not for YOU! lol, but tis funny that he wants in her pants and Sasuke knows it and is jealous hehe love his jeoulousy even if he wont admit it,,,,oh man I cant wait for the confrantation between Sasuke and Itachi, that is if Sasuke gets the courage to do it lol, thanks for another awesome read, cant wait till the next one, till then be safe happy and healthy, huggles and smiles Mija..:-) PS..LOL having my babies could be toxic they tend to be over bearing demanding little butt heads lol....
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From scarywoman on March 15, 2012
you have done it again. danceing cockroaches. i just about laughed histericaly. in all reality sasuke is handling it well. i have stayed the night in a place similar bar/motel to that. i still have nightmares and that was when i was in sevnth grade( many moons ago). there was a shared bathroom( probably for the whole establishment) it was scary.
i cant wait to see the conversation sasuke and itachi will have. i realy cant blame sasuke if he goes a little balistic on itachi. its a lot to swallow all at once. and to top it all off, he lived with a pedophile. his views on homosxuals most likely will be majorly skewed. most likely he will need time, and naruto luvin(raise eyebrows)
i have one observation that i feel is needed. translation for korean words and phrases would be a major blessing since( im assuming)most people reading this dont speak korean. i dont and it would help if i knew what the phrases or singular words ment. other then that you your story is awesome and you are my second favorit auther in the world. first goes to sherrilyn kenyon. read her stuff, its good, and published. if you are then let me know what you have written. i would love to read it.many thanks for the awesome update. i like how this story is long but it doesnt feel like your just repackageing the same chapter over and over. naruto and sasuke are growing, and it is fun to watch them grow and mature.
well gotta post this before i say to much and give you sasuke ego. have a great week, and update soon
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From missbri88 on March 14, 2012
New to the story & I took a day to read all 17chaps. I mean like I hid in the bathroom at work for 15mins to read on 3 different occasions because the story's that good! Lol. I totally can't wait for more.
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From Sabriel20 on March 07, 2012
sorry for my late review. I no longer have internet, so I'm using my parents. I really like this chapter. ver well written and interesting. I can't wait to see how Naruto and Sasuke get along in Korea.
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From Mija on March 07, 2012
OMG! First I have to say I was TORN!..seriously, my heart broke for Sasuke when he asked in his mind, his child self wailing at why his brother didn't come for him why he had left him, did he not love him? That made me cry, it made me see things a bit in Sasuke point a bit more clearly, I mean I knew it wasn't going to be a happy lets hug and cry manly tears sort of reunion, but man Sasuke was so right, in his mind, his brother had been alive all this time and had not once come for him or let him know he still lived and that in itself is almost unforgivable, thennnn we have Itachi's story, and that too made me cry, we know NOW why he couldnt and didnt come for his baby brother, he thought he was dead and omg how that must of hurt, and then the description of how he he held onto those pictures of his baby brother and Asuma? How he cried over them and they never left his person, that was awwwwww but heartwrenching as well...I mean it must of hurt him as well to know that all this time his baby brother was alive and alone with that snake..But seriously why did I think that Sasuke's attitude or Naruto's would change once out of that hell hole? Damn it seems like they are even meaner to each other now and poor Haku is being torn in half with his love for both, poor Haku, still I think he should be with Shisui, even if it makes Shisui a cradle robber lol, I am pretty sure Zabuza wasn't exactly young and Shisui is ever so much more handsome lol, but Shisui is a cold person, but guess he had to be huh? Cant believe he was working for the man who helped with the murder of his mother and sister as well as all the other clan members, although he didnt know that then, bet it eats him up now that he knows, although hes known for sometime now so he is probably over it..just saying..and omg my jaw hit the keboard in shock when Itachi slapped Sasuke for saying that to Naruto, I mean YA, Sasuke deserved it, but to have it come from Itachi? I was shocked but then very glad, at least Sasuke knows that regardless of anything, as much as Itachi does love him, he will not put up with Sasuke superious behaviour and wont sit back and let him without putting him in place...and darn it just when we are getting into they why's and hows of Naru's Dad and his life, it is put on hold, Im so frustrated, ya I see why Naru would be mad but come on Naru baby have an open mind something must of happened dont you think? Cant hate your dad for being an assasin in the mob you hate when he was doing it before you were conceived lol, wasnt like it was his fault all that other stuff happened, cause as far as I can tell the only ones who really