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by tasukigirl

person Kuro Hoshi
schedule December 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Faves 2,6,7,8 (VERY picturesque), 11, 22, 23, 24, 25, 28, 32, 35, 38, 42, 47 and number 1: 50.(*cries a little; embarassedly) And that makes it almost EVERYTHING!!! XD

In every rich, beautifully melancholic sentence, I see the images you constructed rise easily to my eyes, and it seems as if their whole lives and worlds are revolving around each other. A single sentence under your pen has surpassed a thousand words.
person RasenganGirl
schedule March 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I loved it! You did a wonderful job. You kept true to the challenge and It was a nice break from story form. I hope you do another like this soon!
schedule December 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's good and the flow the sentences are great. But I think maybe if it had been a little more in the time line. Most of it didn't seem to jump around, which is amazing in itself, but there were a couple times that you went from talking about them making love and then it's talking about them not even being together yet. Still I suppose you meant it as someone remembering, but for the couple that confused me it didn't seem like that. Anyway I like this One sentence challenge, I couldn't have done it. Keep up with the writing! Hope to read others!

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