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for Why Orange?

by NinjaToadsAteMyBaby

person rae
schedule December 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hey I like your story! don't mind them. well, keep on writing, bye
person limonata
schedule November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Love the story so far, couple things: Ch. 2 typos- vinal is spelled vinyl, and coller is collar. And thanks for explaining the "see my religion" thing at the bottom- I got the general idea, but now that I know what the expression means, I can't wait to use it. Ch. 3 typos- Thanks for *tresting* me to lunch, rejioned=rejoined. Ch. 4- voyer is voyeur- stupid French words, I know. Naruto just *sughed*. Ch. 5- that bastard Sai kisses your cheek- kissed, you want past tense. Ch. 6- tohught- this one needs a definition, I like the way it sounds- or a transposition of o and h. But I still want a definition. and ballistic, with two Ls. interrupted with two Rs. pursuing instead of persuing.

Okay, second thought, if you want, I'll just copy/paste this into word, send you a clean version and a list of things I changed- it would only be spelling and capitalization. If that sounds like an okay deal, email me to say that at amyspear@u.washington.edu and I'll have the whole thing done in a couple days. I love this story, but the transpositions are hurting my very anal retentive soul. If not, I still like your story, and it's making me skip class...
person inumoon3
schedule November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
About time Kakashi and Iruka got back to their old selves!!! Can't wait for the next update!!!!!!!!!!
person lala
schedule November 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww, I loved this chapter. It was so cute. I've been waiting for you to write. It was great ^^
person Xenobia
schedule November 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
TW!!!! Get your butt back here! Nothing for months and months; then, you stop in the middle! Jeez...you are making me crazy.

Oh well, I have to admit that I like the idea of Kana/Udon. I was worried-thought you were going to pair her up w/Knonhamaru.

Take care and have a wonderful holiday!

S'Mores, Coco and SasuNaru marshmellows.

>X<
person Beladara
schedule November 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is what the naruto charecters think about you not updating:
Naruto: if you update I'll give you ramen! DATTEBAYO
Sakura:YAY i got here first ha Ino-pig i beat you ... ohh yeah please update
Ino:she got here before me geat and trulywicked still didn't update! Wait is that sasuke? YEEEP it is ...
Sasuke:ugh stupid ino thank good i lost her and will you update already or Itachi won't be the only one i'll want to kill ...
Kakashi: ahh you probably got distracted by a beautifal rainbow with your name in it , thats absolutly normal it happens to me all the time.
Neji: Maybe it was destiny that you couldn't update , yes that it DESTINY !
Tenten: ...(still drooling over all of the perfect yaoi charecters)
Lee: Ahh that's alright with all the springtime of youth has to offer it's not strange you couldn't update just remember if you can't update 2 chaPTERS this week youll have to update 4 chapters next week and if you can't do that it's 8 chapters the next next week ...
Gai:Ahh lee you are so smart i agree with you 100%
Gaara:hmm how bout mentioning me and neji in your next chapter?
Kankuro: hmm i think the only thing missing to your charecters is a little purple make up *takes out makeup brush and goes pschco*
Temari:*hits kankuro over the head* if you don't update i'll send my big fan after you *hits kankuro again but this time with her fan*
Itachi: psychotic plot dust bunny just waiting for you ...
Sai: Itachi i'm all bruised cause of you ...*walk and whimpers*
Choji:put more food in the story*hears icecream truck and runs outside*
Shikamaru:ur so troubelseme just update so beladara dosen't make me talk...
Hinata: uhm c cccould yyou pppleeese uppdate*twirls both indeks fingers together*
Kiba: rufff rufff
Shino: i need new sunglasses... oh yeah update soon...

well that's all i wanted to write more but no time please pdate soon ...
person star101
schedule November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. Please let me know when the new chap is up.
person Beladara
schedule November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hi i really want you to update on why orange please i'll give u a big cyber hug (*gives trulywicked a big naruto puppy eyes look* PLEASE!!! pwetty pwese *another naruto puppy eyes look* pwetty pwese twulwywicked...

btw the story is great ur one of the reasons I'm starting to really like sasu/naru pairing so ...
*shoves big cyber choclatechip cookie in trulywickeds mouth* u deasrved it!

Ja ne
person Koriskitten
schedule October 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like you're story so much that I did some fanart... which is weird since I never did fanart for anyone's story... if you like I can finish off the boys if you want. http://coolcatgirlstar.deviantart.com/art/Why-orange-68171305
http://coolcatgirlstar.deviantart.com/art/Mikomi-68171378
person Anon
schedule October 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ok what is the Kawaii no Jutsu? and are you going to add more pairings?

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