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The Canalized River	By : susanna Category: Naruto > Yaoi - Male/Male Views: 944 -:- Recommendations : 0 -:- Currently Reading : 0
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Chapter
Twenty-Seven: What Jiraya doesn't know

“Now
to you”, Karin said to Suigetsu.

“What
about me?”

Even
though he could not look into their eyes Naruto knew that they were
engaged in a staring match.

“You
fought Kisame, didn't you?”

“What's
that got to do with it?”

“I
want to have a look at your wounds.”

“There
are none.”

“This
is not the right moment to be embarrassed. I need to take care of
your wounds.”

“And
I am not even a young boy any more... But it is as I told you: There
are no wounds.”

“Even
if it's only scratches I want to have a look. I want to make sure
that they don't develop into something worse.”

“You
cannot get enough of male naked skin, can you? But I have to
disappoint you: I did not fight Kisame, and consequently I am not
wounded.”

“You
did not fight Kisame?” Karin asked unbelievingly. “Then
what did you do? I mean, you could have come to Juugo's aid, or
backed up the boys.”

“I
did not fight Kisame but that does not mean that I was lazy. I had
quite a hard time talking him out of fighting.”

“You
talked him out of fighting?”

“Indeed.
I persuaded him that he was only cannon fodder for the bigheads of
Akatsuki, and more importantly, that Itachi had betrayed him, never
telling him about his real position in the organization or about his
real aims, which is getting power for him and his littler brother.”

“Power
for him and Sasuke? What are you talking about? You don't think that
Itachi would want to share his power with Sasuke.”

“He'll
need him as a second-in-command. Come on, do you really believe that
Itachi would invite Sasuke to a secret hiding-place just to be killed
by him? Or just to kill him? To me it has been obvious from the
beginning that he has some other plans for his little brother, only
Sasuke himself in his desire to take revenge would not be ready to
see it.”

“It
makes sense”, Karin said.

Naruto
considered giving to them his own, better-founded information, but he
decided not to: He'd tell about it when Sasuke would listen as
well.

“So you told Kisame your ideas about Itachi's
plans, and he believed you and decided not to fight you.”

“Yep.
It was quite a bit of work actually. Chopping off his head would have
been much easier, and quicker in the bargain, but as Sasuke does not
want us to kill anyone...”

Again
there was this weird idea of Sasuke having turned into a
philanthropist who was not able to kill. Naruto could hardly believe
it.

“Let
me still check whether you are wounded.”

“Do
you really think that I got hurt from talking?”

“I
don't know whether I can believe you...”

He
did not undress, but he allowed her to move her hands over this chest
at ten centimetres' distance to check the flow of his chakra.

“Looks
like it's true”, she said. “I would never have guessed
it.”

“I
know that you believe that I am only an insensitive brute who thinks
of nothing but fighting.”

And
sex, Naruto added silently.

“I
don't”, she said. “I - ”

“You
don't have to tell. But now it's your turn.”

Karin
looked at him questioningly.

“I
can see that you are wounded.”

“It's
only scratches.”

“We
cannot afford any of them to turn into something worse.”

“I'll
take care of them myself.”

“Not
of the one on your back. I know, you have been biting your teeth,
looking first after Juugo and Sasuke whose wounds are far worse, and
even after Naruto, but now they are all well cared for and there's
time to look after you.”

“Are
you a med nin too?” Naruto asked.

“No.
Karin's our only one, that's why we cannot afford to lose her. You'll
tell me what to do, Karin! Just take your shirt off! You won't be the
first woman I see naked, and even if Naruto has not seen any naked
woman before, I am quite sure that he will survive the sight...”

They
are really crazy, Naruto thought, charging the atmosphere so heavily
with thoughts about sex that a simple act as looking after each
other's wounds becomes a great challenge and can only take place
after a long discussion. It did have some advantages that Sakura kept
at a clear distance.

