Nothing wrong with mixing it up man I actually wouldn't mind of you did stories like this from time to time
Pretty interesting style, I think you should use it more every now and then. I for one prefer it over the multi-chaptered slowely (for some even 'painfully') progressing ones.
Keep up the great work!
I like it! Looking forward to the last chapter! 😋
And a hat trick with the panties pulled to the side. The imagery's just awesome, especially when Karui's described as having a jutting ass. Never understood why underwear yanked to the side is so hot, but it is.
Also feeling like Choji's about to have himself a night. Whether it's a good or a bad one's up in the air, but for us readers it should be awesome. We need more Karui in Naruto fanfic and this fic is proof why.