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By : kiyasama

From scarywoman on April 15, 2012
wow. omg i just about had aheart attack. nearly killed over and this was my second time reading the chapter. when sasuke was like "breathe just breathe" that what i was concentrating on doing. i swear that i made myself look like an idiot at he end there. i was drooling like a moron. and it started out so heartfelt to. sakura and the hooker are both class 1 bitches. sakura for cheating, and the hooker for calling naruto ugly. his scars add to his yummyness.
and there also is naruto pictureing sasuke as a geisha. i on the other hand think sasuke would look great in ciel phantomhive from black butler(episode 4)outfit.
and sasuke asking what a hickey was, and offering to teach naruto korean, so a kawaii moment. i swear i saw anime pink hues in that scene.
but the best part was naruto telling sasuke he already put his mark on sasuke. smoke came out of my ears and i could not read the rest for 5 minutes, i just kept on repeating what naruto said. if you were going for shock facter then you got it. keep up the yummyness. and let the good, yaoi, times roll.
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From Mija on April 14, 2012
Oh my freaking God I couldnt stop laughing! Where is it? Is it next to you? Oh man Sasuke you innocent virgin naivetee is soo damn adorable! And of course Naruto just had to take advantage of it..lmao! Oh God that was funny and so damn cute..and hot..then hitting his head oh man priceless..whew...and I am soo with Sasuke, what girl in their right mind like a stupid pick up line like that? and it takes someone who doesnt know about such things to point it out how sweet..you know I find it very interesting how Sasuke has accepted that he is attracted to Naruto a male and isnt really fighting it, he is embarrased and doesnt want to throw himself at Naruto and make a fool out of himself but hes pretty much already come to terms at least to himself to he likes Naruto more than he should...and its Naruto that is having a harder time cometing to terms with his attraction to Sasuke...I would have thought Sasuke would be the tougher nut to crack so its nice to see he more open...and GO HAKU! Bout time you stood up to your master lol that was funny and I was rooting for him....hmmmm and as for the vampire thing...well that is not what I meant, I meant that even if it had been a vampire doing the licking of the blood the act still would have been seen as a sexual one, but ya...Sasuke as a Vamp is a hot image to drool over and although I dont really care for vamp fics all that much I have read a few good ones..basicily its all about the story if its well written then it could be about aliens and I could read it lol..oh my God which reminds me I read one about an alien..a SasuNaru just recently and it was cute...odd but cute actually...its the only one of its kind I ever came across...ok ok..sorry...And omg Naruto's reasoning at the end? There will be no more hickey? No more instigations of hickeys? Did he think there would be an oppurtunity for more? I mean the whole showing Sasuke what one was, was a prime opening but you only get that sort of chance once, and awwww he soo hopeful about Sasuke returning the favor isn't he? lol ooh man that is pricless I actually hope Sasuke does, I would love to see Sasuke wanting to TRY to see if he can make a hickey too..hehe and experimenting on Naruto..ooh that would be nice..as always your are fantastic and I am amazed and adoring your work, I cant wait for more and I thank you from the bottom of my silly little heart for the awesome read, till next time you stay safe, healty happy and sane..huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From Sabriel20 on April 10, 2012
I loved this chapter. Naruto's conversation with haku made me laugh. I like how naruto and sasuke's relationship is progressing. I like that you didn't just throw them together. This way their feelings are more natural. I'm aloso wondering where you found the poems for the beginning of your chapters? Keep up the good work can't wait for the next chapter.
