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April 8, 2018 at 12:00 AM
Liking the story thusfar and it seems pretty interesting, but you honestly didn't need to add a new clan for Naruto to be on of the last of. He's already one of the last Uzumaki's. If they truly cared about clans they would tapped on that and used CRA for that first. I mean, Sasuke was Konoha's 'last Uchiha' and they sent genin and a newly instated chunin after him, knowing that other ninja helped in his escape. The sent clan heirs into a potentially fatal situation that they weren't prepared for. Other than that, the story seems pretty interesting and I hope it stays that way. Keep up the good work!
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February 14, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I look forward to you resuming this story, it's awesome!
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September 23, 2015 at 12:00 AM
i love how you threw some Inuyasha in there its a brilliant idea
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August 27, 2015 at 12:00 AM
please update soon thank you
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March 1, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Except that wanting to rule as "The strongest of the Founding Families" is not evil. It is a natural deduction that only those who were weaker than the family in question would challenge.
That is why I was always totally against Itachi's portrayal as a 'savior'. He is not a savior. He is a murderous traitor who killed his clan, his FAMILY, based on what they might do.
That is why I was always totally against Itachi's portrayal as a 'savior'. He is not a savior. He is a murderous traitor who killed his clan, his FAMILY, based on what they might do.
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March 1, 2015 at 12:00 AM
*happy squees*. I love the update and the development of the pregnancies. I HATE the Cliffside.... *evil grins* but my suspicions are running rampant. I can't wait for the next update. ^^
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May 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This is an interesting story. I'm only halfway through the second chapter but I just wanted to mention that it may work better to have a beta look over your chapters. I notice that there's a lot of a/an usage. You use 'an' if the word that follows starts with a vowel and use 'a' for everything else. I am definitely going to check out the rest of your story. I'm enjoying the ideas within it so far!
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January 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I think I would really really like this story if you just either used actual names (or something other then he/she him/her etc) or if you skipped/ cut down on the long drawn out mini stories. Please do something!! I want to finish it but right now it's just frustrating and annoying to attempt
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September 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story. Loved it! Thanks.
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August 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I like the story line. But your grammar is is very bad. Take an the next word is to start with a vowel ( A E I O U) and a the next word is always a consonant. You have run on sentences. Clean up and it would be easier to read. Also use you grammar and spelling checker in your word processing program. I know that Open Office and its descendants have this in it. Keep writing as with those corrections the story would be better reading.