rate_review Reviews

LOL, love how it started off(besided the grammar) it was a great begining and update you u procrstinating whore! XD XP

Lubb,
Pepsi/Ally/Riko

um... I must confess I couldn't finish reading the story. It had an interesting premise and promising elements... but the arguments are unlikely and see through. Now I am not flaming this story out of spite. I think that it has lots of strong points like the fact it doesnt have grammatical disasters or glaring mistakes that make you wanna hide and cringe in the dark. It shows a strong sense of humor and great imagination but its too abrupt and not well developed arguments. It's like a PWP. It would be interesting to see this same chapter but without the abrupt changes of tone and POV. Just a thought. Dont get mad. ok? This is not meant to offend and I apologize if I did. Thanks!

I like, can't wait to see what happens next. PLEASE UPDATE SOON.