knew were Kojima me thinks and Asuma lol, and awwww its true Asuma was more a brother to Sasu than Itachi was so Itachi can not be jeoulous at ALL even if it wasn't his fault he was gone, the matter is, he WAS gone and Asume was there to look after Sasuke as best he could, and ooh man that part made me cry as well, poor Sasu, his heart is broken..sniffles...oh I cant wait to see what happenes in the new Buk-gu (?) place they will be staying, I know of course they will fight, but I hope their relationship starts to at least grow a bit more, Sasu and Naru's I mean lol, and hmmm wonder what Itachi will think of that relationship since he wouldn't have minded Sasuke with Ino at all, what will he say when he learns his bother is in love with a dude?? lol, any, it did answer ALOT of questions but left so many yet unsaid and added a few more...so does Oro knows about Itachi, did anyone see Itachi at the stadium? Did Danzou? And ok that broadcast was just creepy, poor Naru he has every right to be leary and a bit worried, cant wait for more, thank you thank you for as always giving us an awesome amazing read, cant wait till the next one, but till then keep up the great work, stay safe, healthy and happy, and sane,,*smiles*, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on March 06, 2012
majorly frustrated because i have typed two good reviews for this chapter and have not been abel to poist them for one reason or another. so hope fuly third times a charm. okay i have vented, on to the review. i loved this chapter and how sasuke and itachi meeting for the first time in years was realistic. their road to haveing a brotherly bond should not be done over night. it should be a treasure that takes time and trust to build. that is what i like about your story. i loved the confrentation between naruto and sasuke. if sasuke had been all "i share your pain" with naruto, it would not have felt right. changes in personality need to happen over time. he spent with a evil, sick pedophile. that was bound to have a effect on him. what he needs is some good naruto lovin( yaoifan girl squeal). please put in. you killed asuma. as retrobution i want sasunaru luvv. dont care who seme, just lets have some yaoi love
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From Mija on March 02, 2012
Oh dear LORD! You just killed me! nooooos a bad place to end it, ok a good place for an author but BAD BAD for a reader who is bouncing in her seat and bitingher nails till they bleed just WAITING for this reunion, although I gotta say, Sasuke screaming, although expected really, took me by suprise anyway and had me laughing, especially the way Itachi came out cursing lmaoo, and omg Shisui how oculd you DO that, you straight out told Naruto that Asuma died saving HIM, but he didnt die saving Naruto persay he died to save them all, he wasnt even holding Naru, he was holding Sasu...so ya, that was a bit cruel to deliever the news like that, meanie Shisui, and see, see I tell you there is something going on with Haku and Shisui, ok you know cause your writing it, but come on you know Haku is having a crush on him lol, who wouldnt its SHISUI for goodness sakes! and WOW hes an assasin? and he knew Naru's pappa? Dont tell me Shisui was trained by Minato...how old IS Shisui, if he gets with Haku will he be robbing the cradle? lol, and awwwwww Asuma is dead, how will Sasuke take that with everything else? poor Shika, my heart aches for him, I sniffles for him, poor poor Shika, brave but silly Asuma..die you coward Kimimaru, evil evil man you go Haku for stabbing that wretch in the gut,,,but damn hes still alive, sh*t, he needs to die then they can get to Oro a bit easier, not saying Oro will make it easy but they wont have to deal with the long haired freak,,,and he calls Shika a sinner and look what he is doing, killing and screwing Oro every chance he gets, and doing all kinds of evil things, he is the real sinner, bastic...ok ok, Im calm, sort of...and awww poor Naru to be free but feel like its a dream and you might wake up to find that its not real, God that is an aweful feeling, poor thing....but please, please I NEEED more, I have to see what happens next, where are they going what will Oro say, and omg what will Sasuke say to Itachi, I know hes mad, he said he he might not be able to forgive him but of course we know he will, right? Right? He has to, hes his big precious loving brother, so he hid, he had his reasons, Sasuke needs to be mad, vent then hug his brother and demand that he never leave him alone again, because that Kappa might come back to get him lol, or in this case that snake freak Orochimaru,,shivers...ok ok I will stop my babbling but oooh I cant wait, I am all a twitter with excitement..till then much huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on March 01, 2012
asuma has died once already. why did he need to die again. i was planing your funeral pyre until the part were sasuke screams. that kinda made me laugh. laughter is good. ive cried to much lately. so how will itachi set about mending fences with sasuke. and will there be any sasunaru luvin. and haku and shisui as couple has potential in this alternate reality. and i like how naruto is keeping close to shikimaru. he wants to be there for his friend. damn you iam crying again, think sasuke screaming because he saw a spider. i feel better now.
