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OMG ItachiHakuKisame...yes that is a wonderful solution.

What an incredible turn of events I would have never ever been able to conceive of that scenerio...Wonderful....I'm sure some people will be all like WTF?

But I LOVE IT!! What a wonderful thing for Haku to do....if this does not show his love for Kisame nothing will...Kisame is one lucky Shark....Itachi and Haku both love him.

I just grin like and idiot every time you have Sasu screaming his head off in ecstasy like seriously the boy is soooo loud....poor Itachi..those scenes are just funny to me.

I also think that Kimimaro is being and idiot, I hope Gaara ends up falling for sweet Lee...Kimi is being a biotch! Acting like a Diva....what's his problem really?

I have to tell you that my favorite scene was how the crew reacted when Itachi and Haku danced the Tango....man I wish some awesome artist would put some art out for this fiction...Ugh if I could draw that would be one scene I would do.

Anyway thanks for the update....your spoiling us rotten and I love it!!!

So usually I wouldn't look at an AU, but my curiosity got the better of me. This story sort of reminds me of one I had of my own, but you seem to be carrying it off with greater skill than I ever could. Your dialogue is pretty good and while from what I've seen so far you could stand to put a little more description into your stories it's a damn good read.

So, I'm enjoying this story, but regarding the caller I think you should have shown and not simply told.

Chapter 10 there are two points I think are worth mentioning in this chapter. The first was that Shikamaru pointed out that there was a downside to the whole cat relationship. When he was in that position his relationships with a crew member was strained because of something he was told to do. It shows the power imbalance and is interesting to see. The other thing that I felt was emphasized by this chapter is I don't know exactly how old Shikamaru is? In the original series they're basically the same age given a few months, but that doesn't seem to be the case here.

Chapter 12 all right something's happening and I don't know what it is. I feel kind of cheated however. If this story was written in first person or at least closely attached to one character's point of view I've wouldn't feel that way, but with your drifting perspective I feel like I should know. Also it's rare, but on occasion you've been spelling Naruto as Naturo.

So chapter 14 is the first chapter with some real emotional conflict. Having the one crew member depart was unexpected, but not much of a loss. The card thing seemed a bit odd.

FUCKING-A! That was a great chapter! Haku's plan is amazing and implementing the waltz's is ingenuous! I know I've said it before but Ima continue to state it everytime I review. This story is epic! Beyond epic. It will forever go down in fanfiction history as a scifi classic, like Star Wars or something. You're awesomely amazing! I can't wait for more. And thank you for sharing.

I guess that is the first true lemon of a series. They're always interesting to read to see what details are put in and what aren't. Kind of like this one if it was a bit on the animalistic side. Still I had one of those moments where the mental image I have in my head and the description in the story didn't match up which was disorienting for a minute, but not really your fault.

I can't help but feel you missed an opportunity to fill in your universe's history. Naruto ignorance and his knowledge would have been a perfect combination. So roughly how much time has passed since the beginning of the story? I don't get a good sense of that.

I never really read an AU were so many ages were out of whack, but at least you describe him since there isn't an image of him being older like that. Good call there. Also I found this cliffhanger much more appropriate than the last one I mentioned as I don't feel I'm being kept away from information. Good job!