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By : Jelp

From ANON - sdogif on July 24, 2008
I'm not finished the story yet, and while the plot is quite intriguing, I keep getting put off my a certain element.
The children. Babies one month of age barely gurgle much and blow raspberries and definitely couldn't wiggle about and 'accidentally' bang each other up. They can hardly lift their own heads!

A 12 month old child is hardly speaking, let alone communicating a series of words such a Yes, No and Hokage.

It's just the average one year old may be able to repeat sounds happily shot at them, but mostly, their around the mama, dada, maybe one or two other words. And they may not even be connection of what the words really mean. At 1 year, we are still predominately on continuous streams of babbled nonsense stage. Especially in a group of pre-mature quadruplets were develop is usually slower than normal. I'm probably making more of this than it means to anyone else, but as a care-giver it's just like a dumb pet-peeve. I love the scenario though, can't wait to see how this will all go down. Poor Naruto.
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From pumbaaaa on July 13, 2008
*pulls out hair* You know, I think I would have been fine with the wait, until you called the next chapter Seduction! You're evil! :P Can't wait.
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From Ljiljana on July 10, 2008
Uh. I read it all at once, just now... It's not really my cup of tea, but I couldn't make myself stop anyway. That would, I guess, be more of a compliment for your writing skills then for this story, but I will continue when you update. And probably let you know what I think about details.
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From kinai26 on July 09, 2008
Cool fic - I love it so far. I have already left a mark in my calender so I�ll be able to read the next chapter when you post it XD
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From ANON - littleolmee on July 09, 2008
Evil, evil, evil*shakes head at author*. Just kidding ya. I personally like where you are leaving off for your long trip. It sets everything up for Sasuke's turn to show Naruto how much he really loves him. Sakura though, while I do understand where she is coming from thanks to the chapter on her side, I still feel she is behaving very badly for someone who has done so much wrong. It is funny how quickly she forgets that Naruto didn't ever cheat on her with anyone but she knowingly did. Naruto has been the poor sucker alone for the ride in this while others did all the deeds without his knowledge but she's angry with him for not walking away from his children? I found it interested that even though at an earlier chapter Naruto said he shouldn't have hit Sakura because he didn't really believe she would have hit the baby but it was just the fact she raised her hand to a child with her strength that made him act but in this chapter he goes on to say he doesn't want Sakura around the babies. Why is that? Is he not as sure as he wants to be that she wouldn't hurt them? Is he worried she would take her jealousy and anger out on them? Is this something Sasuke will pick up on and use to help win Naruto or is this just me picking things out and not really an important issue? Though I'd think it would be. It did lead Naruto to decide to stay and not leave with Sakura or is he using this as an excuse to see what he could have with Hinata and Sasuke? He doesn't seem as bothered by the idea of him and Sasuke being together as one would think but he did admit he had been having sexual dreams about Sasuke so that means one than just that one Sasuke gave him. I guess if he has been having dreams then he has had time to get use to the idea huh? Naruto doesn't know what he is doing does he? I mean he is use to the 'love' Sakura has giving him I'm sure the 'love' Hinata and Sasuke have to show him will be very different from what he is use to from Sakura. It will make getting things back with Sakura harder I'd think. Plus without Naruto around what would keep her from trying to get something going with Lee or someone else again? Will Ino play any part in this? I mean Sakura had been going to her to talk and Naruto mentioned he didn't think Ino would talk to him cause Sakura talked to her and Ino also thought he was cheating. Well, Aug 2 is a LONG way off but I'll hang tight and wait it out. Have a good time on your trip and be careful, come back safe, sound, and well rested. Take care and thanks for the updates before you left.

littleolmee
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From bluegenjutsu on July 09, 2008
Thanks for the new chapter!! I'm glad that Naruto is going to stay with his kids and that will give Sasuke the chance to win him over. Go Sasuke!!! :D
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From serenagold on July 09, 2008
Sakura is playing her cards all wrong. (Not that I'm rooting for her.)

