Chapter 10 and still hardly any sakura

I think some of them are here just for the comments I kno I am

I understand some of you are dissatisfied with this fanfic. Ive felt like that too. But its free fucking porn. Hes not getting paid or told to do it. If some of you hate it so much why do you keep reading it. Is it just to complain more. Im sure none of you are this pathetic. So if you dont like it, kindly walk away from it and find a better one for you. Thats what i do.

Your decent but repititive lemons aside, wat is seriously up with your gary-stu Sasuke..? Can the man do no wrong? Oh woe is me, my "friend" begged me to fuck his hot wife, I really, really didnt wanna do it tho! I'm just as powrful as him (hey, you said it..) so theres no way he can force me to, but I'l still do it. Oh shit, now I got "blackmailed" by his daughter! Curse this ginormous dick I dont want but use at every chance without hesitating! Arghh, I am the victim here!!

And you think your weak, token effort of  "oh, he gets punched and talks to ppl and has someone as strong as him" hides the fact that this is gary-stu-ness at its best? your problem isnt that you writing a smut/fetish fic, its the fact that u get heated when ppl point out the holes in this or compare it to the piles of similarl shit OOC-Naruto fics.

also, youve got this weird bashing-but-not-really vibe when it comes to Naruto. Looking at your most recent review replies, u twisted one of his main beliefs of remdeption into him being a limp-dicked cuck? thats what he gets for being too "kind"?

Shit, even among all the stuff I've seen on AFF, this some gold-medal mental gymnastics regarding both charcters. lol, u really runnin with the "fan" part of "fanfiction", huh?

but hey, any review that isnt 2 lines of fluff singin praises on anything u write is just "haters" and "don't mean shit", lol

That was a azing chapter, I loved how you wrote their internal conflicts.

Hey, how about updating Loveless next?

Just wondering, will we get Naruko anytime soon?

a Gary Stu doesn't - a. get punched in the nose, b. have someone who's exactly as strong if not stronger than him, and c. confide in other people with their worries over certain things

who are you kidding your sasuke is a Gary Stu it's like the man can do no wrong any bit of conflict is completely washed over with no  repercussions "oh he got punched in the face" so what he still comes out on top that alone just screams Gary Stu 

I apologize if I came in a little hostile it wasn't meant to come off that way I was just reviewing from what I read honestly I didn't mean to cause any trouble

Wouldn't waste even waste your mom cum on this piece of shit ya little bitch don't flatter yourself 

Damn I feel sorry for naruto for this story but this is what you get when you thrust your friend toof much

Sasuke wouldn't touch those fugly Uzumaki/Hyuga bitches with a ten feet pole let alone fuck them. What disgusting shit.

I'll never understand this particular fetish or the mass of fans that enjoy it, I've skimmed through just to get a feel and I just couldn't I mean everybody's so out of whack I didn't even bother finishing the second chapter and while sasuke isn't a revenge drivin little prick he's far from this SI Gary Stu sex god you imagined but then I guess everybody tends to embellish their favorite characters anyroad I tried something new and didn't enjoy it hopefully the rest of your stories don't follow the same mold

This story is definitely much better than the previous incarnation, especially in terms of characterization. However, I think Naruto's reaction to Hinata's infidelity was somewhat glossed over. You have to remember that up until he was 12-13, Naruto had basically no one. And the only person who really showed any care for him, before Iruka, was the person who had to run the whole village. He also had to deal with the villagers ire, and while they didn't harm him or call him a demon, they certainly treated him like something that was better off gone. That impacts a child growing up, and I believe is one of the reasons why he was so insistent on chasing after Sasuke. A person who had become his first friend. Now, his first lover, first wife, first bearer of his children, goes behind his back and fucks his best friend. Now it's an odd situation since they were already doing it, but it was the secrecy and the betrayal that mattered there. I also personally thought the way he handled Sasuke was a bit off, "She's a beautiful woman I don't blame you for fucking her behind my back", but Naruto is kind of off when dealing with Sasuke most of the time so whatever.

this story is trash I'm not gonna lie you can write really well might I add but that doesn't really matter cause it's all trash uncle anon is right I skimmed through your stories and they're all the same. I'm not even gonna pretend to be nice point out flaws this story just sucks