rate_review Reviews

A great one-shot.

That was different.

Hrm, it's definitely a one shot, but I'm not sure you fully conveyed the idea of it being Naruto and Iruka. It was nicely written, don't get me wrong, but characterization was lacking. I used to have this problem too, but you basically just wrote a very generic love scene. There were no tell tale signs of it being Naruto or Iruka despite the fact that you slapped their names onto the characters.

Your writing isn't bad, but maybe try to throw in more details next time? All characters have their kinks or idiosyncrasies. If you throw some of those in there, it may help.

Best of luck!