Keep up the great work!
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From Allys on July 09, 2008
XD ... XD ... XD ... XD ... Yaaay!!!!!! LOL. I'm so happy he decided to stay! And he's not mad abut the smex!! (Only Naruto :) ). And he thinks Sasuke is a hottie! XD. Everything is Yay! Except I feel kinda bad for Hinata *Huggles her* She's in the friend zone. I was immensely pleased with Naruto for the majority of this chapter and sasuke looking like a kicked or rather about to be kicked puppy... So Adorable! LOL I don't know if this makes me a sadist but I love to see that boy suffer a little bit. Not too much, cause then I'd get sad, but a little bit is real real good *grins evilly*. And the title of the next chapter! *Dies in anticipation* LOL, I'm totally going to be a complete dorkus and mark the date on my calendar XD. Enjoy your vacation Sweetie. I hope you a good flight and everything goes smoothly. *Huggles* I wish I was going away this summer *sighs*. Ja! ♥♥♥
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From ANON - RAinshi on July 09, 2008
oh please say there's going to be at lest one threesome
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From ANON - anonymous on July 09, 2008
Sakura is the wife I knew I was marrying. I love her, and I want her back, but how am I supposed to have sex with her again when I know that Lee has had sex with her too?" Naruto asked, shuddering slightly. "It was one thing wondering if she ever thought about you while we were having sex, it's another to know that she'll have someone to compare me with," Naruto said, looking dejected.

Wow, could you make Naruto into any more of a faily asshole?
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From ANON - Lily on July 08, 2008
WOW! Neji's reaction was so cool lol! wow finally everything and everyone (naruto and sakura) know the true about everything. I think that it was really cute the way that the were slepping ^_^ I hate sakura. She shouldn't have done that to naruto! even if she thought that he was sheating on her. Because come on! that's no a good reason at all. And I was even madder(is that even a word lol) when naruto seem to be ok with her and everything! (can we accidentaly kill sakura? lol) ohhh I really wanted to hear Sasuke's explanation on how he got is sperm lol. too bad Hinata came right then.lol well I'm review in this today! and there is not another chap(today is 07/18) so I take it as you couldn't update:tears: well I hope you have a good vacation enjoy!! We will miss you! have agood trip and we will be loking foward to you returning lol!

hug&kisses

Lily
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From ANON - Lily on July 08, 2008
WOW! Neji's reaction was so cool lol! wow finally everything and everyone (naruto and sakura) know the true about everything. I think that it was really cute the way that the were slepping ^_^ I hate sakura. She shouldn't have done that to naruto! even if she thought that he was sheating on her. Because come on! that's no a good reason at all. And I was even madder(is that even a word lol) when naruto seem to be ok with her and everything! (can we accidentaly kill sakura? lol) ohhh I really wanted to hear Sasuke's explanation on how he got is sperm lol. too bad Hinata came right then.lol well I'm review in this today! and there is not another chap(today is 07/18) so I take it as you couldn't update:tears: well
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From Dreamfool on July 07, 2008
Oh my God you are an amazing author. This story is so real, so raw I can barely believe it. This story could have gone wrong in so many ways and honestly, I expected it to. Most authors (and I am also guilty of this) write what they want to happen, not what should. You've kept the characters true to form, which is hard. You've also managed not to make anyone a clear badguy. Infact theclosest person to being a badguy is Sasuke and he's the main character. I am really looking forward to update. Sasuke has a lot of explaining to do.
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From bluegenjutsu on July 07, 2008
Thanks for the new chapter!! I sure hope that Naruto will be able to forgive Sasuke for having non-consensual sex with him!
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From KibaNaru on July 06, 2008
ZOMG!!! 3 Weeks! I can't wait that long! T~T I hope Naru forgives Sasuke, even if he's nuts.
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