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From Mija on April 10, 2012
Ahhhh omg that last scene was spicy lol, I mean there is no which way about it, Sasuke wiping the blood off Naruto and licking it off his finger can only be construed as sexual in nature, even if he were a vampire it would still be sexual lol, so I wonder what Naruto thinks hehe...and awwwww Naru was jealous of Haku..he thought Haku and Sasuke were a couple how cute lol, but he doesnt realize he was jealous omg that is too funny, I am curious about what Naruto meant about the girls he might of been with at the RDL..was he with someone and it wasn't worth it, or did he not find anyone that he was attracted to? and ya...if Sakura was his first then Naruto is the same as Sasuke with Ino..and why did Sasu say Karin? Naru hasnt had Karin lol althugh Sasu is jealous too, God they are both blind yet Sasuke is less blind he has come to the conclusion that he has feelings and naughty thoughts for the blond...which totally suprises me..not that he has them but that he admits to it and I soo like that, I thought it would be Naruto first but I am tickled pink to see that its Sasuke..and Omg Naruto was CHOKING Sasuke..I think that was a bit of an over reaction to the statement dont you think Naruto?! Sheesh...and did he feel Sasuke's erectons? And doest this mean Sasuke likes a little asphixsiation(?) with his sex? A little roughness? A little kink? Hehe you go Sasu baby lol...I am a bit leary of getting the triad involed with the Bakufu I mean ya it makes sense and army for an army but like Itachi said they would war for years and if the triad won it would not help later, but I am eager to see where this goes, and I do hope Naruto decides to take over, better to have control over the bad stuff and do it right then let bad guys have control of the bad stuff and let it get out of control, yeah? Anyhow as always I am amazed with the story and love it to death and look foward to each and every chapter you write, I cant wait for more, thank you thank you thank you for the read, till next time you stay safe healthy and sane, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on April 09, 2012
you are evil., the yaoi is finaly happening and you stop. that is so mean. brilliant but mean. and iam so glad tamari is okay. and i kinda realized my mistake with madara after i posted it.
i just love how incredably dense naruto is. i bet he would have tried to get sasuke and haku together. that would have been histerical. to bad haku ruined it by telling sasuke about his conversation with naruto. and dont get me started on sasuke daydream, i just about nose bleed all over my laptop. i think sasuke is a bit of sadist and a masochist. or better yet, he likes confrentation. but i have to agree with him on one point. sakura did not love him. I dont agree with his tactics but he he showed growth when appologized. he needs time to lern when and how to be brutaly honest without being a dick. their relationship will be entresting. i think sasuke may have shot himself in the foot with the whole sakura thing. it will be entresting to see how things go. and i hope itachi and shisui get back safe. obviouse reason for itachi. shisui reason would be to piss sasuke off. please dont kill them. and will kurunai(spl?) make it to the story. update soon. i just about cried when there was no update on last friday. but i realize you do have a life outside of this story so i will be content withonce a week. now to go back and reread the chapter and laugh histericaly. see ya soon
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From missbri88 on April 07, 2012
Yay!!! We're getting friendly action between Salsu-chan and Naruto-kun!!!
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From Mija on April 03, 2012
OMG that was like perfect! I had been curious as to how you would describe Minato in this, it was hard to picture the happy go lucky sort of man with the image of one of the best assasins in the syndicate, but the way you wrote it, how he really had no choice but even still had his rules, and his closeness with Jiraiya and Jiraiya's love for him, I loved that it was just so oddly beautiful, and man the way he died, that was fudged up six ways from sunday, while his baby was just delivered they shoot up the house? That is soo freaking harsh...hmmm and Now Naruto wants revenge..I like it, I was not sure about it at first but seriously I would want to hunt down Danzo too, and this gives Naruto a reason to fight, to stop running and hiding just to live a little longer, this time he will fight or die trying like the Naruto I knew he was...and omg seriously Sasuke's inner pervert comes out at the oddest times and Sasuke yells at it? omg that was funny, I notice he argues with himself alot and its usually the other voice telling hime how much he desires Naruto or what not, so ya, his inner pervert lol, its funny when he argues back would be even more hilarious if he actually shouted back out loud in front of Itachi or Shisui and they look at him all weird lol...and Im so glad they are starting to bond and although they had a few moments of tender and caring words, it was good to see them bicker like the butt heads we have grown to love, I love when they bicker its funny....aahh ok ok, I soo cant wait to read more, you know I love this story to peices and look foward to every update and things seems to be getting better and better, more action more details, cant wait to see when both decide to be intimate for the first time, like kiss or what not, but I know its not time yet...*pout*..And Sasuke smelt like good food? Made Naruto hungry? Ya Im with Sasuke, what the heck?! lmaoo too funny, thanks again for the awesome read, till next chapter you be well safe happy and sane, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on April 02, 2012
you caused to cry because of that story. it was like when SPOILLER ALERT jiriaya died . i balled my eyes out. hopefuly naruto can meet the old perv. oh and if sasuke wants to get on naruto last nerve have him say naruchan. oh and i liked the nod to manga(october 10th). i also like the fact that minato could not kill fugaku because of itachi( i assume). minato was a good man ( just thought of "you cant keep a good dog down" from all dogs go to heaven). oh and at the beginning of chapter i thought you were going to pair up haku and karin when she dragged him to her room. then the moment of insanity passed nad iwas like" that will never happen". dont do that to haku please. i still hold the opinion that haku should find himself a man. just not sure who. i must ponder that one. maybe madara MAJOR SPOILER IF YOU ARE NOT CURRENT IN MANGA ( real or fake madara).
