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August 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
CHPATER 1
Well I just need to say, EXCELLENT JOB!!! The angst is balanced out by the reassurance of something better. The way your Naruto character expresses the depths of his turmoil and how you've developed him to still reach for the possibility that he can and someone does love him: is wonderful. He's never resentful even in his own despair he doesn't judge Sasuke for what he wants..to continue his clan.. he just excepts that. Along with some measure of blame. But still it isn't until later that Naru admits Sasuke is not good for him, then he calls the raven what he is..a bastard!
Then you did a great job developing Shino; I love his patience with Naruto, biding his time. And just when he knew his time had been cut short: by Naruto's decision to perhaps leave the village. You had the bug guy take the leap of faith.
This is a feel good fic I like those that show the ninja going through turmoil and then coming to the realization that there is hope...still. I'm going to read the next chapter I expect it to be as great as the first.
Well I just need to say, EXCELLENT JOB!!! The angst is balanced out by the reassurance of something better. The way your Naruto character expresses the depths of his turmoil and how you've developed him to still reach for the possibility that he can and someone does love him: is wonderful. He's never resentful even in his own despair he doesn't judge Sasuke for what he wants..to continue his clan.. he just excepts that. Along with some measure of blame. But still it isn't until later that Naru admits Sasuke is not good for him, then he calls the raven what he is..a bastard!
Then you did a great job developing Shino; I love his patience with Naruto, biding his time. And just when he knew his time had been cut short: by Naruto's decision to perhaps leave the village. You had the bug guy take the leap of faith.
This is a feel good fic I like those that show the ninja going through turmoil and then coming to the realization that there is hope...still. I'm going to read the next chapter I expect it to be as great as the first.
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August 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 2
YEAH, FOR SEARCH FUNCTIONS!!! I been here awhile, but never learned all the forum functions, I'm so glad I checked the Naruto Fandom, by hitting *latest from a Naruto profile page: it gave me the Naruto newest updates. But then on the left you hit the 1st option "Naruto" from there Yaoi, and then THIS GREAT PAIRING!!!
I thought I should share that for others seeking great stories, it is how I found you and this wonderful read. Oh I'll check your profile everyday to see when this or something else you wrote updates. ^^ the best way w/o email notice or subscription options on aff - is to save the author's profile under our browser "favorites" LOL! Now I'll know just when you update :3
Now this chapter GAHHHHH!!! Nosebleed Central!! So ROMANTIC, AND SEXY, AND ADORABLE!!! A hot BUG NINJA screaming XDDDDDDDDD!! The emotional content alone is awesome! Now Naru wants to move forward and Kyuubi is all for it, this is the best possible resolution for both the lonely lovers. Not lonely anymore, thanks to YOU! I'm feeling sorry for Sasuke, too even though he is a real bastard in this fiction. He should have opened up to Naruto when he had the chance. Judging by the way Naruto was so wrapped up in him; I'm certain that Naruto given the chance: would have agreed to allow Sasuke to fuck who ever he needed to "continue his clan."
Shame Naruto would have said it was ok if only Sasuke had been honest "thank gods for Kyuubi not letting Naruto get knocked up by Sasuke." Well the fox wouldn't have given Sasuke a kid from Naruto anyway, so the situation wouldn't have changed much other than Naruto telling Sasuke he can fuck some chick for that purpose.
That dummy. He's gonna feel more stupid when he discovers Naruto has moved on, and I suspect Shino's not going to allow Sasuke the chance to confess his "hidden love for Naruto." Although I hope he doesn't just kill him outright for how deeply he hurt Naruto. Well Shino has a lot of self control I just hope he doesn't think that once Sasuke ask forgiveness that it will change anything between him and Naruto.
O_o That would be dangerous, for Sasuke, a heartbroken Shino after the two of them came so far....Well I love the way you've developed Naru and Shino even Sasuke, I don't hate him I just like Shino more. lol! And although twisted, Sasuke has his reasons for what he did. Now he's the one getting used, by Sakura I wonder how he's going to react...I hope the pink hair ninja will survive his wrath once she confesses why she is not prego yet...
