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Hiroki, Sasuke and Naruto are the cutest family ever! I say that almost every chapter but every chapter they have such cute scenes together!

I'm glad that they got the tail off, but is Naruto okay? This chapter was really good- it seemed to run smoothly to me. Awesome job (claps) vari vari good chapter, yesm. Can't wait to find out if Neji and Hinata were successful with the chakra threads! ^__^ Keep it up!

First, Great Chapter!!! Second, is it next Tuesday, yet? Slowly I am beginning to understand that when you say that you post on Tuesdays, you really mean Tuesdays and only on Tuesdays...I have a problem with denial. I am working on that.

I really love how you make Sakura herself without veering into easy stereotypes. Awesome chapter! Loved the bit with Iruka! Can't wait for more!

Chapter 35 today… (and just a little thing I wanted to point out before I continued with my review. Earlier in the story you have changed Arashi to Minato, but in this chapter, it was still Arashi, in case you wanted to change it!)

I’m not much for Sasuke-seme. I don’t enjoy that prospect too much. It doesn’t work on a lot of levels for me. Naruto is far to domineering for me to see him as anything less than a seme, but you did an incredible job of making me believe it would be possible. I liked Sasuke’s hesitation in becoming the seme, in taking Naruto. Not only would he reinforce the bond he’s building with Naruto, he’s going to strengthen it and he’s going to make it damned near impossible for him to leave Naruto behind. I like that for Sasuke, taking Naruto like this is an act that he can’t do it just because he wants to. Its something that is important and it means a lot to him. I like the seriousness that Sasuke has when he approaches having sex with Naruto, when he takes Naruto. It’s a nice touch. Because intimacy is something that is new to both of them, that it means so much to them both. I like that Naruto is willing to do what it takes to reassure Sasuke. That he’s certain. The differences in their approaches to relationships, to sex, it’s nice to read. And you did a very good job characterizing it.

And the lemon was hot too. It was incredibly well done, well thought out and the entire chapter was delicious! I loved it, very much I loved it. I liked the uncertainty in Sasuke’s actions, the way he was much more hesitant to take Naruto like that, but he still wanted to. But I really liked when he gave Naruto head. It was hot. Very, very hot. I love the way you wrote it. It was well done, and very much the way a person would give his first blow job. It was nervous and iffy, he was unsure of how he wanted to do it, but he just wanted to give Naruto pleasure. Very good. It’s a good definition of their relationship. The way they focus on each other, to make sure the other is happier, rather than just on themselves.

Again, I like the focus on them as characters, on their developing relationship. I like how you wrote them growing closer and stronger together. How you made them focus on each other rather than the other, outside influences. You’ve done an awesome job with this. And the more I read it, the more I think, if Sasuke hadn’t of left the village and Naruto had tried to pursue him there, how receptive to that would Sasuke really be? He does have an appearance, a name to keep up. And if he were to allow himself to become engrossed in Naruto and Naruto’s oft havoc inducing behavior, how would his dignity, his honor affect him. Alone with Naruto, without anyone around to keep tabs on Sasuke’s prissiness, his honor are allowed to be loosened, he can be himself around Naruto. He can allow himself to get close to Naruto because he’s not around anyone else. He doesn’t have to maintain any kind of pre-ordained systems or anything, you know? I like that in this story.

I also love the way you wrote Team 8 and Sai. Sai really does like Naruto. Something about Naruto draws Sai in and he can’t help but be there for him. He can’t help but want to do something, to try to protect Sai. It’s nice to see him protecting Naruto from the Council. But at the same time, I can also understand Team 8’s frustration with Sai over everything. They want to go home eventually. They want to see their village, their homes, their families and the friends they had to leave behind. But if Sai is keeping them tracking all over the countryside, they won’t get to go home soon. They have a mission to do, but they are also human, and they want the familiarity of their lives in Konoha. I like the way you portrayed it, the way you wrote it out. It’s good, and it’s subtle, the reader can pick up on it, but poor, oblivious Sai, left out of the loop…

And then Hanazaki and Sasame. Good stuff. I can’t wait to see how they develop in this story. I loved Sasuke’s reaction to Sasame, the jealousy he felt and demonstrated when Naruto hugged her, or the attention she paid to him. That was pretty funny. It amused me. And I love the way you wrote them together. Sasame and Hanazaki are doing everything in their power to take care of their village, trying to keep it afloat even while Orochimaru is doing so much against them. He’s wrecking havoc on everything that they have, and he didn’t care. And now that he’s gone, Hanazaki and Sasame have a real chance at making the village stronger. It’s a good added depth to this story.