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From Mija on February 25, 2012
Oh Oh I also wanted to add, I think Shisui is right, those people who died in a rush to escape the craziness, well they deserved it, going all blood lust crazy and cheering for more and to kill and booing, the bastids...and are all the buildings burning? Even the main building where the dojo and where Sasuke and Oro sleep? Hope so, sadly I think after all the crap that has happened the place needs to burn, cleanse itself, they can always rebuild later....and YAY Sasuke actually thought talked to Naruto and Naruto back, funny how Sasuke heard Narutos words too, another piece of proof that they are each others other half, two sides of the same soul the yin and yang yall are talking about, LOVED that part...ok ok, I am just bothering ya now, great work, cant wait till next chap, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From Mija on February 25, 2012
OMG Kiya you are killing me! How could you leave it there! I was biting my nails and bouncing in my seat the whole time I read this and omg omg this was a fantastic chapter, well all your chapters are excellent but this? Omg this one was soo intense and made me want to cry, I am shocked that Naruto actually defeated Sasuke, he may not have killed him but he WON! Go Naru, put Sasu's butt in check, though I am terribly glad Sasu didnt die but I knew you wouldnt kill him off, would ruin the whole Sasu/Naru part of the story lol, but damn Shisui shooting the bow and dear lord Kimmimaru knows its him by the feather at the end of the arrow? WOW, Kimmi must have a good memory or him and Shisui have a past lol, and awwww Itachi's thoughts of his baby brother and the comparison to the young adult he sees now, nope it wont be a happy reunion Itachi love, but Sasuke will be thrilled to know your alive none the less, after he tries to kill you for keeping yourself hidden that is...and wow, Naruto heard Haku beg him for Sasuke's life? It doesnt suprise me that Haku would but it suprises me that he never thought Naruto would actually win against Sasuke, although not actuaslly said it was evident that he believed Naruto was going to die, poor Naru his last thoughts of Sakura but omg Sasuke squeezing his hand just about made me melt and want to cry, and damn damn damn Orochimaru escaped the slippery snake, and apperantly Danzo is not dead but wounded, though I do hope he dies from the wound I doubt he will, and another YOU GO HAKU kick those guards butts from keeping you from rescuing Sasuke and Naruto, aaah his love for Sasu and even Naru is soo sweet I want to hug him, oddly enough when Shisui mentions the girls voice being not a girls voice, meaning Haku, the thought of them actually falling in love and becoming lovers came to my mind and I thought that would be soo cool, he cant have Sasuke of course, since he is Naru's and Zabuza is dead and I have never seen a Haku/Shisui pairing or a Shisui pairing at all really but the two seem like it might just work lol...and seriously? Even at deaths door Sasuke is still being an ass? Omg that is priceless, but again the way those too can envoke a wealth of emotions and rile each other up is soo them and soo funny at times...and Sasuke's reaction to the pain was funny too, I was like you big wuss, youve been on top and coddled to damn long if the pain can make you loose it, when Naruto had probably had worse and still come out smiling or well you get what I mean, but it makes sense, Sasuke is just not used to that sort of thing, hes used to being top dog, to winning so it is understandable,,,ok ok please please tell me another chapter is coming soon, I have too see whats gonna happen next its driving me nuts! Cant wait, love this fics so much, awesome awesome writing, your the best Kiya, thanks for the terrific read, till then much huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on February 23, 2012
i jumped for joy when isaw the update. i just love your story and the character change and grow, slowly(i cant stand sudden changes in characters). your story is well thought out. i loved the part were sasuke was all ive been around orochimaru to long. i love the chapter quotes at the begginning but this one reminds me of apollymi from sherrilyn kenyon dark-hunter series. she is chaos. if you know who she is ill give a cookie
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From conrada7 on February 18, 2012
gahhhhhhh!!!! I have missed so much, but I took all of today to catch up! I am so so so so so excited right now that I can barely stand it! Thank you so much for breaking me out of my OMG homework and studying is consuming my life mood! This was exactly what I needed to clear my head a little! Sorry I haven't been able to keep up much, but med school has that affect on people you know? hahahaha, but seriously, your story's just made my day. I can't believe that I have missed so much! I really really really cant wait for your next update (and the next moment I can spare to worship it as it so deserves!) Please keep up the good work, I am so anxious to see what Naruto and Sasuke are going to do and how Sasuke is going to react to Itachi still being alive! Great job as always!!!
