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Reviews for Why I Became a Jounin, By Shikamaru Nara

By : loche606

From bloodshound on April 19, 2011
din see that coming.
'frozen nap time.' *snerk
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From ANON - chibi on November 22, 2008
okay... that was an awfully evil cliffhanger!

you're mean.. *sniffs*

update soon! can't wait for the next chapter!XD
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From Rockyshores on September 23, 2008
OMG, I was SO not expecting that!!! Loved the chapter.
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From ladygizarme on September 23, 2008
yaaayzzzzz, another chapter!! ILU SO HARDDDDD!! omg

lol, plot irritants..inne, they were chafing XD

mmmm sex in the rain..ShikaNaru sex in the rain...me like..me love!
marveling over the strange urge to whisper when someone else does. that is so true. and i love how intimate it makes it feel (well, they are pretty intimate there lol) also...i hope naru actually got/gets up lol...they might catch a cold >.>

ooh, and the morning after the (first?) accidental-during-sleep kiss...naruto's reaction was spot-on, so IC, IMHO. i like shikamaru's observations and show of care without prying. awww, they watched the sunset. shika had good intuition about that ne... and i like the description of rising to a challenge like a game of shogi. NICE.

heee, making an omelet, so nonchallantly finding out each other is gay..heee "like getting stabbed in the face with a kunai" lmao, ur ~~fedak--erm, i mean~~ ino-"love" is showing lmao
..somehow, after a short convo where they reveal they're gay, "resuming his egg beating" sounds...so much like innuendo lol

and then we get to the meat of things, and omg even though i KNEW it was coming because we DISCUSSED it, that made me so sad. just imagining naruto's face and sadness while telling this, omg, TEARS! jeez, please write more. like NOW. i know you don't wanna be ordered, but i'm not..i'm BEGGING, and you accept that, ne?? *on knees* heh..

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From Houseki on September 23, 2008
�Like getting stabbed in the face with a kunai.� lmao you can just tell he said it like it was an every day thing!!! loved it!

Nice lil smut in the beginning Tsuma! I like how we get to see them "now" and "then". :p

and................ OMGWTFWTHOMFGAHHHH!!! *ahem* Naru killed Kakashi?! Oi Oi... tell me we do NOT have to wait until MY birthday to find out WHY/HOW? That is too far from now!! OMG!! lol I can't believe you did that! gaahhh *sigh* so evil, my tsuma. *sigh*... but I still love ya ^__~

KEEEEEEP WRITING LOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!

*chu*

~Me
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From Houseki on September 22, 2008
OMFG YOU SUCK! I can't believe you STOPPED! lmao!!!

wowwwwwwww! You have tossed some serious twists into this lil' story! What is with Naru's bedroom? Can't wait to hear all this. And Sasuke? Poor Shika! How's he gonna get Naru's mind off of old Sasu? :p

LOVED how Shika blamed the couch for him wanting to stay, and just LOVED it all together! Wish you'd work on this more cuz it is SUGOI! Just like my Tsuma ^_^ *chu* hehe

lessthanthree,

Me
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From Rockyshores on September 22, 2008
I really like this, please continue!
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From ladygizarme on September 22, 2008
kyaa, yayz! I'm so glad I told you it was Shika's b-day today! And that you buckled down and wrote on this, cuz Shika deserves some love on his bday dammit, and wtf knows if *I'll* finish *my* project in time... >.< ~~stupid procrastinating me..~~

anyway, I love how you write Shika, TRULY, and Shika/Naru's interaction. I like the observations Shika makes about Naru's house, and that the empty ramen bowls around the apartment are simply acknowledged without disgust or much reaction other than he probably expected that from Naruto :p I like that he focuses on the interesting features, like the spirals and the window. (sounds pretteh to meeee actually). Naruto's bedroom is a bit morbid...interesting, but ominous feeling. I want to know how it came about, and did he paint it? The detail of the bed being extremely tall intrigues me also.