I love it!

*off to read more*
~hanyou-elf

YAy! New chappie! i LOVE the interaction with Horoki and Naruto. They're so CUTE! I know the three of them (Sasuke included) will make a great and endearing family. I just can't get enough of your fic. Seriously. Will be waiting patiently for your new one. Thanks so much for sharing! :D

Grr! I can't believe I missed so much! Geez! So Sasuke finally gets the Mangekyo sharingan but he can't use it...why do I doubt that would stop him?

Oh man, that was some yummy smut there, I hoped Neji enjoyed it as much as I did. ^_6

*Shakes fists at council and yells* Who the hell do you think you are?! You can't tell them what to do! He should- they should- gah!!! They make me so mad... so mad that... Raina smash!

Ah... I feel better. Go Hyuugas and Sasuke, you were able to help! He has his pretty face back! woot! I can't wait until a Fuuma clan member is there, though, can Sasame do much? I mean if Ren was the only one able to do something as complicated as that, how do they think Sasame will be unable to do it? (You know every time I think about Sasame I think about that episode when Naruto sneaks up the stairs to peek at her. Man that had me cracking up! He's such a pervert!)

Hiroki playing with the tails: CUTE! So friggen cute! And I love how Naruto told him to do the puppy dog look so he can get his way LOL! Gawds, they are the most adorable little family ever!

Ok, that Sakura part had me on edge, she just has me guarded. I supposed she could have said worse it's just... *raises suspicious eyebrow in Sakura's direction* you, know...

I just have to say again how...AMAZING this story is, I'm pretty sure it's my all time favorite if not one of the top five. It's just so intricate and all the separate story lines weave so well, so tightly. You're like a beacon... of... special... um... author...skills... I have a horrible vocabulary. You are just an awesome, great, fantastic, *gush*, *gush*, and *more gush* author. I aspire to be half as good as you one day! *rereads* Wow, that was a slight fangasm there but, unfortunately for my pride, it was all true.

Can't wait for the next chapter, CU next Tuesday!

-Rai

I’m back and on chapter 30 today.

Wow. First I obviously have to start with the full on lemon (both of them!) and boy, oh boy were they delicious. I love that Naruto is willing to be gentle and slow and loving with Sasuke. He’s taking into consideration the fact that Sasuke is new to everything, he is uncertain, and confused, and Naruto is more than willing to slowly introduce him to everything. Which is nice, considering the fact that Naruto needs to take it slow with him. I love the way you wrote this, I really do. It is realistic, it’s human. Its fascinating to me and I really enjoy reading it because of the way it is done. The lemons were both really very hot. The first one, their first time, was absolutely incredibly hot. I like the delicacy Naruto treated Sasuke with, the way he made him not only enjoy the entire thing, but that he made him want to beg for it, that he made him scream.

One of the things I really liked about it was Sasuke’s hesitancy. The way he wanted to prove that he wasn’t submissive, that he wasn’t weak. I like that he didn’t want to admit to wanting to suck Naruto off. He doesn’t want to be the perceived submissive, because it would just throw him off of his game. And Naruto’s reaction to his being afraid was perfect. It was a good reaction, something I could see happening. And when they did it, your description was very well done. You had me wondering if you were really a girl, it was absolutely astounding. I love the description. I love your work. Beautiful job darling.