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From Mija on February 18, 2012
Omg I love Naruto to death but his obsession to have Sasuke notice him and acknowledge him makes me laugh as well, this always gets him into trouble, which makes him do irrational things which makes him piss the crrap out of Sasuke which in turn drives the Uchiha up the freakin wall, omg those two, but OMG this is soo intense, I love the battle, not drawn out and over done as usual but enough to make it juicy and oh man Hidan is one sick puppy, I felt so bad for poor Naru when he realized that the guys he had pricked with the needle were behind beheaded in their drugged out state, but least they werent awake when it happened so at least they had some mercy in that respect...and did Sasuke really THINK those things I wonder? and somehow Naruto heard them through some sort of bond/fate/destiny thing? That would be soo cool, but what is Sasuke thinking Now? hes all detached and stuff I know he had to be if he expects to do what he has to be I dont think he can actually kill Naruto can he? and what do Itachi and the others have planned? I hope its good cant wait and is that Shisui with him?? Ohh I cant wait...and yessss its true Naruto is the only one that can drive Sasuke crackers and its often hilarous to see and further proof that although Sasuke swears he cut their bond their are stronger forces at work keeping their bonds in tact that he just cant fight, no matter how mentally unstable he is becomeing lol, ahhhh loving this soo much I must say though I for one would have loved to kick the asses of all those cheering blood thirty fools cheering bloody entertainment and calling Naruto a coward, I know there are lots of people who like blood sports Im not one of them I guess...le sigh....another wonderful chapter I cant wait for more, and yes I too am a lady, or woman, girl, a person of the femal gender lol, I am too old to be a girl so guess that makes me a yaoi fan woman lol, Mija actually means little one, little girl, daughter female child, etc, in Spanish add an O instead of an A at the end and you will have the male gender, just a tidbit of useless info lol, ok ok I babbled long enough, soo looking foward to more, till then great work, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on February 17, 2012
has anyone other then me thought that naruto and sasuke are like yin and yang in looks and personality. they are day and night from each other. oh and i loved the phrase kimi whatever his name said at the beginning. Warf from star trek next generation would be rpoud" today is a good day to die" i just busted up laughing. on another thought i wonder how you will get naruto and sasuke out of this predicament. and was kisame with itachi in the village. and to awnser your question about gender, i would say trust your instincs. i am a happy yaoi fangirl( infasis on girl). love your updates as always. and i like how you keep them in character. kudos to you for not ooc. i would of hunted you down if you made either a "blushing bride" right off the bat. heres to a nother intresting chapter. hats off to you and cheers.
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From Mija on February 12, 2012
ahahaha, omg you know Naruto's dream is soo not about fighting lol, ya no probalby only my perverted self thinking naughty thoughts, le sigh. anyhow, omg I go away for a bit and I come back to TWO awesome chapters and I feel like I have been gone forever and ooh damn this is getting intense! I almost choked then squealed in happiness when Itachi was revealed to be alive and no doubt one of the heads if not leader to Atkasuki? Damn I never know how to spell that name, anyhow when you first described the black haired pony tailed man Asuma was meeting, well I sort of had a moment of ummmmmm....where I tried to think of who it might be then it came to me and then I squealed and read on and omg I was right and was soo excited and cant wait for the reunion, I dont know If I WANT Sasuke to be happy or pissed or both, well okay yes both, but I dont know If I want to root for being pissed off foever or pissed then understanding and just glad his big brother is back and lurves him and says never leave me again and ya have a happy ever after sort of thing, anyway, point? After my long little spiel on Itachi is that fact that Sasuke is not alone is so relieveing, yes I know there are others out there, but I dont know it still felt...I dont know...like Sasuke was still set apart even from Asume, I felt more of a bond between Asuma and Shikamaru than with Sasuke and Asume though I know its because Sasuke himself keeps himself away, so to know that he has FAMILY as in Itachi and I Shisui's name, it makes it better, he has Uchiha, strong Uchiha backing him up and Itachi the right heir had returned and Orochi and Danzo now hav to make sure to take Itachi out as well As Sasuke and I believe they wont find Itachi as easy or controlable as they thought Sasuke was....

Yes and omg to think Oro thought he was going to rape Sasu before the big Gudan..you go Sasuke for standing up to the perv, but oh man I hope someone takes care of Kimimaru just thinking of getting by him is giving me a headache...and can I just say OMFG I laughed so hard when Sasuke yelled at Naruto to shut up and then his name, and Naruto's evil glee at it as well and Sasuke's mortification...ah good times them two when they go at it, not swords and fighting and stuff but their verbal fights always make me smile those two can rile each other up like no ones business, this is so funny to me, in the manga its as plain as day as well no one gets to Sasuke at ALL not even Madara or Karin but Naruto? just seeing Naruto makes him pout and rant like a kid and loose his marbles and go bat shit crazy, ahhh I love that pycho lol, ok I think I ranted enough, I missed this fic and you, and there is so much to touch on but I fear I have gone on long enough and seriously we all know if given the chance I will rant on forever..lol..sad but true, great chapters looking absolutly foward to the next and I so did not think it was going to end with the Gudan, I figured that was going to be around mid to maybe almost but not quite towards the end, I figured there had to be an after the fight, good to know I was right, hehe, anyhow till next time, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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