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Reviews for Calling You

By : FireSnake

From ANON - sighcoe (too lazy to log in) on June 12, 2012
I so enjoy your story! Thank you for writing it! Finally, Naruto realize that he does belong to Sasuke, and maybe if you made a sequel of some sort, it would be great if your story revolves about Naruto fighting for Sasuke this time. Cause the whole story had been Sasuke and especially Itachi keeping them together whilst Naruto run away. Look, it doesn't mean that I don't understand the whole gist of it as to why Naruto needs to do that, because as you've pointed out he had been shunned before and he's insecurity still surface every now and then and I completely understand your Naruto's characterization and where he is coming from. It's just a suggestion though that is, if you plan to make a sequel.

Again, thanks for this great read. :) SasuNaru is Love!

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From KalyxandSoren on August 05, 2011
SPLENDID! I simply adored this story! I loved that there was an abundant amount of substance to each chapter and character. They were all dynamic, and there was nothing inconsistent with them. That is sometimes a real challenge because often writers get caught up in what they WANT a character to say, not remembering what a certain character WOULD say. So super kudos to you upon that note!

Specifically I would like to pull Naruto, as well as Itachi as my primary targets here lol!
Naruto: He was strong, yet fragile. That is a very hard thing to balance! I think you nailed it. While he was fragile emotionally, he had strong convictions with which he held to in a steadfast manor. I enjoyed that it was apparent through his vaguely mentioned previous hardships, that his convictions and ideals for his self respect were clearly connected. To be so vague about his past, and yet to have such a concise result (whether intentionally or non) is a sign of well developed characterization. I have seen people say they wished to see Naruto be stronger, but I feel that he really was immensely tough. Or he would have run away from the very beginning.
Itachi: I must rant and rave about this one simple fact....I was guessing ALMOST right to the very conclusion as to which side of the fence his loyalties rested upon. Even in the original series he is a hard one to pin, and the fact that you kept that alive in such a different way is demonstrative of your abilities. His little games, his taunts, trying to get a rise out of his brother....It had me feeling like I wanted to punch my screen...And of course inadvertently Itachi....o.0...hahaha! But the fact that you kept him so true to his character while adding a warmth to him was brilliant. It genuinely invoked controversy in my mind about his sincerity! Well executed I say!

Now lastly I want to touch on the other pairings in the story....I was impressed you did not keep them grouped in a conventional way. They were individuals not just characters from a manga copied and pasted to a sloppy fanfiction! ^.^ So I feel a thank you is in order for a wonderful work of delectable art! So people can call you cliche...But I'll beg to differ! ^.~
~kalyx~

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From TheMadKatter13 on June 25, 2011
Definitely very cute. I absolitely loved it. Saying that, I tried reading it a week ago and just couldn't get past the first few paragraphs. They felt too......fake. I'm sorry but I can't think of any other way to describe it. But once I got past that, the story was absolitely entrancing, especially near the begining when Sasuke was silent or only spoke a few words in Japanese. Veeeeery sexy...
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From ANON - Amber on June 13, 2011
I just wanted to say that I adore this story, I have read it twice now. I think that both Naruto and Sasuke were in character for the situation they were in. Naruto was very relatable in the sense that he left his old life behind for peace in anonymity, I would have ran away too. Sasuke maybe hot, but after a childhood of being vigilant I would hard pressed to continue that stressful kind of lifestyle. Naruto may have been forced to grow up quickly on the streets, but that doesn't make him wise on the matters of love. Anyways, love the characterization and flow of the story. I look forward to reading more of your work!
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From LadyWolf on June 05, 2011
Fire..the was very well written.
As you mentioned in a chapter about being cliche, so what....to me it wasn't as cliche as you though or anyone else...

I sat and read this straight through, it held my attention. I loved the way you portrayed Naruto as being somewhat weak, but strong enough to leave and start over in a new city.

I loved Sasuke's and Itachi's charater's; Sasuke wanting to breaking away from his overbearing parents to start new make him into a strong and likable person; I really loved itachi's character, protecting his brother without him knowing even from their assholish father...

All in all a great read...can't wait to read more

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From ANON - SerialAuthor on May 23, 2011
Simply amazing. I loved Itachi. I always end up liking him more than most of the characters for some reason. Well written.
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From HalfFallenAingyl on May 15, 2011
Ahahaha, THAT WAS GREAT! Ok, so I'm not the best at reviews, I know this. I'm better at editing than I am at constructive reviewing. Oh well. I'll just say that I only review stories I like and leave it at that. I'm pulling up your profile and checking out your other stories after I post this. Keep up the good work!

P.S. You're a wonderful writer, hon. Don't let anyone get you to believe anything different, k? :)
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From ANON - Althydia on April 27, 2011
I enjoyed it very much, and I'm a little sad it's over. Will Naruto ever learn to speak Japanese? I hope so.
Thanks for sharing your story with us!

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From ANON - richon on April 19, 2011
i discovered your story last night and couldn't stop reading it. it's awesome I love it. i had a great time, the plot is great. hope you have lot of other story i will check your profil after for more
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From tjrender on April 18, 2011
Thank you for this wonderful story. It was well-written, romantic and exciting, set in my favourite city with my favourite characters. I look forward to your future work !
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From Darkerassnow on April 17, 2011
Oh wow! This whole story had me dying in laughter. Naruto was hilarious. He didn't want any "unwanted drama"! Hahahaha! I don't blame him. Sasuke and his family got some serious issues especially, his mother. I mean I wouldn't hug some complete stranger just because someone makes my child happy. I would at least give them a nice hand shake and polite chosen words. Damn, well Japanese do have a different way about things. You had their traditions down. Shikamaru and Shino? I never would've guessed. It was a lovely story and amused me greatly. I'm glad I stopped to read it.
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From KoibitoFemme on April 17, 2011
Excellent story. I made sure to look for any updates. Not too long and not too ulcer inducing. Kudos. Kudos. I hope you write more. And I am sure you know that your must write for your own pleasure and not others. Because if you aren't enjoying it then the reader will not truly find the connection with the writers heart. KUDOS!!
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From ANON - AJ on April 17, 2011
I, personally, enjoyed the first half of the fic more than the second half just because I feel like the fic switched genres on me once Itachi appeared. I liked the quietness of the first half of the story, the subtle way Sasuke was slowly revealing himself to Naruto, the hint of mystery that surrounded him. That sort of thing appeals to me, and that's why I started reading the fic. Then when Itachi showed up, the story lost a lot of its easy-going feel in favor of adding an organized crime element to the fic, which in general is not something that appeals to me.

There's nothing at all wrong with the story, it's just that organized crime stuff is not to my personal tastes and I wouldn't have read on if I'd known it was going to appear. What I'm saying is, I wish it had been foreshadowed in the beginning is all. You know how in most horror movies there's some kind of small scare right at the beginning of the movie (the heroine hears a noise and thinks someone is in the house, but it turns out to be an open window)? The producers do that to let us all know, yes, this is going to be a scary movie. I think if you'd done something like that, like have Naruto briefly run into Shino (and realize he's yakuza) in the first chapter or something, then I would have been better prepared for the second half of the story and would have missed the first half less.
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From tawanawelch on April 17, 2011
That was a fun chapter! I enjoyed reading about Sasuke's job and seeing Karin squirm under his glare about the key and I'm happy to see Suigetsu in this and hope he's more fun as the story progresses.:d
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From roro237 on April 17, 2011
Absolutely wonderful! Thank you for sharing ^_^
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