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for Artistic Flare

by EvoIIICE9A

person Elli
schedule March 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
All in all a well written story, but you take 'run on sentences' to a whole new level. Don't be afraid to cut your sentences off and vary the lengths every once in a while, it adds variety and keeps the reader interested.

Good work and keep writing,

Ella
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