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From sameyler on October 02, 2008
finshed the frist chappie on two the second. i like it. its really good.

oh, by the way thanks for the review... ^^
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From Nenshogin22 on August 19, 2008
YOU!!! *points at author* how dare u!!!!! *sobs* y u make go n half to cry like the bitch i am :cries* yyyy!? n e way love love the story honestly one of the best ... yep that u are!!!! now they can get married ... u said they travel right well... write a smutty sequel to this story and have them travel to canada where its legal ... woot woot canada lol XD
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From Deandraquin on August 05, 2008
WOW, they got hitched, well sort of.
And Tachi is going to be a papa, sweet!!! Finally your muse is nice for Tachi.

This story is great. I really enjoyed every part of it.
I hope my story will turn out as well as yours did.

A job well done!!!!!!!!!

Huggles

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From Deandraquin on August 04, 2008
Thanx for the compliment.

OMG!! I went through at least two boxes of tissues. Your muse is very harsh on Itachi, well at least he got to say goodbye.

But yay, Naruto and Sasuke are going to live together. I hope Naruto learns to handle the weather there lol.

Great chapter as always. I can't wait for the next one.

Huggles

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From ANON - SpacePirateDoll on August 02, 2008
I just read this from chapter 1 to 15 all in one night, and I gave up hours of sleep to do it, but it was totally worth it.

At first, I was feeling it a bit, the idea was cute, but I didn't see where it could go.
And then you introduced Sasuke's fucked up family, and wow did you work that idea.

I cried at the end of chapter 12 and through 15.
(Noooo~ Itachi! Please be okay! [That was me yelling in my head while I was reading it xD])
Oh god, I'm so stuffy from crying, but I love it when fics move me enough emotionally to actually cry.

I can't explain to you how much I enjoyed reading your fic, because I'm so tired but know that now I'm a HUGE fan of yours now.

The L. W. Y. B. thing really got me too, man, it makes me want to get a tattoo of that on my fingers xD
I think that's one of the cutest things I've ever read.

Argghhh, I'd soo spew out words of admiration and undying love for you and your fic, but like I said, I'm tired as hell D=

Please update soon, even though I can see how much of a bitch is would be to write this, know that, not only me but others too, really appreciate it and enjoy it immensely~

Thanks, and sending you love&hugs through the 'net,
Space.

[PS: I want to draw fanart for your fic, especially of Any Time the Fly, could you possibly send me pictures (via email) of the kind of clothes each member would wear? Also, does any of them wear their hair different than the anime version? Like Hinata, is her hair short or long like the current version? And yeah, please don't say "I'll leave it up to you" I'm so nitpicky about how the writer views the characters in their heads, so just please do me the favor? I love you enough, but itd help me lots and give me more confidence to draw~ Thanks again! *hugscuddle*]
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From Deandraquin on August 01, 2008
OMG!!! I really had tears in my eyes. I was relieved when Sasuke got out save, but it broke my heart to read Itachi being mortally wounded.

Indeed your muse is mean to Itachi, but it works out fine in the story. I only hope she won't kill him off in the end.

I really felt touched by the last sentence of the chapter;
It was a night of sorrow and joy, and the two warring emotions were just too much to handle without loved ones by your side.

Another great chapter and I can't wait to read the next one.

Huggles

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From Deandraquin on July 30, 2008
I love this story. It has everything I look for in it.
Keep up the great writing. Your muse does a great job too in inspiring you.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Huggles
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From oliversangel on July 29, 2008
Are you implying that Itachi's father did to him, what Madara threatened to do to Sasuke? Egads!! What kind of family is this? I would imagine it would be more of an assertion of power, and a way to break his spirit, than a lust. And I agree with Jess249, your muse is kinda scary. But it makes for a good nail biting story. I am going to go back and re-read it. ^.^ I look forward to new chapters as always. xxoo

