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By : kiyasama

From Denilmo on May 07, 2012
You're very welcome! Eh, it wasn't boring or anything at all; I think you did a very nice job in making it all flow and work together. And yes, Kisame rocks my socks and I look forward to seeing more of him

I enjoyed the opening with Naruto recalling the past few days with Temari's arrival and how Shika has been, a nice way to sum it all up without hitting a lull! lol. And then his "embarrassing" confession XD Oh, all this building UST and attraction is killing me - but in such a good way.

And Jiraiya!!! I hope we'll be seeing more of him (and yay Sasuke for tagging along). I love that Sasuke knows about Naruto's father, and that there seems to be more understanding now. And the end of the chapter? Hells yes. That was so Naruto-like to tease him more. Hehehe :)

Every chapter seems to get better than the last and I can't wait to see where the next one leads us in this pretty amazing tale.

-Deni
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From missbri88 on May 03, 2012
Oh dear god! Don't leave me hanging like this!!! I'll seriously be looking forward to the next chapter and I'm praying and pleading with the yaoi gods for it to be soon. We're finally getting so meat...!
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From Midnightstorm on May 03, 2012
Loved It. Going on my recommended list! Please write more~
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From satterb on May 03, 2012
Okay....after wiping the drool off my chin. I do a little happy dance! Why is it that even the smallest hint of these two getting together is enough to make me shiver and stare glassy-eyed at the screen, then scroll back up and read that very tantalizing preview of what is to come a few more times???? Thank you sooo very much for this update. As much as I've loved this story. I love it even more today. You pinned Jiraiya perfectly. I love the interaction between Naruto and Sasuke as they suffer through this sexual angst. There is too much to love here and I look forward to even more.
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From Kerrisa on May 03, 2012
Salutations! I'm so happy to be back x)

You truly are a cruel misstress indeed!! You finally, fiiiiiinally get them to that point ... and BAM. End of the chapter, with sweet promises in the next that we will be forced to wait for, while we sit at our computer screens, faces flushed, hearts racing, jaws slacked, and left wanting!! and it was only a few lines! I can't imagine what reaction a few paragraphs will get!!

Lol but my raging hormones aside, this chapter was awesome! And I'm so so so happy I get to tell you that! -cuddles the review button- I bookmark the current chapter of Sin every time you update and then check back everyday (sometimes twice, i'll peek in around the evening time) to see if another chapter has been added. Your updates make me so happy I could float~ I loved Jiraiya, he is just fool of awesome, and omg that feast made me so hungry! I'm jealous. I want to partake too!! -Slight backtracking- I almost wanted to throttle Naruto for telling Sasuke to get off (and not in the fun way!) him in the gym, but bless Sasuke's soul for knowing and demanding what he wants! I am sooooooo looking forward to the next chapter, but totally prepared for it to not take off exactly where you ended it x) You're good for keeping us guessing as to where we'll be and what will be going on at the beginning of a chapter. Tis awesome, and i wouldn't change it for the world! You rock my sock! XOXOXs ~Kei-Chan
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From scarywoman on May 03, 2012
you are evil, like the fruits of devil,evil. i am so glad that i did not read this infront of my family. i would have died. so are they going to finaly get down to business,or must i imagine myself throtleing you. i would also like to see naruto get jealouse and realize it. have some person(male/ female) from sasuke past hit on him. and i still wish for haku to find someone new. and are you going to bring hinata back. you have killed off most of the main female characters.
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From Mija on April 29, 2012
OMG OMG OMG! I finally did it! I finally got to read both chapters and I of course am estatic! OMG let me tell you my computer crashed and I have had no internet! had to read chapter 24 on cell phone and let me tell you those itty bitty words took one heck of a time reading but I refused to give up! I loved it so much hehe oh God Haku doesnt know what a hickey is either it was adorable but damn Karin for taking advantage of Sasuke like that, but really Sasuke there was nothing wrong with your hands so you could of done something so ya your a guy and part of you wanted it, you just got busted, bad Sasu bad Sasu, you should be jealous of Haku lol, God I live that he is jeaalous of Naruto saying he liked Haku and now he sees everything they do as something more intimate its priceless....awww hes in lurve soo cute...and seriously the explanation Naru gave Shika about showing Sasuke what a hickey was, ya it was lame but ohhh it was hilariously cute I could picture Naruto getting all flushed and beet red! God I love this story, took me HOUR! to read chapter 25 with thiis internet connection I have now its not even a connection its like hell I dont know it gives me peeks of the internet and I can be on it for like a minute or two, maybe five at best before it boots me off but I managed to read the whole chapter and leave this review before it booted me off, so dont worry I am still here, loving this fic, hope to read more soon, keep up the great work, stay safe, sane and happy, huggles and smiles a frazzled and internet deprived Mija..:-)
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From scarywoman on April 26, 2012
wow. that ending was sweet and fluffy. and i loved the enteraction between kisame, shisui and itachi, and the fact that they dont "party". i guess the other members dont know that itachi and shisui are lovey dovey for each other. and to awnser the challenge for the meaning behind the name for this chapter. 'dawn' normaly refers to the begining of a new day or the darkness receding from the sky, it also can mean starting a new. in this case its the begining of akatsuki and our favorit gang of misfits changing from the defensive to the offense. and i also think that butterfly was also important. not just to make sasuke realize that he may have to let naruto go but also to show how he has changed, or better yet, let go of his evil facadenow i must go, and make sure i never beggin reading this infront of my mom( it was awkward).cant wait for the next chappie( not the rabbit)
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From satterb on April 26, 2012
Sometimes I wonder if we are ever going to get to the Naruto/Sasuke portion of this fic, but then I realize that I've read another wonderfully long and perfectly written chapter and not missed and "naughty" bits at all. I love the sexual tension between the two and I love how you've added the newest characters this time. Every character is so well planned and thought out. I am loving this story. Please keep up the great work.
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From Denilmo on April 26, 2012
Again you've given us readers another wonderful chapter. I read the last one, too, but I was rushed to leave after holding up the girls to finish the last couple paragraphs lol so I didn't have time to review then. But that was quite a cliffie to leave us with.

