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by Sukia

person Meg
schedule December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well... the story has potential... but it needs some definite work. The characters need to be actually IN character. Sasuke especially. I suggest these two sites for research:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Naruto_characters
and
www.leafninja.com
As for the detailing.... yeah... just work on that. It's just too bland.
person logophobia
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
sexy sexy sexy, this is a very good start here and i know its gonna turn out better so keep it up

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