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0_o Half of this was an actual story, and the other half (because of all the very short scenes and large jumps in time) read like an outline of a much larger story. I was enjoying the fic until Sasuke woke up. Why couldn't you have ended it with that scene, or maybe written one more between Sasuke and Naruto where they bond? Sure it wouldn't have been a huge romantic story that way, but implying they'll have a future together is a perfectly fine way to end things. We don't absolutely need them to be declaring their love for one another by fic's end for it to be a good story. In oneshots, you've really got to be careful not to bite off more than you can chew and I definitely think you did that here. Sorry.