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by MsTrick

schedule April 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hundreds and thousands of cupcakes for You!!!!!!
schedule April 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I am only on chapter 1, but I do believe that this is the best plot I've ever come across in Naruto fanfiction. I'm enthralled to continue reading this (OMG, you already have 4 chapters for me to read). I commend you greatly for writing this, it is a brilliant piece thus far and has my interest piqued.

*Lemon Drops shoves hundreds of cupcake reviews in your lap, hoping you will eat them all and write more, MORE!!!!!*

Okay, not to be the psycho reviewer (I'm apparently lethal with cupcakes), but I do hope that you will find the time to write more (I will also be reading your other two stories on your profile).
schedule April 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your fanfic has really made me want to write, I've been in such a slump lately. OMG, I really like the plot in it, it has me glued to every word! I haven't had a fanfiction that I've been this excited about since "A Tenuous Grasp" by yaoi_is_my_antidrug started on here on AFF.

The one thing that I might offer as advice would be to slow down, don't rush quite so much. I think this has the potential to be one of the best Naruto fanfics out there, but it does get a bit confusing at times, and sometimes there isn't enough story sandwiched between the dialogue. I really, really want this to be the best it can be, so if you want a beta (I'm not sure you would) or someone to do a harsh critique of it, please email me (is in my profile). I would be glad to give you some of my time to help you out.

*stacks piles and piles of cupcakes at the authors feet*

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