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by whitetiger

schedule July 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
this could have been fun, but block of text syndrome made it a bit daunting to read. next time space, or double space between the sentences. since it isn't being printed out, who cares how many extra pages that adds. seriously though, it would make it a lot easier to read. I also spotted a few typos.

on the whole, not bad but pls keep an eye on the stuff i mentioned. presentation might not be everything, but it does help getting reviews. :P

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