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From scarywoman on May 26, 2012
so sai is the spy. not that we could not see that comeing. and i still want haku to have a happy ending, and it better not be by sacrificing himself for either of the idiots. i say that sasuke and naruto should beat the shit out of each other. that seems to be their way of coneing to terms with each other. haku and karen will referee. they can deal with the elephant thats in the room. and karen seems to have a thing for emotionaly stunted men
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From satterb on May 24, 2012
Poor Naruto! I can see where Sasuke may think he's been played, but I think he's being a defeatist. And that kind of behavior is going to get him in trouble. I can't imagine him hanging out with Karin...yuck. But I guess he can't allow himself to rely on Haku anymore so Karin is all he has left. I'm really leary about Sai. I know he was with Jiraya, but I'm guessing he's the spy that was sent to find the group. Haku is really going to get everyone in trouble because he's being foolishly trusting. I can only hope everything will work out. I'll be glad when all this angsty stuff is over, but I know it's necessary. Thanks for updating so quickly. I look forward to more. I love this story, but you know that don't you!
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From scarywoman on May 22, 2012
i love this chapter. sasu naru and haku realy do need to have a pow-wow. or as sai said, haku should confess his feelings to naruto. and naruto and sasuke should have their 'discusion' wheather its through words or fist cuffs.
here is a entersting thing to ponder. when naruto goes to work for danzo, will sasuke become a target. oh and will their friends from japan be making a appearance. and are si and haku going to get together ;).

and i loved your comment about how characters grow and change. especialy sasuke. he is at war with himself. the old sasuke wants to be a judgemental prick who believes he is being punished for wanting something sinful. and then their is the new sasuke who is humble, but has to learn how to love. and i dont necesarly agree with love is pain. when broken or unrequited, yes its painful. but it is ment to be beautiful and never failing
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From satterb on May 22, 2012
Sasuke makes me want to smack the hell out of him. I guess there's no need to worry about Naruto and Haku's little indescretion getting out any more. Oh well. It's better this way. Maybe it's what Sasuke needs to light a fire under his ass. I can just tell Naruto was thinking, "I don't need this horse shit right now" I'm sure he was really tired and Sasuke up and frosted his cake. Thank you for giving us another wonderful chapter. I love this story so much and I'm not eloquent enough to tell you just how wonderful your writing is. I look forward to more.
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From scarywoman on May 21, 2012
you should already know that i love this chapter. plenty of drama. but what i realy to say is sorry for your loss. i will keep you and your family in my prayers.

may God bless you
sincerely
1sunnygirl
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From Kerrisa on May 21, 2012
Saaaaaaasukeeeeeeeee D: That IDIOT. Okay, now I'm sad and horribly upset! I'm going to go watch a lot of My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic to get over Sasuke's royal blunder. Stupid Haku, he is now on the poo-list.

I'm really sorry about your grandfather. I know what it like to lose a close family member, even if you already know they're slipping away. It hurts, and it hurts for awhile. But keep your chin up chick-a-dee. He's at peace now. Even though you can't make any new memories with him, you still have your older memories of the good times you had with him to sit down and remember him by. XOXOXs ~Kei-Chan
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From GudenMulle on May 21, 2012
Uuuhhh!!!! Sasuke you moron! I can't wait to see what happens next, this is a lot of stuff that's going on!
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From Denilmo on May 15, 2012
I really like how this was all from Sasuke's point of view. Things got a bit tense, didn't they? ^_^ It was funny seeing them in jail together.
And the ending.... yyeeeoow *fans self* I think you did a great job keeping it balanced, not just them two fumbling and running into it full steam. I like that there's still apprehension and confusion, and those bits like "What have we done?" Even though I'm sure there are plenty of people going 'OMG more more more' I think it's better that they're staying true to the characterization and the setting you have them in. I very much look forward to the next chapter... which I'm about to go read

-Deni
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From scarywoman on May 15, 2012
so is this going to be a threesome or is naruto going to get burned. sasuke will be pissed when he finds out what happend between naruchan and haku. and is this new guy going to spell doom for the rest. i cant believe haku sirens were not going off when the guy(cant remember his name) called him haku twice.

i also think haku should have a nice chitchat with sasuke sama. haku doesnt realize it, but sasuke is changing. a good way to describe the way that naruto and sasuke are changing each other is the song 'For Good' from "Wicked".

