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Reviews for Waiting for a Miracle

By : masaharu
  • From ANON - RyuichiSakuma2 on February 04, 2006
    Really good. :D
    More pleaaaase!
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  • From ANON - Kurama Crazy on February 04, 2006
    Hey great story, I love it!^_^
    I noticed you were looking for a beta, I'd be happy to help If your just looking for someone to help with grammer and spelling.
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  • From ANON - Kerushi on February 04, 2006
    Brilliant!
    Nothing was wrong with it, and I think I understood what happened with Sakura and Sasuke there. You created an excellent mood, and portrayed the villages really well, especially how crappy everything was going for everything.
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  • From Inuzuka on February 04, 2006
    That was excellent! I'm really enjoying this so far.

    Your portrayal of war scarring Naruto was strangely endearing, first of all. Though I doubt the true horrors of war can ever be captured in any medium, ever, you did a great job of showing how it affected him. His pride in Konoha would make it's injuries hurt him, as well, I think. It's very macabre, but that's war. I think some more backstory on why Sakura was in a shelter of sorts with those strange seals is in order, but seeing as we've only been treated to one chapter so far, requesting plot like that is ridiculous.

    I also like that you have Naruto having a spine, that he's been able to grow bitter. I usually find the idea of a bitter Naruto cheesy, and it turns me away, but from from what I've read, you've captured the idea very well. You've just done a good job with it, it's hard to go into specifics. However, if I was to complain of characterization...Sakura. I don't hate her, I just don't think Sasuke was as important to her as she outwardly projected, it was more the idea of him she liked...but that's really open for interpretation, and fan fiction is all about different interpretations, yeah?

    As for this being a relationship story...I'm quite interested to find out how this will blossom into a relationship. Naruto's feelings for Sasuke are rather convulted...intriguing, and I can't wait to see how you go about it. Really, I'm interested all together to see how this story progresses. I don't think Sasuke needs to be seme, and Naruto sure as hell doesn't need to be uke, as a side not. It's a situational thing.

    One thing that bothered me plot-wise is how Naruto fought...in recent chapters, it's shown that he relies on the kyuubi a lot, and that he's a true jinchuriiki, in the sense that Gaara, who fights solely with his sand-controlling prowess is a true jinchuriiki. But, you only see him fight when he's furious, so...yeah. E-mail me about beta'ing if you want, I'd be interested to do it, but there's absolutely nothing wrong with your English. It's very coherent, and well-written.

    *adds to favourites*
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  • From ANON - - on February 04, 2006
    I personally think this is a very well written fic. Its been so long since i have read a fic that acutally has structer to it along with a developing plot! i can't wait to read more! ^^
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  • From ANON - Bookworm51485 on February 04, 2006
    For someone who's first language isn't english you do amazingly well. A lot better than some people who's first language is english. I'd offer to beta your story but I'm already doing it for three other people and between my classes and other things I have to do I'm a bit slow. But yea I loved your story, though I wonderd about one thing. You had Naruto getting really really upset, but the kyuubi didn't take over any? So I was kind of curious how much of the manga that you've read, if you read the manga at all. I don't want to say anything because I might give something away that you don't know yet. But yea I definitely love it. I told another author that I'd started to lose faith in the genre because I wasn't finding any good stories that are being updated but between the two of you, you are restoring my faith. So I hope to see an update for this story soon:)
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  • From ANON - no name for now on February 04, 2006
    Oh my god that was an awesome first long great chapter. I wish I could be more coherent but i so can't. I loved how you wrote naruto in this.I cried. I did. Sasu/Naru has that power on me. And I'm sad that Sakura died. That story has lots of potential and it was well written. It's so dark it's amazing really.

    I can't wait to see more and how everything will develop.
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  • From ANON - looli on February 04, 2006
    hi i haven't read the story yet cause i just wanted to know will they end up togather and alive togather
    and not heart beting togather but stel can have sex togather cause its oky if they end up with no heart bets
    and stel can have sex :)
    love
    looli
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  • From ANON - Trekiael on February 04, 2006
    Whoa! It's so very good! Very dark, very intense in emotions. You must have cracked your skull writing such a long and good chapter with such a constructive plot.

    And for someone which mother tongue is not english and who don't have a beta-reader and who write such a long chapter, your sure didn't make mistakes (well, not that I've seen at least, again, english is not my mother tongue either).

    I don't hate Sakura either, just the fact that she's so obssessed with Sasuke, like there is nothing else in her life, it make her kinda empty, what are her goals other than to have Sasuke,hum?

    I wonder what happened to Orochimaru, if the seals on her arms didn't kill him, where is he??? I think they just placed Sasuke's soul in the place of Orochimaru's as the dominating one, but I might be wrong. Well, now at least Sasuke is kinda free, even if it won't be easy to him from now on.

    I seriously do hope it's a SasuNaru (as in Sasuke is seme/top while Naruto is uke/bottom) as you put it and not a mistake from your part. I so hate it when such a good story finish in "ha, you thought so? sorry" cause I can't stomach the idea of Sasuke being bottom, it make me want to puke, but I can stomach to some level SasuNaruSasu. That doesn't seem important, especially in your plot, but I wanted to make sure before I read more and really began to fall in love with your story.

    Well, good luck! Keep the wonderful work! Ja ne!
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