Pathetic.
You might as well bash Naruto, since that's clearly the one thing you left out.
I was still hoping that sasuke will fuck naruko and not just inside their home but also in the hokages desk and got her pregnant. I mean that will be also humiliating be his fuck toy.
Now this was a good dom scene. Excellent dirty talk, and the circle is finally complete. It's good that you actually had a moment where Hinata's fall can be definitively stated as happening rather than just something that get assumed in the story. Helps really punctuate the whole cuck narrative.
This chapter is just, kek. When Sasuke went on about betas and alphas I laughed. It made the chapter such a meme. Don't get me wrong, it's technically correct and this chapter is pretty much the narrative climax. Even the next one only really cements what happened here. But just the dialogue is like something out of 4chan's cuck memes.
" Naruto, Naruko, Hinata, Himawari… they were all his, to use and fuck as he pleased "
This implies future Sasuke/Naruko sex we don't get to see. FUCK.
Anyway, I enjoyed the remaster more than the original. The only thing I would have liked to see was a bit of muh breeding fetish and some Naruko sex.
That said, it strikes me as odd that Sasuke is so insistent on keeping everything a secret from Sakura. Why would he even care? It's not like she would.
Your aggressive Himawari is an interesting contrast to the one from the original version. It makes is much less dubious when she knows what she wants and she's the one pursuing it rather than the one being pursued.
Sasuke being disturbed by it rather than just going out to seduce her adds a bit of moral fibre to him that was absent before.
Aha, I almost pictured Himawari going 'Aaan~" once she basically molested Sasuke. The Sasuke/Himawari pairing is actually one of those crack pairings that I love. So their scenes always get me going, and this basically stalker yandere Himawari you have is great. It makes me wish there was a fic based around that premise.
It's good to see how things are going off the rails now. Naruto pitched the arrangement with the idea that it would just be sex, or however those cuck-bull agreements usually go. They're intended to be pretty clean and dry and not extend outside of the bedroom. But of course, that's not how people actually work. So the way that the boundaries break and Hinata's turns to adultery really throws in the flavour of realism to these characters.
I really emjoyed this scene the first few times I read the fic, but on this pass around I actually feel a bit unsatisfied. Maybe it's because of how things went with Hinata, but instantly fucking her into unconsciousness and having her pass out with a slutty grin feels like a quick shot. The descent should be quicker considering she's been obsessed with Sasuke since forever, but perhaps not an instant flip into cumslut, you know? Every girl would have a different road down considering their circumstances, but the story would be greatly improved if we saw those. I don't remember if Sarada is in the Remaster, but it would be the same with her.
It's good to see Naruto punch Sasuke in the face. Not because I dislike Sasuke or anything, but it helps restablish those degrading boundaries. When people 'fall' I guess it's not always a one way road. They turn back, or try to turn back, and that's what we get here. Naruto has his fetish, but he still tries to keep it within his bedroom rather than letting it seep into the rest of his life.