And then the second one, in the shower. Yeah. Definitely enjoyable. I love the way you wrote it, but it brings me to the next thing I want to talk about. Orochimaru’s influence and Kyuubi’s influence on Naruto. I like that you haven’t forced Orochimaru and Kyuubi into the complete background. You’ve given them a role, a force to play and they are going to do it magnificently, ne? I really like how Orochimaru is still maintaining that arrogant, dangerous side that he has, while still being forced to bow to the Kyuubi. It’s rather rare, hot pairing that you’ve integrated into this story. I love the way you’re writing. Kyuubi’s ruthlessness is fun to read. I really like that you kept Kyuubi as a bastard. He’s self-serving and arrogant. And he does what he wants, regardless of everything else around him.

Moving on to the newest characters you’ve put into the story, Sai, Shino, Kiba (with Akamaru), and Hinata. This is awesome. I love the way you wrote them, and Sai’s humor, social misfit that he is, is absolutely great! Sai’s comments are just observations and he doesn’t think anything about them, but it’s absolutely great. I love the way you wrote him, his humor is dry and perfectly him. Its fun to read. And his interaction with Team 8 is fun as well. I love the way he talks to them, straight and to the point, and humiliating to them. It’s quite amusing. I love it. I can’t stop laughing at Sai.

And the plot progression in this is great. I love the way you developed it, you moved it along so that the reader maintains an interest in the story and still can pay attention and know what’s going on. I like the way you’ve done it. It’s a fascinating story, and I love it. Great job with the introduction of Sasame, and the country’s leaders. I’m looking forward to more.

Till next time!

*loves*
~hanyou-elf

BLOODY GOD!! Your fic is one of the MOST IN-Character Sasunarusasu fic I've read out of the hundreds!! I love how your fic progressed sasuke and naruto's relationship so perfectly into what it is now...and the fights and orochimaru totally took my breath away!! LOVE YOU!!!

keep up the good work!!

Do I need to state how much I love this story? I don't think I could put it into words to save my life. *waits for the next chapter and hopes that it's not the last*

Another group of great chapters. (I just finished 17)

I liked the way you wrote their getting away from Orochimaru’s lair, and making progress towards accomplishing Sasuke’s goals. It’s not simple and easy. It’s a complicated task, something that requires them to be able to do what they have to do, to be smart and alert. On edge and always prepared. It’s a clever way to use how you moved Orochimaru around, it fascinates me, and I can’t help but wonder what’s going to happen next?

And I love how possessive and demanding of Sasuke Naruto really is. He’s laid claim to his friend, and Sasuke just doesn’t understand the depth of that claim just yet. I like the way this is progressing, and I like the simple innocence in Sasuke. It is a refreshing change to see a Sasuke who’s more unsure about what’s going to happen rather than a walking sexual handbook that he’s usually portrayed as. I like that he doesn’t know what to do, that he’s not perfect, that he falls short in this aspect and that it’s going to be Naruto that teaches him much more refined techniques. It’s a realistic aspect for the characters. And it’s a very well received technique.

I like the fights, they are interesting, fast paced and engaging. They excite and attract, they are enjoyable to read, the adrenaline the characters feel is obvious in the story. Its fun and I really like that aspect of the story. I am engaged in the fights, I can see them happening in my mind, I know what’s going on, and that makes me happy, simply because few authors can write an action scene as well as you do.

And then chapter seventeen. I loved that Naruto was so certain, so assured of himself, the way he carried himself, the way he hit on Sasuke, brought it up. It shows that he’s confident and that he wants nothing more than to spend time with Sasuke. It is a realistic display of affection, of attraction between the characters. I love the way you wrote Naruto in this, the way touching and just being gentle with Sasuke, much more than actually having sex, was so meaningful. It was a sweet display of Naruto’s dedication to his friends and his partners, it was a meaningful portrayal of Naruto’s attraction to Sasuke. It was simple and beautiful, and I really liked reading that.

But more than that, the actual smutting, that was delicious. I love that Sasuke depended on Naruto to bring him that satisfaction he needed. I love his uncertainty, how he’s unsure what to do to make Naruto feel good. It shows that he’s scared, but at the same time, with the kiss he gave Naruto, that he’s more than just a little willing to learn what the blond dobe has to teach him. It was nice to see that, to know that Naruto was so influential on Sasuke that he’s willing to risk building bonds because of Naruto. Very good.

I have more chapters to read… so until next time…

*loves*
~hanyou-elf