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February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, this is good! You're making a nice story. Was Hinata stark naked when Naruto saw her or just in her underwear?
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good so far
And Gen-jutsu are the illusionary techniques, Nin-jutsu are all of the other Jutsus
And Gen-jutsu are the illusionary techniques, Nin-jutsu are all of the other Jutsus
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
your definitions are slightly off. genjutsu - illusion techniques, ninjutsu - ninja techniques, taijutsu - hand to hand combat techniques.
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not sure if you care about accuracy, but if you do-some things you might want to fix are- genjutsu is illusionary techniques, while ninjutsu is everything else that uses up chakra. Also, it's "kage bunshin no jutsu" not "kage no bunshin". Sorry, I know I'm a nag.
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Finally! More Naruto/Hinata! I can't wait for the actual third chapter! This story is very well written and believable. Please, do update soon.
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is going to be a great fic. your writting is very well done, best iv seen in a long time. Keep up the good work, and i cant wait for the next chapter.