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by DarkRainFiend

person MellyLa
schedule May 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I would definitely like to see this fic finished in a multiparter. It is such a great fic now. It's different not only because of the pairing butthe story line has a different twist to it.
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I would like a longer story 5 plus chapters would be great,
i'm looking forward to all of the smut between Shino & Naruto.
And i want to know how Sausake is going to react to Naruto being mpreg.
Love the story so far.
person katsuyo
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You handle the pairing well and you managed to still keep them in character.... that's a big deal for a crack pairing. SO, huge kudos to you for pulling it off.. :D
It would be great if you could continue this story as a small multichapter, so we can get a better sense of the relationship developing between Shino and Naruto.
Right now, it's just a tease... but already you get a sense that it would be a very loving relationship.
I really do love the whole idea of Naruto carrying Shino's child and best of all - it's never been done.
In regards to the lemon, I would rather see you just concentrate on the story and let the plot develop in its own way. If you're actively having to plan a lemon - there's pressure to deliver... which could prove disasterous.
If some citrus content comes into play... that's cool but I would definitely be more interested in seeing where you take this story.
Good luck!
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm I think multiple chapter would be better. And as for a lemon, of course it would be nice but I think you should concentrate on the way you want the relationship between Naruto and Shino to turn out and don't try to force a lemon in there. I'm so happy that you'll add at least one more chapter to this because I so wanted to read more.
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I say multi-chapter! It would be easier for you to do than a very long one-shot to the two-shot.
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
More!!! Much more. You have the beginnings of an epic tale here, run with it.

There can never be enough lemon. 'Nuff said.
person Platter
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
methinks you should do a multi chapter, since it seems like a REALLY good story; at least, I like it a lot so far ^_^
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
damn, and here I thought you updated. =D

I'm not sure which I want more. You did exceptionally well with just the one chapter (I thorougly enjoyed reading it) and I think that one more really long chapter would be wonderful. But I can't help thinking that just two chapters isn't a long enough story =/ would the story itself turn out longer with the 5 chapters instead of 2, or would it be the same length with just more chapters? If it's the same length then I say two chapters (because I'm impatient and don't like waiting around for updates =C) However, if the 5 chapter story is longer then I want that =D

While smut's almost always a good thing, I prefer plot over smut. If you think a lemon would ruin the flow of the story, then I vote leave it out.

Sorry, ^-^;; I hope I made what I want clear. It kind of seems like I'm a little indecisive >.>
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I would be very happy with a multichapter fic; I definitely couldn't stand it, if it stayed as a one-shot. I'll read as much as you want to write - I prefer longer fics on the whole.
As for the lemon, I think it should be vague allusions to, with warm tones, sorta like rose-tinted memories.
Please keep writing; I love this fic and have been waiting for more since you posted it.
schedule May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
okay, since this is such a great story and I am in love with long single-chapters, thats how my vote swings on that one... as for lemons, i will shamelessly beg for some shinonaru goodness!!! pleaaaase!!!
-direwolflilith

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