That's divine justice, but so cruel: Dose Sasuke deserve that? Yeah more than likely he does, but it's sad all the same.
Thanks for the great read looking forward to more. =3
YEAH, FOR SEARCH FUNCTIONS!!! I been here awhile, but never learned all the forum functions, I'm so glad I checked the Naruto Fandom, by hitting *latest from a Naruto profile page: it gave me the Naruto newest updates. But then on the left you hit the 1st option "Naruto" from there Yaoi, and then THIS GREAT PAIRING!!!
I thought I should share that for others seeking great stories, it is how I found you and this wonderful read. Oh I'll check your profile everyday to see when this or something else you wrote updates. ^^ the best way w/o email notice or subscription options on aff - is to save the author's profile under our browser "favorites" LOL! Now I'll know just when you update :3
Now this chapter GAHHHHH!!! Nosebleed Central!! So ROMANTIC, AND SEXY, AND ADORABLE!!! A hot BUG NINJA screaming XDDDDDDDDD!! The emotional content alone is awesome! Now Naru wants to move forward and Kyuubi is all for it, this is the best possible resolution for both the lonely lovers. Not lonely anymore, thanks to YOU! I'm feeling sorry for Sasuke, too even though he is a real bastard in this fiction. He should have opened up to Naruto when he had the chance. Judging by the way Naruto was so wrapped up in him; I'm certain that Naruto given the chance: would have agreed to allow Sasuke to fuck who ever he needed to "continue his clan."
Shame Naruto would have said it was ok if only Sasuke had been honest "thank gods for Kyuubi not letting Naruto get knocked up by Sasuke." Well the fox wouldn't have given Sasuke a kid from Naruto anyway, so the situation wouldn't have changed much other than Naruto telling Sasuke he can fuck some chick for that purpose.
That dummy. He's gonna feel more stupid when he discovers Naruto has moved on, and I suspect Shino's not going to allow Sasuke the chance to confess his "hidden love for Naruto." Although I hope he doesn't just kill him outright for how deeply he hurt Naruto. Well Shino has a lot of self control I just hope he doesn't think that once Sasuke ask forgiveness that it will change anything between him and Naruto.
O_o That would be dangerous, for Sasuke, a heartbroken Shino after the two of them came so far....Well I love the way you've developed Naru and Shino even Sasuke, I don't hate him I just like Shino more. lol! And although twisted, Sasuke has his reasons for what he did. Now he's the one getting used, by Sakura I wonder how he's going to react...I hope the pink hair ninja will survive his wrath once she confesses why she is not prego yet...
That's divine justice, but so cruel: Dose Sasuke deserve that? Yeah more than likely he does, but it's sad all the same.
Thanks for the great read looking forward to more. =3
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August 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i will be waiting for updates on this tale its hot and sweet just what my mind needs to go to sleep now good luck and keep up the hard work and thanks for sharing
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June 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow. What a beautifully written story. Your pacing is excellent and I particularly like the way you are able to convey so much in thoughts, emotions, and actions with few, well-chosen words. You keep them all in-character, making their thoughts and actions such believe parts of who they are. Well done. Thank you. While I try not to badger authors about continuing their stories, I admit I'm hoping you will do so here. The 'I hate Sasuke' part of me is dying to to see his reactions and face-plant when Naruto and Shino return. And I'm wondering whether or not Sakura's lack of 'productivity' is intentional, unknown, or a quickly fading secret. I would also love to know the reactions/thoughts of other close characters like Iruka and Kakashi. I would especially like to know what the hell Sakura is thinking.
I'm a big fan of Naruto/Shino (and Naruto/Shikamaru), and sadly there are not enough of them; particularly not enough written so well as yours. I have NEVER been a fan of Naruto/Sasuke pairing as I think Sasuke is a total ass and undeserving of Naruto's affections. So yeah, I also have a fondness for stories where that little shit gets what's coming to him.
Anyway, I know I'll be keeping an eye out to see if you continue this story. Regardless of the choice you make in that regard, thank you again for a wonderful story.