Suigetsu
was not keeping at a clear distance. He cleaned the rather ugly,
though not very deep wound on Karin's back very gently, very
carefully, even overcautiously, obviously not wanting to cause her
any pain. A real, professional med nin would have cared much less,
Naruto thought, and been finished in a third of the time. He would
also have grabbed her shoulder much more firmly when he had to move
her, not as gently as Suigetsu did, who hardly dared to touch her. It
might be insecurity, Naruto thought, as Suigetsu was not a medical
ninja after all, but he could see what Suigetsu did not see: that
Karin was smiling.

Following
her instructions Suigetsu disinfected and then bandaged the wound on
her back.

“What
about the rest?” he asked. “Do you want me to do it, or
do you want to do it yourself?”

His
voice had lost its usual tone of confidence and irony, instead it was
insecure, deep, and somewhat hoarse.

“You
may do it”, she answered, and her voice had changed as well; it
had become soft and a bit thin.

Suigetsu
moved around so that he now sat in front of her. She had turned a bit
as well, so that she would meet him, and Naruto could catch a glimpse
of her breasts. They were not round and full and defying the law of
gravity as those of his sexy-no-jutsu persona did, but rather pointy
and a bit hanging, and still they seemed very – well,
interesting to Naruto, and he envied Suigetsu who was allowed to see
them in full.

Though
he could see that Suigetsu was careful not to touch them... Very
gently he looked after her wounds, first after the one that was just
below her left breast, then after the cut that went right over her
right breast, and of course he was not able to tend to this wound
without touching the breast. This time he did not ask for permission
with words, only with looks, and Karin also answered him with looks
alone.

Naruto
watched in astonishment, seeing only half of what was going on,
Suigetsu meeting Karin's eyes, looking down because he could not
sustain the warmth lying in them, looking up again because of course
he could not stare at her breasts – and Karin herself looking
and smiling and then, when she saw her smile reflected in Suigetsu's
eyes, blushing and closing her eyes and opening them again.

Suigetsu
returned to his work, touching her very gently, not only the area
around the wound itself but also the shoulder, pretending to turn her
towards the light so that he could see what he was doing, but even
for Naruto it was obvious that this was not the real purpose; he did
not simply take her by the shoulders and turn her around as a real
medical ninja would have done, he just touched her with the tips of
his fingers, very shyly and tentatively, it almost seemed as if he
was not even touching Karin, but just letting his fingers hover some
tenths of a millimetre over her skin.

“Medical
nins are trained not to be too gentle”, Karin said, and her
voice was deep and came from the deepest depths of her belly.

“Would
you want me to be less gentle?” Suigetsu asked, barely able to
control his voice.

Karin
shook her head.

He
went on, cleaning the wound, then clamping it according to her
instructions – a few times she winced in pain, but she
supressed all urge to cry out, nor did she complain.

At
last he had finished. He looked into her eyes again, carefully
touching her shoulder, no longer under the pretense of having to turn
her around. She smiled at him and suddenly she returned the gesture,
caressing his shoulder, his neck, his cheeks. He blushed, closed his
eyes, grew more courageous himself, then suddenly they both took each
other by the shoulders, drew closer, their cheeks touched, and then
their lips, not in a passionate kiss, but just touching and
withdrawing as if they still were not sure whether they might dare to
kiss for real.

Naruto
was not able to turn his eyes. He knew that he should, because he was
watching something extremely private that was not intended for his
eyes at all, and still it was impossible for him to turn away. Never
in his life had he seen anything like this. He had seen Jiraya
picking up this or that woman at a bar, mostly women who were easy to
get because they were used to trading sexual favors for money or
glamour or even for getting some sexual pleasure for themselves. He
had seen Jiraya smile at them, invite them to his table, touch first
their hands, then their face, then, under the table, their knees,
thinking that Naruto would not notice. The women had smiled and
allowed themselves to be touched (well, most of them) but never had
any of them returned the caresses, they had just let Jiraya have his
way and then put his arm around their shoulders and lead them to his
room.