Things are really heating up!! And I knew right away that it wasn't really Akatsuki behind those bombings!
And yay for more familiar faces!!! I think you made me love Kisame more than I already do. *Kermit flailing* How is that even possible?! :D
I'm so excited for the next chapter and to see how things will progress. I'm glad that the boys are about ready to really get to training and I'm already biting my nails to see what Naruto will decide. (Oh please tell me there will be some NaruSasu moments while he's trying to decide hehe - I haven't been a huge fan of NaruSasu honestly, but I just love the way you've written them together here that I can't help but fall into them)

This is such an amazing story; keep up the great work with it!!

-Deni
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From Kerrisa on April 25, 2012
Yaaaaaaay!!! I can review again!!! I was having the most darnedest time trying to figure it out with the help of aff tech support! But anyways!!

I nearly had a heart attack when the last chapter ended with the Akatsuki base was bombed!! I was like " what!?! NOOOOOOO!!!!" But you cleared everything up here! So that was a relief. I totally new Hinata was in Akatsuki before you even mentioned her actual name ( you describe her oh so perfectly!). How are you suppose to be a good bad guy pulling the strings behind so many plots when you completely forget that you're not alone in the room you're conspiring in? Baka Danzo, serves you right!

I almost thought we'd miss out on some NaruSasu interaction, but we didn't!! And it was so sweet! Sasuke getting all flushed over Naruto cupping his hand x) -Sigh- Naruto shoulda leaned in and kissed him, although, Sasuke may have fallen (out of his chair) and messed it up again. Suigetsu was sent to warm Orochimaru's bed!! The poor Darling!! Itachi said he'd do anything for their cause, but does that include sleeping with the man he hates most? hmm.. not like he'd have much choice in the matter if he doesn't want to blow his cover... I wonder if you will detail that night in the next chapter... or at least give us a hint as to how it went.. Poor Suigetsu... AH WELL!! You crank out chapters like no-one's business so I look for to the next update! Expect to hear more from me =D!! XOXOXs Kei-Chan
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From scarywoman on April 22, 2012
naruto atrackted to haku, entresting. i would suport that couple but sasuke needs naruluvin. and i would have fully supported naruto killing karen, when he caught her and sasuke attempting the tango. but heprobably would have went after sasuke instead. and they are finaly learning to understand each other(sasuchan and narukun). but sasuke more honest about his attraction to the bright ball of sunshine. naruto is sugar, and spice, and everything nice. yep, hes a girl. you should try to find away to introduce naruto sexy jutsu to sasuke. hehehe, sasuke would drown in his own blood after that.
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From Sabriel20 on April 18, 2012
This was such a cute chapter. I love that Sasuke is so naive. I like the way you portray Naruto's confusion. It will be interesting to see how he deals with his feelings in later chapters. Oh and yes, I am a girl:)
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From Denilmo on April 18, 2012
Okay, just to be honest, I stumbled across your fic a while ago and... sort of forgot about it because I have quite a busy schedule most days lol (being a mom and doing Uni, seeking at least 20 credit hours a term can do that -.-')
But I came back to it over the past few days and read *every* chapter.... I read it like an addict...

I love the way you crafted the story - from the setting, character building and evolving, the blend of old and new technologies, the angst, the torture, the emotions - ye gods! I can't take it! (But no, seriously, I can take it, and I want more hehe ^^)
From the beginning I was wondering how you were going to weave in the characters we all knew and loved - and you certainly didn't disappoint. The original characters bring more life into the story and unlike others I have read, they don't take over. They served their purpose to further the story, and shaped main characters, and then they were "out of the way" but not forgotten and I think that's one aspect I really enjoyed (I kinda liked the way Naruto felt about and perceived Kojima - too bad he was a dick lol).

I think you did an amazingly wonderful job bringing this fic to life. The cities and temples were described in wonderful detail, and Naruto's time in Byaku-Shinkyou made me ache - even with the beauty that was there. I really like how different Naruto and Sasuke are - how they were on opposite ends inside Byaku-Shinkyou, but both experienced their own fears and disgust, both have that inner turmoil and confusion... and both quite possibly being exactly what the other has needed the whole time.

It's been dark, violent, and repulsing at times (Yeah, Snake Dude, I mean you ^^) without being *too* much if you get what I mean. But there's this lingering sense of hope and heart, of caring for these characters, and them caring for each other and it had me clicking 'next chapter' until midnight last night when I finished the most recent chapter. I absolutely love this fic and I'm in awe of you as a writer who could craft it and keep it going (never mind the fact that I can't seem to finish a story even if my life depended on it -.-'). I can't wait to read more, and if these past 23 chapters are any indication, I know it will be well worth the wait. This is definitely one of the best fics I've read in a long time. Thank you for sharing it with us!!

-Deni
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From missbri88 on April 16, 2012
*fangirls* Oh the innocent Sasu-chan!!! I seriously cannot wait for more
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