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Im so hooked! The way you opened it and just the whole set up are amazing. I really want to see what happens with orochimaru... shivers... its like I could feel the tension. And I also love how you gave a slight hint to how Sakura might not be as bad as she may at first appear. Love it and cant wait for more :3

Epicness, I love how you brought another crazy bitch to replace Sakura

WOW its been a long time sents I've read a good Naruto fic. You've done a GREAT job! ^_^ I'm looking forwards to the next installment. You've done a fantastic job with this story. <3

I feel the same way as alexxgalaxy: the only thing tying Sasuke and Naruto together at this point, besides their bond, is lust. That was OK at the beginning, but now we're already 8 chapters in, yet nothing at all seems to have changed between these two: Naruto still wants his freedom, Sasuke still wants to keep Naruto as a plaything, and both of them still think the other is hot.

I feel like at this point in the fic, they should be starting to move beyond that and at the very least, be showing an interest in getting to know one another--for any kind of relationship, that's the minimum first step. But they aren't. Instead, they spend large amounts of the fic avoiding each other (or rather, Naruto avoiding Sasuke), and then when they DO interact, they're either fighting or fucking. Unfortunately, they can't make any progress as a couple that way. (If they can't even hold a normal conversation...) Beyond the fucking, do they like one another, or even find one another tolerable as a person? Right now, that seems debatable. Add in everything that's currently against them, including Naruto's own feelings, and there's not much here to base a relationship on.

If the goal of the fic is for Naruto to get his freedom, walk away and never look back, then the progress between them is fine. If Naruto is actually supposed to end up with Sasuke, then Sasuke needs a little more development (his motives are pretty unclear--can't really support him being with Naruto until we understand what he's trying to do and why) and their relationship needs to start progressing.

Don't get me wrong: I do like the fic. I like it very much, in fact. I think it's a hilarious story overall and I always enjoy reading each chapter. Naruto is a fabulously witty character in this, and I was impressed that you managed to make initially unlikable Sakura into a more sympathetic character. I also love all the plot twists and turns--I wasn't expecting Orochimaru to show up or for Kyuubi to disappear. (I actually really liked that plot twist, as sad as it was for Naruto, because in the end, Naruto needs to be the one to decide what he's going to do about Sasuke/about his life without always relying on Kyuubi.) It's just that the romance isn't quite working for me yet.

troubles are coming becarefull naru orochimaru is not a good man hopefuly sasu will protect you<; love this story, see you soon

YEA! Finally a new chapter! There is another story with the same title going on and every time I saw it I stupidly thought that it's this one. It was so disappointing. But now finally my patience is rewarded! I'm still not sure who was watching the boys in the bath? Was it Karin? I really love Sasuke in this story. I normally hate the bastard but here he's so sexy! And Naruto playing the innocent lamb is just great! I love it. I hope I won't have to wait that long for another part... ^_^

that was such a good chapter!!! I like Sasuke being all possessive and jealous lol. But brrrr... you did a great job of writing a really creepy Orochimaru.

Love it =)

Other than the "bond" that forced them together, it seemed that everything was stopping Sasuke and Naruto from being together. Sasuke's family, "teacher" and even Naruto himself. What did Naruto really feel about Sasuke? Lust and sexual satisfaction and no love? I doubt he would feel so bad having to be apart from Sasuke.

This is a really great story. I can't wait for more. :3