when will evil basterd and the major asshole die? will it be soon? will temari ever be introduced? she is haveing shiki baby. and has gaara made an apereance( i cant remmeber, old age is setting in).
oh and part of the original reason why i read this was the not so much the word sin( even though that was inticing enough) it was s=sasuke, i=itachi and n=naruto( im into threesomes). but you made it evident there was no "i" in the relationship. but i always enjoy a good read and can tell if something will be good by the third sentance. i feel like i should say "you had me at hello".
when you finish this story please make more naruto fanfics. please dont finish to soon, but dont go on forever and ever awmen( their are enough of those). okay im babbling now. update soon porfavor.
ps. i still think karin should install hidden cameras in the bathroom. yaoi fangirls around sin universe would pay big bucks to see naru or sasu hinnie( yum yum)
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From Keiko13 on April 02, 2012
Wow, thank you for the early posting of this chapter I enjoyed it very much. Last chapter was a little on the bright side (I laughted and read "The talk" between Itachi a Sasuke at least 3 times, so cute), but this one shone at least some light at what happened to Minato. I loved the small baby steps forward that the bond between Sasuke and Naruto is taking. It is not rushed, so it seems to me like a narural development...they cant fall in love immediatly after so much anger, pain etc. I respect you for that. For me it gave the story a RL aspect.
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From Mija on March 30, 2012
OMG I left a humongus review and it didnt post, gosh darn it!, surficit to say, LOVED this chapter soo much, the talk between brothers was cute and funny, love with Sasu flipped Shisui off, and glad to see Itachi get all mad about what Oro did to Sasu, not that I expected any other reaction, I could just picture Sasuke sitting there figeting and blushing as he talked to his brother about those embarassing things and then at knowing that his brother knows that he very well might have a crush on Naru, although we KNOW he does, hes still in denial lol but there is no way he can say that wanting to bit Naru's lips is anything other than what it was lol, too cute I totally loved this chapter, and OMG I wonder what Naruto was told, we know his dad was an assasin so how much worse can it be? Oh I cant wait to find out, poor Naru, well till the next chapter, thanks for the awesome read and the great chapter, till laters you stay safe, happy and sane, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on March 28, 2012
i must apologize for my rant. someone on facebook, who didnt no me, had called me a name and i took it really bad,. then i read your update and was still realing from the negative comment. so i am sorry for taking my feelings out on you. now onto this chater. the narusasu love is growing. and i like the fact that itachi and sasuke were able to clear the air between them. i loved sasuke response to shisui(fliping him off). and that bathroom scene, yumm yumm. if karin is smart, she will set up hidden cameras. and take candid pictures. she could make a fortune. unfortunately when haku finds out he will make karin death look like a accident. oh and can you give haku someone to love. i like him to much to have him be a third wheel. it would be mean. and will the two perverts make it on to the story( kekashi/jiraiya).
