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I will try to give you a real review. First of all I really love hoe you are dealing with the characters. You keep them in character as well as make them your won. I really like how you have developed Naruto's character. I don't see many people who give Naruto credit for have a brain. The story is fun, and the tension you have created between the characters is great, it makes me salivate for more. I can also appreciat the little commical parts you use in your story, it make is dramatic and cute, though sometimes the placement seems a little random, but you still pull it off. Be careful not to make the the other supporting characters one dimemsional. Keep up the good work.

In my honest opinion, this is the best NaruSasu fanfic I've read on this site. It's amusing watching Sasuke angst over Naruto instead of his past, and he has some interesting rivals too. ^_^ You've kept everyone in character for the most part, and I even like Sasuke in this. Normally I can't stand the whiny little brat, but he's much better here. Your spelling and grammar is excellent, I like your writing style, and I very much want to see where you take this. I am also curious to see what sort of secret that Naruto has been keeping from Sasuke, especially since he told him that he takes Horticulture when he doesn't. You'll reveal that soon, right? Keep up the good work. ^_^ Update again soon!

That was an awesome dream sequence. Great job!

I must say I quite enjoy reading this fic.
You manage to keep them in character very well even though it's an AU.

Love the jokes, especially;
"Cue the dramatic music and lightning."

Keep doing whatever it is you're doing, it's working ;)

Greetz K-chan!

As a whole your story so far is very intriging. It takes a lot for me to keep on coming back to read a story. So that means your doing something right. I like the way that you add hmour to your chapters but also great suspense. Not to mention the way you right the characters is very well done.

I would have to say to date, my favourite bit of humour would have to be when Sasuke is stroking the washing machine/or dryer and chuckling to himself and Naruto walks in on him.

So yes, as for grammar and punctuation, very well done. You have a good story here and I will continue to read it. As long as you wish to write it.

Hey it's me again. I liked this chapter. The only thing that bothered me was when Naruto and Niji were on the hill he just left in a hurry without much explaniation. We know that he wasn't in a rush to go to class, so why did he suddenly leave? Did he see Garra and Sasuke? if he did what did he think? It seemed a little rushed at that point. But besides that keep up the good work. Can't wait to see what goes on when they go home. Oh and another thing (sorry I hope I'm not being to opinionated), I wish that the bet would have come sooner. It's just that since the bet just went down we know that they wont kiss over the weekend because it wouldn't be fair to Garra or Niji not to give them a chance.That's all for now. Keep writing ;)

Hmm, dream sequences seem a bit airy-fairy. But it's your story!
Okay, No more one-liners. So, here's what I like about this story:
The changing POVs, THe complete obliviousness of Naruto, The uncertinaty of which one is gonna get him, The fact Kiba is his roommate and confidant, The easy to read paragraphing, And the fact that Gaara is acting totally bonkers over Naruto, yet is still in character.
What I'm not sure about: This whole 'going over to Narutos house' Thing. Are you sure you're going to be able to write that? I hope you've got something planned, because I find it impossible to write 'at home' scenes. Mind you, you're ten times the writer I am.
Where is this fic going to go? You need a focus point, or else it'll drag. Mind you, the going home thing can be a focal point for the next few chapters.

I hope I haven't offended you. The reason most people do only short reveiws is becasue they're afraid of offending you and having you discontinue the story. So please don't get angry at me! I know you're a better writer than me, and I should probably not lecture you. But I really love this story and if I have to wait longer times for chapters, I will go Gaara and kill the nearest potted plant.

OoOoOoooo...... *drools* Vague dream + three rivals making a wager = total and complete suspense. *blink* .....ah, damn. I forgot that that was a -bad- thing.......... ^___~ Thank you so much for updating!!! *gives you chocolates...again? (I can't remember)* ...yeah, probably, but who cares? You deserve them......... ^___^ Oh, and as for the "longer review" thing: I completely understand where you're coming from, but to be perfectly honest, it's reeeeeeeeally difficult to come up with constructive criticism when a fic is as good as this one is. And no, I'm not just trying to flatter you in order to get you to update quickly......though that would be nice.......... *hint, hint* ^___~ Anywho, here is my attempt at "constructive criticism.......no, actually, it's more of a critique than anything else: very creative storyline, excellent characterization and details, wonderfully written, a nice lack of spelling and grammar problems, etc, etc, etc, you get the point, ne? ^___^ Yeah, like I said, I love this fic. If you -really- want something to "improve", you could try making the chapters a bit longer, but I personally think that the majority of them are at a good length and that if you were to try and change them you might mess them up, so you should just leave them the way they are. ^^ I'm not very helpful, am I? *pouts* Well, it's your fault, anyway, coming up with such a great idea and keeping everyone in character!!! ^___~ Okay, I've babbled enough -- as always, keep up the good work and update ASAP!!! Ja ne!!!

Yay! Finally you update. I like the fact that you have Sasuke, Gaara, and Neji all vying for Naruto's attention. *grins evilly* And with the no kissing rule....that makes it a whole lot more interesting. Hmm...from the dream sequence it almost seems to me as if Kyuubi wants Naru-chan too. *grin broadens* That would be very.... interesting...umm *cough* Mind out of the gutter. Anyways, when reading a story I am normally very critical about how realistic/believable the story is and how well people portray the characters, that said you do it well. Yep. Heh. Now that I'm done rambling aren't you almost kind of regretting asking your readers to not write just one-liners? *grins* Keep up the good work!

*is very, very confused* My computer is doing weird things.....not that it doesn't -normally- do weird things, but still....... ^^ Did you update yesterday, too? No, wait, I must have just fogotten to check the site for a few days..... but I would have remembered reading this yesterday...... gah!!! *goes crazy* -.- I blame it on the school projects -- I was up till 4 the other night, so maybe that is what it was........... *shrugs* Who knows? ^___~ Ja!!!