the couch's comfort mojo makes me giggle. i can totally see shika succumbing to comfort mojo on a couch. and, really, i just love the idea of shika saying mojo. *giggle*

the last scene!! OMGOMGOMGGGGG dude.. WHY do you DO THIS to me??? you always give me a taste enough to make my mouth water, and then leave me hangin', espcially with this fic that I seem to crave. It is of the good, though, that means you're doin' it right, ne? XP but seriously...that last scene was so the perfect blend of tender, sweet, and heartbreaking! you did SO MUCH with such a simple scene, it makes my heart hurt. i can't wait til nic's b-day, for realz yo

lub joooo!! lub shikaaaaa
&hearts

~lg
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From KyuubiKit on May 07, 2008
Ne ne...more... I love Shika/Naru the pairing doesnt get enough love... hehe...can't wait to see where you take this..nice start though
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From ladygizarme on May 06, 2008
Chapter two:
Woot! Finally, after like two YEARSSSSS!!! ..anyway..
Stupid need to eat. Troublesome. I agree, shika! (and that �need to pee� thing, too.. mendokuse)
�Hmmm.� Shikamaru said, smiling wider this time, knowing what Naruto had just said would sink into the blonde�s skull in a second.
Wait for it�
�Hehehe.� I know I already told you in IM when you gave me spoilers, but I am STILL laughing about that, I can just HEAR naru�s mischievous little chuckle!!
�Why didn�t you tell anyone you were a Jounin?� Shikamaru asked.
Naruto looked at his hands. Sadness filled his blue eyes for only an instant.
�Bahh, who cares about that! I need a drink!� ooooh, mysterious! *intrigued even more* ..btw, smooth subject change there, Naruto�
He was trying to be thoughtful, although he kept admiring the way Naruto�s butt looked in his pants.
Troublesome. to quote Naruto� hehehe
He was facing Shikamaru, a black cord holding a blue pendant hung on his bare chest. Shikamaru wanted to examine it, as he hadn�t seen it this close before. The necklace, of course, not the chest.
Or�well�Troublesome. again, I say: hehehe
Also, hahaha, is ino playing matchmaker? Devious blondes�. (hush, I know I�m blonde, too >.> )
Shikamaru sighed. �Well, come on.�
�I am.�
�No, you aren�t�
�Oh, right.� Naruto said, and began to slowly move forward. lmao! Lmaolmaolmao! Ahh, yknow what�s great? When people know what it�s LIKE to be drunk like that, so they know how to WRITE it, too! ilu!
Kyaaaaaaaaa you ended it THERE??!! YOU TEASE!!! Ok, srsly, write MORE, and please don�t make us wait another two years�!!!

ilu!
&hearts
~ lg
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From ladygizarme on May 06, 2008
Omg,ok, I know I reviewed on tonfa when you originally posted this, but I had to reread the first chappie before diving into the second, just cuz I wanted to� and� I hafta mention a few things now lmao..

�Look Ino, I don�t get a lot of time off now that I am a jounin, and when I do have days off I would prefer to spend them in a relaxed state.� He said.
�You have only been a jounin for one day, let�s go.� lmfao, literally. That is greatness, yo.
Also:
he sank into the cushions, trying to blend in with the rest of the potted plants. heeee, you have such awesome shika punchlines XD
Leading a team of genin was bad enough when they were your age. Leading a group of genin that are 5 years younger than you...troublesome. heheh, like you said, mastercard comm.
Ino had already seen pretty much all of him. Which was why Shikamaru now considered himself gay. But that was a story for another time. lol, you really hated Ino way back when you first started this fic (not that you LOVE her NOW..just sayin..�sfunny)
the other jounin dancing around, his legs stuck in his pants legs, mud flying everywhere, and Ino pretty much losing her mind. lmao, I can so see Naruto doing that XD
Shika shook his head. A conversation now? How troublesome! �I�m alright Naruto, what kind of mission were you on?�
�I was taking the genin to the village of wave, and we encountered some rogue ninja. Then...�
�That�s ok, Naruto, never mind.� Shika said. haha, poor shika.. can�t be bothered..

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From Houseki on May 06, 2008
Nyaaaaaaaaaa dooooooooood motto!!!!!!!!!!!!! it's so cute that shika is falling for naru. i luffs it! motto motto onegai?! luffs you too! Motto!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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From Houseki on May 02, 2008
b/c for some reason 2 years ago (TWO FUCKING YEARS AGO!!) I didn't leave a review, I will leave one now ^_^

DOOOOOOOOOD UP FUCKING DATE! *cough* K? lmao Nicaru-no-go damn demands it yo!! haha nya this is gonna be so cute when you actually get them together nya! and yeah dood... laughed at all the stuff you sent me earlier that you laughed at... and thensome! nya! i love my troublesome jounin ^_^ and you! hehe! UPDATE LOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! MWAH!

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From ANON - azillia on October 18, 2006
love this!
want more ^.^
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From ANON - TsukiRed on September 10, 2006
That was funny. The reason: to escape his friends--who are as always, troublesome. Would you be thinking of doing more about Naruto and what happened when he became a Jounin?

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