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Reviews for Naruto X: Chaos and Legacies

By : DFoarile
  • From ANON - Hilarity88 on November 29, 2013
    You can't have Sasuke attack the village so blatantly, and NOT be a villain. Even if he has a harem it will be nothing but OCs since no one in Konoha would like him now much less be permitted to marry him.
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  • From Kyuubiperry on March 30, 2010
    Who is tayuya going to be with. I was hoping that you put her with naruto since she and his mother are just alike.
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  • From angelnomiko on March 04, 2010
    ohh man that was awasome .. please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

    agnel
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  • From Shadowfox32459 on October 02, 2008
    Please update soon this story needs to be finished
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  • From Katrex on September 11, 2008
    Ok where to start... You plot is good... however your writing needs a lot of work, I suspect English is not you first language(though I may be wrong) because you don't seem to realize what "sounds" good or bad.

    "I'm going to kill you!" Naruto says in a serious tone
    "I'd like to see you try" Neji tells him in a funny tone
    "Please don't fight" hinata interrupts in a moody tone.... Well its not literature, there is far too much repitition, and you really don't have to detail everything.
    So a few pieces of advice... Go though you work and remove 90% of the "tone"s Instead just have something like

    "I'm going to kill you!" Naruto screams at neji
    "Ha!" Neji laughs "I'd like to see you try" He adds as he readies his stance
    "Please don't fight" hinata interrupts, the first of her tears splashes on the ground
    And amazingly we have something that has more suspense and is readable

    also
    "blah blah blah" naruto says in a questioning tone "Blah?" is incorect it implies that the previous statement was a question, you should put in a "then".
    So that's speech 101
    Next... realism in the sex scenes...
    they continue this for a couple of hours
    blah blah blah blah
    they do this for an hour and a half blah blah... I remember once counting 4 hours of hinata watching tsunade and naruto having sex and not being mentioned once! and the same vica versa, i know naruto is meant to be some kind of stud, but saying they do it for hours doesn't make it any more erotic to read
    and finally there's the spelling....
    All of that in short... YOU NEED AN EDITOR

    m sorry i sound harsh, I actualy like the story but i just couldnt read anymore after chapter five.

    Hoping you'll pay this advice some attention, and thats all it is "advice"
    Signed Katrex


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  • From Aaronleach45123 on July 14, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on July 01, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 30, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 28, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 25, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 23, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 22, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From GhostwriterMO on June 18, 2008
    Honestly you have a wonderful Harem story and I like were you are going, but to me the term harem means more than three involved, Sakura/Hinata/Tsunade and etc. but I think you don't have to go overboard with willing females you know? 1-5 I can believe 1-1000 not so good for the story you know? So please pick carefully or naughty for your story okay? Keep up the good work.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 17, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on June 12, 2008
    Awesome chapter update soon.
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