ps. And so you know, because of you, I am now hopelessly addicted to yaoi, and I seek out other stories in the genre as well, to feed my addiction. ^.^
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From ANON - Fuli on July 29, 2008
I sort of wish you didn't go there with Itachi's background. Not for the obvious reason though (though the obvious reason does factor into it), so much as, well... First we find out Naruto was raped and molested, then possibly Sasuke will be (well, molestation seems to have already happened), but now Itachi too? Just too many IMO :(. It kind of makes me think the respective gangs just... can't seem to get laid legit wise XD;. I was actually hoping his bad background would be something like having to kill a family in cold blood (considering in the manga he doesn't like to kill when he feels it's senseless) or something, and I'd have probably felt just as sorry if he was horribly effected by it. But then, that's just me, so... you can go ahead and ignore it.

Buueh, oh well. Keep writing though :). Aside from that I do like the tension and story.
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From ANON - The Black Sand of Gara on July 23, 2008
Wow perfect.

I was thinking that you would end up making if happen from within a memory but the way you did it was perfect. Plus the song did just what I was hoping it would do for Sasuke, to give him hope. Plus the line you add on at the end with what Naruto said made it complete.

Well done to Itachi for finding the person with the bomb, and I can only hope that with them all together they will soon be able to get Sasuke back from Pein. Plus I feel like I want to both punch Sasori and gave him a shoulder to cry on. Depending on the next few choices that he makes (though I have a gut feeling he is going to end up getting killed if he helps to get Sasuke out).

I loved the scene with Naruto and Sasuke getting an old time photo, it was too cute. But on a kind of darker note this line I think was the best:

I smirked through all the blood and pain, �I�m not yours. I�ll never be yours. You can�t do anything that will change that.�

Even if I wished that Sasuke was not in the position where he needed to say that at least now he is not going to break to that sick bastard and give him the pleasure that he seeks.

Well until next time,

The Black Sand of Gara

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From oliversangel on July 23, 2008
Wow. This chapter made me cry. Especially the song. I don't have personal experience with a piercing actually ripping out, but I have had them tugged on pretty firmly when fresh. (Nip peircing caught in lacey bra.) Man, that scene in The Punisher always makes me cry when that dude has all his piercings ripped out with a pair of pliers because he won't rat on his friend.
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From oliversangel on July 22, 2008
Dag Nabbit!! I need to read more. LOL. I am totally sympathetic to muses taking you dark places. The Hidan chapter of my Akatsuki series was supposed to be a LOT darker. But I couldn't write what she told me. Especially not the end the way she said to. But at least you're a good girl, and do what they say. I would appreciate borrowing a muse or two. I really need to get going on some all of my stories. Especially since you have 3 kids, and manage to crank out a chappie a day, i only have one of mine, and i have only done 2 one shots. LOL. Love the new chappie by the way. My heart ached for Naruto.
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From charmpit on July 21, 2008
Wow.
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From ANON - The Black Sand of Gara on July 21, 2008
Hey,
I noticed that during chapter 6 you didn�t put any lyrics in for the song that Naruto song �Drug Lord�s Property�. So I have had the idea in my head for the pass few days and I just read Chapter 9 today and I might of come up with a song for �Drug Lord�s Property�, but if you already have a song for it I don�t want to interfere with that � so if you don�t and you want to read my song for �Drug Lord�s Property� you can e-mail me at Kar.zini@gmail.com and I�ll email you the lyrics.

The Black Sand of Gara

P.S. I don�t really listen to a lot of punk songs so it�s more of an Alternative/ Metal song�.
P.P.S. I like your story though I do have to hope that it will have a happy ending. Plus I see that Sasuke has forgotten what had happen to Naruto, but maybe he will remember if he thinks about the concert he had gone to. And thinks about Naruto and his songs and his past. So that he realizes that Naruto will always love him, all he has to do is stay sane and not let Pein break him. We believe in you Sasuke.
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From oliversangel on July 18, 2008
Hurray for stay at home moms who can update frequently!!!!
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