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schedule
January 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hm, nice story, but looks like you forgot the sequel for naru's birthday. well have fun writing your current stories anyways, they are pretty interesting so far :)
schedule
August 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
liked your idea by the way ... really great but some advice for u would be maybe better choices of words and check your grammar like i think you put 'Naruto cum over...' it should be 'Naruto cummed/came all over' that's the phrase that was most noticeable to me but other than that i enjoyed ur story XD