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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I thought this was a beautiful and eerie story. The edit must have helped, because I couldn't find much issue with your grammar (grammmer, oh lordy). I would like to see it continued as well, but I think it stands well enough on its own. Keep up the good work.
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March 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Bizaare, and yet strangely brilliant. The very concept is demented but appropriate, and Kankuro's slow revelation about his mannequin is pretty well written.
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March 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like how you did the story, and it says good so far. I hope you continue the story, I would like to see where it's going. Also it doesn't hurt to check for spelling and grammmer.