love this chapter and sense a storm brewing both external and enternal. cant wait for the next update
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From Kerrisa on May 14, 2012
"Like hell, you steroid-infused psychopath." -- Yeah, that made me laugh x) And Ooooo!!! Typical hot blooded male! Naruto isn't only fooling around with Sasuke but he let Haku at him as well!? So bad, Sasuke is going to castrate him! Then reattach his penis and castrate him again! Tehehe I love Haku so this mostly Haku-centric chapter was awesome. I'm really curious about this Shin dude now! I hope he was kicked out of the Watch Dogs instead of being trained somewhere more secretly as a secret assassin/spy for Orochimaru or Danzo. That might explain why he knew who Haku was, why he was watching him and Karin in the store, and how he disappeared all ninja like D: !! Then again, he also could have been recruited by Itachi. Uwaaa so many possibilities!! Yay for Naru Sasu (Naru)- Lovin!! Jiraiya will return a week, right? A lot can happen in a week (ie. more lovin, possible threesome, possible assassination attempt, possible poo hitting the fan, ect.) !! As always, looking forward to the next chapter!! XOXOXs Kei-Chan~

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From GudenMulle on May 13, 2012
Oh my god. There are so many things, I don't even know where to begin. But this last chapter.. If it hadn't been in the middle of the night, I would probably have done some kind of victory-dance. It was like GOD DAMN YES, FINALLY!!!! I have to tell you, it was goddamn daunting to start reading this story. It started out so extremely gruesome, and there were so many chapters and they were all so long, and it felt like I really had to read and pay attention to every detail given, I couldn't just skim through and get the gist of things. That's pretty damn demanding of a person :P . But I have to say that I'm in love. I will DEFINITELY be checking in again when you update. Though you broke my heart when Asuma died. And I must admit I'm just waiting, dancing around on my toes for Kakashi and Iruka to show up!! I don't really have enough time and room to comment on all the things I want to say, but let's just suffice to say that I'm pretty damn satisfied with how you are treating the characters. (I apologize for the excessive use of the exclamation-mark, I guess I was excited)
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From scarywoman on May 11, 2012
loved this chapter. but you just wetted the yaoi monsters appetite. and the whole women are week thing just pissed me off. but i do realize who grew up with, and that monster saw women as lower beings. if we were week, we wouildnt give birth.

other then that i loved the whole police station part. i just about died of laughter when the officer was freaking out over naruto acting like a animal. priceless. then the yaoi monster was awakend wtih the whole master thing. and in all honesty it will be entresting to see who will top. as sasuke said neither will give in easly. but it is possible to top from the bottom. and sasuke thinks naruto beautiful, i so happy. when naruto went into that whore house, i was just about ready to jump into the story and pull the puta hair out when she called him ugly.
and on a seperate note, thankyou for staying fairly regular with the updates, and character development. some stories i have read are realy long but are dealing with the same issues that were addressed in the beggining. with this story you brought out all the diffrent complexities of the inner selves that makes this story believeable. even when i get mad at the charactes i still want to understand them. and i also thankyou for keeping the characters personalities of the original story.
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From missbri88 on May 10, 2012
No, I've still been here, hiding in places to read on my cell at work... I still feel that the story is pure awesomeness!!! :nosebleed:
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From satterb on May 10, 2012
Oh my god, oh my god, oh my god!!!!! Haku is gonna catch em! LOL. Thanks for updating. I was happy to see the fireworks/kiss scene from Sasukes POV. And I was happy to see that they both were interested in keeping the night progressing. I was afraid you had screwed them over by getting them arrested. Then I was a afraid you had screwed them over by getting them released and maybe the impulse had died. Oh by the way...I loved the wild animal act put on by Naruto in the jail cell. LOL. The ending of this chapter was mega hot. I'd love to know what was going through Naruto's mind also. The smex was soooo yummy and just perfect. After what happened to Naruto in the dungeons, I don't think there's anyway he'll be able to be the bottom, and Sasuke is just too new at the entire activity to be able expect that kind of action. I look forward to more.
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From Kerrisa on May 09, 2012
-Is rolling around merrily with a shit-eating grin on her face- Finalllllllllyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!! Sooooooo Happpppppyyyy!!!!

You nearly gave me a heart attack when the fic started off with rejection!!! I was like, 'Nooooooo!! Naruto!! How did you F**K It up THIS time!?!?!?!' But then You cleared that bit up and I was like, " Ahhh, I see what you did there, you sneaky little fanfiction writer, you!' And the Effin wannabe gangstas almost ruined it!! When they came out I was like. 'Nooooooo!! You're keeping from my ManSex! DAMN YOU!!!!' Lol but then the cell play made up for it cuz Sasuke got to play Naruto's master x) That was pretty cute, and kinky, so I liked it lots. I was almost afraid they were gonna say 'F' it, today's been too long a day, I'm going to bed, I can't deal with this right now.' but they didn't and their time together was so hot! And it ended with cuddles!! -squeal- I wonder what Naruto was gonna ask D: Maybe something along the lines of "Can we do this again, tomorrow?" Lol that'd be great. I can't wait to see how the next chapter plays out! -tackle glomps you- XOXOXs Kei-Chan~!
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