i also loved it when itachi got pissed beyond all pissyness, when he found out that orochimaru had assalted sasuke. i have yet to think of a death painfull enough for the basterd.
i always look forward to your updates, if i am raw over something next time i will wait untill the next day to read this wonderfuly emotional story. oh and when will we meet tamari. i hope she is not dead. update soon please
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From Keiko13 on March 28, 2012
Ok...I registered just to leave a comment...I hate you so much in this moment T.T How can I live without knowing what is next? -insert bawling- You certainly know how to create tension and clifhangers. And I love the way you portraied the characters in your work. I think you expresed the personalities of Sasuke and Naruto almost like in the original manga. I respect that, because I had read fiction that just failed in this aspect, like epicaly....And the story line is original and well developed...
And now your story is the second on my list that I watch like a hawk for the next chapter to appear (first place is still Kyuubi the Bitch)
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From Mija on March 20, 2012
Omg, my heart just broke for Itachi! Sasuke just broke his brothers heart, made me want to cry and at first I was pissed off as Sasuke but then I started to think of his point of view, in his life all hes ever seen is Orochimaru's warped desires and activities and for him none of them were pure, love, something beautiful, Oro made it about lust and greed, power, like with all those parties where young boys served powerful men as bed toys, so he had Oro teaching him with his religion that two men being together is a sin and then Oro showing him the sinful side of those things and why it is a sin, and why Oro got away with it I have no freaking clue the man is weird and Sasuke is just to gullible, he is soo easily led around, I feel sorry for him inaway, hes an over grown child looking for what he never had, acknowedgment and praise yet from all the wrong people, ya thinking manga,,,and oh my GOD Minato was that close to the head of the syndicate? Like little brother close? I wonder if Oro made a mistake in telling the head dude about Naruto, because I dont know if it was just me but the boss sounded almost I dunno, hopeful that Minato really had a son? Like maybe he regretted Minato's death? Or now that Kojima is gone Naruto is the next best thing to an heir the dude has no? I mean geez something has to go Naruto's way for once and I soo cant believe that Naruto is still considered a criminal after all that crap, he earned his damn freedom in Gudan, he fought to the death, he just didn't happen to strike a killing blow although it was a bad one to Sasuke, by the rights of what was said he is free and if he is considered dead then even better they cant try a dead man right? Ah so confusing, anyhow I was totally estatic to see a new chapter up so early I squeed! I cant tell you how happy I was, as always this story is fantastic and I cant seem to get enough, I look foward to more and cant wait till the next chapter, till then be safe, be happy and be sane lol, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From missbri88 on March 19, 2012
Aw, don't worry. I shouldn't get fired for 'cleaning' the restroom. I typically sneak off there on the regular bases.
But OMG over chapters 18 & 19! I totally had a feeling that Itachi & Shisui had something going on. :D I can't wait for more and to see Sasuke's 'rebirth'
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From scarywoman on March 19, 2012
wow orochimaru is a first rate ass. and people who are medicaly drugged should not be held accountable for what they say. and sasuke has been living with the king of kreepers(and king kreeper likes men)sasuke opinion will be bent. he is not unreasonable(excluding naruto). i dont think itachi is being a good big brother. he left sasuke to orochimaru. a big brother would have gone to him much sooner.
i am a big sister and have told people that if it comes down to somethingor someone vs my family, i will alwats choose my family. done with the ranting, now on to the good stuff. their is a change in the wind for naruto and sasuke. they are finaly not trying to kill each other physicaly or emotionaly. a truce is in the wend. they will take the bad with the good. sasuke will say something mean to itachi( not in druged state). naruto will clean his clock for it, then go to itachi and comfert him. sasuke will see amd be jealouse pissy. they will have a fight (narusasu)air out their true feeling. screw like rabbits. then sasuke will realise that he was a prick to his brother, and apologise t o itachi and shisui. they go kill king kreeper and danzo. that is my prediction. just one question. who will be haku prince charming? he needs some sugar.
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