I'm a big fan of Naruto/Shino (and Naruto/Shikamaru), and sadly there are not enough of them; particularly not enough written so well as yours. I have NEVER been a fan of Naruto/Sasuke pairing as I think Sasuke is a total ass and undeserving of Naruto's affections. So yeah, I also have a fondness for stories where that little shit gets what's coming to him.
Anyway, I know I'll be keeping an eye out to see if you continue this story. Regardless of the choice you make in that regard, thank you again for a wonderful story.
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June 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I just located your story today and I have enjoyed the first two chapters. I am SO HAPPY that you had no plans to have Naruto end up with Sasuke again. I personally hate when authors allow Sasuke to treat Naruto like shit (ie sleep around with others)and break his heart, then they have Naruto "forgive" Sasuke and they stay together or get back together in the end. Personally I prefer the story's that have Naruto find happiness without Sasuke. I also like the Naruto/Shino pairing. Looking forward to the third chapter when you get it posted. :)
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March 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great job! I really love this story. I can't wait to see the final chapter!!
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November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This story is so beautifully written and it truly shows the heartache of being betrayed by the one you loved so dearly. It's extremely realistic and really reflects the pain that comes with trying to move on and the insecurities of a man longing to be loved but scared because of the way he's grown up.
Letting the reader see into the eyes of the characters and showing how those around Naruto are affected by his despair was great. Giving Shino the loving and understanding demeanor though he is inexperienced except for his longtime love of the blonde was a nice touch. Also showing Sasuke's feelings and remorse, how it is tearing him apart on the inside and out over making such a terrible mistake and hurting his precious person.
I would like to see inside of Sakura's head, even though I don't really like her. I think it would kind of bring the whole story together to see the point of view from the girl that made Sasuke lose it all. I think you should also put Iruka's thoughts in there seeing that he's the closest thing to family Naruto has ever had besides the fox. Kakashi's take on things seems like a must to write because all of this is going on within the old Team 7. For Sakura not to be able to get pregnant and for Naruto to come back swollen with Shino's child would be good to show Sasuke what he could've had but never will.
I'd love to read any version of those scenarios in the following chapters. Yes, CHAPTERS. This story is too good to stop with just three. It has so much potential! Please e-mail me when you update! hikaru_miraegofblaze@yahoo.com or if you have a fanfiction.net account, PM me under mangatemptresshikaru. Thank you for writing such a wonderful story, I look forward to much much more!
Love,
mangatemptresshikaru
Letting the reader see into the eyes of the characters and showing how those around Naruto are affected by his despair was great. Giving Shino the loving and understanding demeanor though he is inexperienced except for his longtime love of the blonde was a nice touch. Also showing Sasuke's feelings and remorse, how it is tearing him apart on the inside and out over making such a terrible mistake and hurting his precious person.
I would like to see inside of Sakura's head, even though I don't really like her. I think it would kind of bring the whole story together to see the point of view from the girl that made Sasuke lose it all. I think you should also put Iruka's thoughts in there seeing that he's the closest thing to family Naruto has ever had besides the fox. Kakashi's take on things seems like a must to write because all of this is going on within the old Team 7. For Sakura not to be able to get pregnant and for Naruto to come back swollen with Shino's child would be good to show Sasuke what he could've had but never will.
I'd love to read any version of those scenarios in the following chapters. Yes, CHAPTERS. This story is too good to stop with just three. It has so much potential! Please e-mail me when you update! hikaru_miraegofblaze@yahoo.com or if you have a fanfiction.net account, PM me under mangatemptresshikaru. Thank you for writing such a wonderful story, I look forward to much much more!
Love,
mangatemptresshikaru
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November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh my gosh! more please!
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August 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! You so rock! I hope you can get more of this one out soon!
*eyes gleam* I bet that Sakura has been aborting the baby that Sasuke wants......*cackles*
*eyes gleam* I bet that Sakura has been aborting the baby that Sasuke wants......*cackles*
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August 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey...................I really love this story...........please continue it!!!!!!!!!! I want to see what happens next!!!!