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By : kiyasama

From ANON - OhMyGoodness on August 01, 2013
Hi. I NEVER review on AFF. I am a lurker extreme.

That being said, this is probably the best story I've read on here yet. I can't even pinpoint my favorite part because I loved it all. Extremely well written. I think of myself as judge-y and picky, and I LOVED this. I look forward to more from you.
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From Lzay_Niight on June 27, 2013
Chapter 41: >_>...

Don't want to sound like a bitch (though I have a feeling I will anyway), but this was somewhat predictable. At least what was the result of Sasuke and Haku. -sigh- Honestly, I had been expecting this confrontation to roll this way when they had escaped, but was seriously hoping you would be more creative with it.

I'm not at all shocked you had killed off Haku (Third time I have read this happening in a story, and yes it is sad, but a expected move). Nor am i that Sasuke just so happen to be stupid enough to let himself get injured unnecessarily (I would think he would have enough skills to dodge those kunai the second and third round, seriously), and captured into Orochimaru's web.

Don't give him much credit, do you?

Yes, he is definitely gullible. And yes, he often base his actions off his emotions, and come off as a 'action first think later' kind of guy. But, I would think even you would have let his character grow a bit more then you did (You only focused on him not being alone anymore, and all that comes with it), like you did Naruto.

This is a lovely story, and everything about it (the ups and downs) would have been perfect. The only thing you really fell short on was Sasuke. His 'growth' had fell short, and while obviously his isn't going to get over what Orochimaru did to him over night, he is a VERY stubborn and bullheaded guy. If he has a goal, NOTHING will get in his way to reach it (as proven so many damn times in the manga).

This characteristic isn't showing to much in your Sasuke. Only thing that lacking, really. You did an awesome job in showing such determination in Naruto, but seem to forget that Sasuke and him share this common trait.
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From satterb on June 27, 2013
Awwww. I'm so sad that it's over. I just want you to know one more time how clever and astoundingly good this story was. I think eventually I'll go back and re-read. Glad I gave it a try. Good luck in the future and I hope you're able to find time to write again when RL settles down for you. Thank you for all your hard work on this story and thank you so much for finishing.
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From ANON - sadie237 on June 25, 2013
Oh Babygirl you end that beautifully. You made me feel happy and hopeful of their future:) You put a smile on my face with Haku might get to join them on some of their travels. I'm going to miss you like crazy! I'll keep an eye out for your next in-deaves:) This has been a wonderful journey. Thank you for sharing and especially all your hard work. ~Bowing~ ^_^
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From ANON - sadie237 on June 25, 2013
That was fantastic Babygirl!!! Yess the boys made it! The talk Sasuke had with Haku was wonderful. It was the icing on the cake for their relationship:) Ok let me stop my nose from bleeding so I can tell you how sexy the reunion was:) To start with a toe and lead to drips was wOw bang bom!! That's my lost for words sentence:) I loved it! I haven't read the last chapter yet. I'm in the after glow of the reunion still:) Ok I'm on my way ^_^
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From scarywoman on June 24, 2013
this was a truly fun ride. I have enjoyed every moment. it was an epic adventure full of love, laughter, pulling my hair, and having coming out of my eyes. and interestingly you began the naruto point of view, and with sasuke. and just out curiosity, was this story their diaries. or no. well I hope you come up with another great story. if you do, I WILL read it. sincerely 1sunnygirl
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From satterb on June 23, 2013
It took me a long time to read this last chapter because I know I subconsciously wanted to prolong this awesome story coming to an end. I'm so sad that it's over, and I'm so happy that Haku lived. Words cannot describe how much I've loved reading this story. I really hated to see it ending. I hope you do write an epilogue. Sasuke and Naruto deserve one more hook up before we leave them. They've been apart for soooo long. Hope you find the time to give this story a proper ending. I'm going to miss it!
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From scarywoman on June 22, 2013
Give me some more smexy narusasu action before you end this story please. Oh and thank you for hookingup haku with sasori. And here I thought that I may have to hunt you down and torture you for not writing a descent ending. You are giving the story a proper ending.. I am sad that jugo died. But he gets to be with Kim , so it's bittersweet for him. And here comes my encore, epilogue, epilogue, epilogue.
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From ANON - sadie237 on June 21, 2013
Babygirl anybody that saids you *don't* know how to leave a cliffy. Well I'll just have to beat them up because you can leave back breaking cliffys like nobody's business:) I loved know what was going on with the brothers and fining out about happier times for them. Plus someone is there for Haku! I'm so glad:) I don't think I have ever read a story with those two paired together. I like it!! Once again two of the hottest baby face guys hook it up!!!:) I can hardly wait to read what you have in store for the reunion! He still has that wickedly sexy smile:) If Sasuke's toes wasn't curling mind was:) I loved it! ^_^
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From satterb on June 13, 2013
Wow! It's so close to being over. I'm really sad, but I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. I was a little disappointed that Naruto didn't get to deliver the killing blow to Danzo, especially since he was basically the one that Minato killed. But this chapter was exciting and I'm really happy that Shika survived. Now you only have to save Haku (pretty please). Again, I appreciate how hard you've worked on this story and I'm glad I was able to read it. I look forward to more.
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From ANON - sadie237 on June 11, 2013
I'm choked up typing this:) Happy and sad all rolled into one! Happy because it almost over and the boys can be together!! Sad because there were so many losed plus Sasuke's not there yet! Hey I have a screener of Kakashi carrying Naruto on his back. So I really enjoyed read it in your story. That was such a touching moment. Naruto was beat to with in a inch of his life. But still he pulled his head up and talked sh*t to old Danzo I loved that:) Then when he seen Jiraiya and the tears stated falling for him that had me going to:) I'm sorry my thoughts are all over the place:) It was so exciting!!! Wonderful Babygirl!! ^_^
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From scarywoman on June 10, 2013
please let there be weddings. naruto and sasuke need each other. and I will be sad when this story ends.and will narusasu smooch in public when they see each other. well buy for now.
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From ANON - sadie237 on May 27, 2013
WoW!!! Yes that was intense! Hearing O's sad story of his childhood. All the sad crazy things he did in the name of science. What he had done to his own body! If they was ever a definition of 'Mad Man' it's should read Orochimaru. Your title is so dead on the money:) Poor Sasuke to hear all the crazy stuff that happen to his family. I was proud of Sasuke for walking away and not killing O. So in my mind when he did kill Orochimaru. He had to. I hope that would ease his mind later on. Babygirl that was an awesome chapter:) I loved it! ^_^
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From ANON - sadie237 on May 24, 2013
OMG!!!! What a cliffy that was!!:) You're still the bomb Babygirl. That hole chapter was action packed! I thought Naruto's was full of action but you stepped it up a couple of notches:) WoW! I was scared when I read there wont be any happily ever after. Now I see why. Haku Kiba Suigetsu Kimimaro and Jugo. I'm hoping 3 out of 4 might make it?! Most of all I'm hoping Sasuke is going to be alright?! The way you described Orchimaru was incredible I could see that sicken smile of his.(shiver) Hey I could visualize the hold bloody mess that was happening! You're good with your bad self:) I'm so hooked on your story it worst than drugs!!!! ^_^
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From satterb on May 24, 2013
Gaaauuuuuggghhh! What is this madness?! Thank you so very much for updating. I was surprised and a little happy to see that Haku was able to end Kimmimaro. I can't wait to see what's happening on Naruto's end, and to find out what's happened to Sasuke and Orochimaru. Please update soon, as I'm excited to read more. I will miss this story when it's over :(
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