rate_review Reviews

it was totally worth the wait. i hope it's not a scopion that stung sai ok that will be too much of a scare. those things are totally creepy.

I want to participate, but my scanner is being gay. But I'll see what I can do. I'll note you on the DA if I find away to do something for ya. As for the chapter brilliant. I like how the three got to know one another. And Sai well I find his OOC to be fine. It's not overly done, and we really have no idea if he wouldn't have a break down like that over ink and paint and such. The Manga suggests that he's always calm and collected, but when he's introduced into the story even when he flashes back to his past, he's already being trained to be an emotionless ninja. This is different. I find it to fit perfectly into the story. I mean really.

Constructive critique:
Also, you were missing a few words here and there. Like he or the. Not those words specifically, but words like that. So it wasn't to bad. Just thought you'd like to know so that you watch out a little more for stuff like that in the future when reading over your chapters. I don't think I saw any misspellings, so you're good there. I had a little trouble imagining the fence and the area that it was. The description confused me a bit. As for the play ground they were playing at I got a good enough picture of it, but you could spend more time describing places that they're at.

Over all I was pleased to read the this chapter I have been waiting for, and it wasn't a let down at all. I hope you spend some time working with the family dynamics of the foster homes. Don't feel the need to rush through it, because you feel you should post an update, or you want to get to a good part. I've seen a lot of great story tank because of that including my own. Keep the pace you have and even delve into the intricacies of each boys pasts, and the homes they now inhabit. I think it would be great and in your hands would be wonderful to read.

Once again simply brilliant. I find the idea and plot refreshing. Good job

I like how Naruto's the frog and not a fox. ^^

Very well done chapter. You're right in that I wouldn't have known what to expect from a chapter of Yamato and Sai too. I think you did an excellent job.
Keep up the good work!

Aw... I lurv it! Sai is so cute. I'm so excited for the next chapter, you have no idea! And this chapter was so great! I totally feel like I was apart of the moment and everything. Good job. I'll be sitting on the edge of my seat until the next chapter!

Whoot!

I want more!

I still like where this is going but you should slow it down. I don't have tons of room to say that, I get so excited to get the next chapter I rush too. For future times maybe dedicate a chapter to each boy and the situation. ie: Iruka and Naruto could have used a whole lengthy chapter between them. Anyway I'm awaiting the next chapter. Also I like how Sai communicates I giggled at the idea. I look forward to Gaara meeting Gai and Lee. lol!

tee hee.. so cute. ^^

Keep up the good work!

I really like where this is going. I seriously hope that you continue this and that I get to be apart of the journey. Please don't get to discouraged if you do not get to many hits and or reviews. Sometimes people are dense when it comes to a good fic! I'm pretty excited for the next chapter. I await your genius.

WOW!!! Awesome!!!!
If you don't continue to write this story, I will hunt you down, kidnap you, and dump you in water infested with Pirahna!!