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April 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I hope you don't take this too harshly.
It seemed too stereotypical. Yeah, maybe that's just how the story was supposed to go, the dialogue in response to the actions or vice versa, but too...common. too blunt. one shot or not, it was definitly too simple. for me, there was no meaning behind it. i mean, yeah, we can sprout all kinds of bull about it,but it seems like something a rather young person would write.
It seemed too stereotypical. Yeah, maybe that's just how the story was supposed to go, the dialogue in response to the actions or vice versa, but too...common. too blunt. one shot or not, it was definitly too simple. for me, there was no meaning behind it. i mean, yeah, we can sprout all kinds of bull about it,but it seems like something a rather young person would write.