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Such an awesome ficcie. Poor Sakura can't resist Karin no matter how she tried at first. <3

Okay, I have this thing where I scan a fic to tell if it's crap. When every paragraph starts with a phrase in quotations, that's a no-no. Also, it's obvious you're a guy, because you have no idea how women have sex. I'm pretty sure the closest you've ever been to a womans vagina was during the birthing process. You learned how to write yuri by reading crappy yuri. "“OHHHHHHHHHH!!! OH MY GOD!!!!!! STOP!!!! I CAN’T TAKE IT!!!! AHHHHHHHHHHH!!! OH PLEASE!!!!! OH!!! OH!!! OH!!!! OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!” " What's with all the caps? If you wrote the story well, you wouldn't have needed them. Caps are a privlidge , not a right. Maybe you'll get my point if I use a bunch of exclaimation points!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh, by the way, if you don't like criticism, make it so anonymous people can't Review. o > 3