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for Trouble In Paradise

by DevilHeart435

person The Watcher
schedule September 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
So far, I have only two complaints about this fic: 1) it's clear you don't have a beta reader, as I have found a number of minor mistakes.
2) There isn't enough of it written yet! It's so hard to find a well-written fanfic, and finding one that isn't finished yet is even more frustrating! I eagerly await your next installment.
schedule September 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
most definitely amazing
post more!!!
soon!!!
person JoshB
schedule August 31, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I like this story and it has a great story. It seems like Naruto finally got someone to like him but only for a mission but now it turns out she might have fallen in love with him. Now Ino has to give up Naruto for Hinata to be happy. I am wondering how this next chapter is going to be. Hope you write the next one soon.
person Tiberianfest
schedule August 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Amazing story, I love thefact that there is actually plot in here as well :D Ican't wait to see what happens next
schedule August 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Personally I feel that Sakura isn't in this story enough and that you've pretty much pushed her aside which makes no sense to me giving how Naruto had been after her since the start of the series. It just doesn't make sense that the one girl he's wanted is barely in this kind of story at least give her some development time or else I might just give up on this as I'm loosing interest fast.
schedule August 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I loved Ino seducing Hinata and I can't wait to see a threesome between Ino, Naruto, and Hinata.
schedule July 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ok so not a bad story, only thing is that i think you have too much filler, events that have no meaning story wise, funny as some of it may be, it should be relevent to the story.

for example, the event with Konohamru *sp* and his team in the hotsprings, funny yes, but why was it there?

will it have relevence later in that .....while in the hospital, their team leader does some thing that directly effects some thing with Naruto?

but thats just my thoughts on it, its your story after all, take my advice or leave it.
schedule June 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon I just finished reading chapter 7 of this story from FF site and I got to read what happens next so please update soon
schedule June 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Great new chapter to the story. Hope Ino is able to 'smooth' things out with Hinata.
schedule June 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
As par number 9 in your notes. That jutsu does have a name. It's called Flying Swallow. http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Flying_Swallow

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