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March 18, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Great. But by god, the grammar
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August 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hey, if you want i could try to make your chapters easier to read if you want. i just need to find a way to send them to you
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July 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
MORE CHAPTER PLEASE
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May 31, 2015 at 12:00 AM
A crossover between two series is difficult enough without adding a third. While I like the concept, you need a beta reader to do some extensive grammar checking. Is English your first language?
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May 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Nice job Sneaky666 on the lemon. I would have said congrats on the chapter but... it was pretty much all lemon though that really isn't a problem whatsoever (I enjoyed it actually). It also appears you are getting better at English seeing as how there was only a few incorrect gender pronouns like say five or so throughout the chapter. Basically, the biggest issue that I can see is the sentence structure which I am pretty sure you are improving anyway.
P.S. Great Job and keep up the good work Sneaky666
P.S. Great Job and keep up the good work Sneaky666
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May 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Out of curiosity, do u plan to turn issei's Alpha pheromones and attraction as a weapon against woman. Cause I can seriously see the Riser peerage going crazy if naruko were to allow issei to blast them with his pheromones
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May 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I am not really much for yuri but I like the introductions of Issei's future harem girls. Also nice way of fitting them into the setting.
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May 14, 2015 at 12:00 AM
While the story is a unique one, one that I quite like, you need to run this through a spell-check and extensive grammar check. I suggest a beta that is good at English. Nobody enjoys reading when the grammar looks like a five-year old child made it.
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May 14, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I really like the start, though the grammar leaves much to be desired. I just hope to see Issei actually become dominant, and that he doesn't become a servant of Rias since it would make the whole thing quite impossible.
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May 14, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love the story but is naruko only going belong to isse? I'm curious because of the tags.