Jiraya's
book had not been much better: Some forty or thirty pages before the
end the heroine would finally admit that she was in love with the
hero, and then he would kiss her – no, not simply kiss her, his
tongue would ravish the deep cavern of her mouth, he would squeeze
her breasts in his hands, torment her nipples, pinch the white tender
skin of her inner thighs, enter her first with his fingers while
caressing her clitoris, then with his member or his cock –
Jiraya would never use the word penis. He would make her moan and
scream in pain and pleasure, and the next day the heroine would feel
all sore, but she would have had the best sex of her life, which was
no surprise since she had been a virgin before that. (Jiraya did not
seem to care about little details as this. His heroines had to save
themselves up for the hero.)

None of these graphic scenes had
moved Naruto as much as what was going on between the two people in
front of him: Looking and kissing and touching, feeling insecure and
still daring to touch, feeling timid and still having the courage to
open up to the other's caresses... not just having the woman, as
Jiraya did, or allowing herself to be had, but both open and curious
and alive – Naruto had not known that something as this might
exist.

Digiditz:
Thanks for your compliments! The story is finished, so I can upload
one chapter every morning. I hope you will continue to like the
story!

XZanayu:
Or course Naruto would follow them! He was glad that he got invited
to come with them!
Thanks for your comment!

LadyRonin:
Thanks for your comments and your thoughts on the story and your
speculations! I hope you will like my answers to your questions in
the chapters that are to come after this little distraction. :-)

I
have not thought about putting Naruto into the same emotional state
as Sasuke after the massacre, though coming to think of it you may be
right. I had just thought of putting him into a situation where he is
utterly alone and everything seems lost, and then I had to find words
to express his despair. Maybe how people react to such a situation is
not so different after all.

dkf:
Thanks again for your comments and your thoughts on the story. My
interpretation of both the boys' characters is rather personal and I
am glad that there are others who like it as well.

Comparing
to Kishimoto-san... I must admit that during the Pein-versus-Jiraya
arc I was more fascinated with my own story than with the original,
and when we meet again original Suigetsu in chapter 380 I was really
disappointed. I do hope that he will do something with these three
wonderful characters of his (that I prefer to all the Konoha rookies)
and not just kill them off when Sasuke no longer needs them.

But
now with the encounter between Sasuke and Itachi in the manga things
are back to how they should be: Kishimoto-san is far far better than
I am.

Halskr:
I am glad that I managed to answer at least a few of the questions
you have about this story. I hope that a few others will be answered
in later chapters. (My beta as well complained that the fight scenes
lacked clarity. I tried to fix it, but I had not the energy for more
than superficial changes.)

And
thanks for taking the pain and trying to analyze the story and write
to me what you have found out. I think that you are right: There are
some inconsistencies concerning speed and catching up and overtaking
people... I don't think that I as a writer have to write down all the
details, but I should have thought the situation through before I
wrote it down, making sure that the readers can fill in what is
missing without coming on any inconsistencies.

I
have thought a bit about your advice. I think you are right about
dialogue versus scenery and action. I enjoy writing dialogue; it is
almost no work for me, I just have to let the characters talk. But I
do know that this is not enough and that I should practise writing
scenery and action... With this story I have practised writing some
inner monologue (for Naruto among all people) and writing some
action, and there will even be some chapters that are largely about
scenery.

Changing
POV however will not improve the story, I think. I have written all
of it from the POVs of the two boys, and for me strictness in POV is
one of the sources of fun both in reading and in writing. Too many
POVs make the story feel sloppy and lush – I cannot explain it
better. (Though I don't mind the omniscient author, if one decides
for that.) Sticking to one (or two) POVs and having to find elegant
solutions for telling what the POV-characters don't see or feel seems
a challenge to me, and just changing POV feels like cheating.

Thanks
again for reading and commenting!
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