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by mehmeh

person Tachibana, Yumiko
schedule June 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes, finally update! I sort of lost your fic, I don't know why but I couldn't find it no matter how much I searched. I read through all the titles in the Naruto section, but I must have missed it somehow. Then I remembered I had it saved under favorites. So I found it again, and what do I find? Two new chapters! Wey!
I must say, this fic just gets better and better. Naruto seems to be in complete control of Sasuke. I like! Please update soon, I can't wait for the next chapter! hehe...
person TenshiKaitou
schedule May 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ahh...i nearly missed this update. not bad. no sex still, but i forgive you. don't feel like in a smutty mood lately. angst would be much better. you just know what to write to please me ne? heh, update soon.
person PerriotLeFou
schedule May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehehe....It's me again. Fabulous! I keep tellin you that everytime I review, but seriously ^_^ Can't wait for the next chapter!! Hoping for some smut, but would love anything!!! *grins like a maniac* Loves it!!! And btw love the way Naruto was 'standing' there!! Too hott! lol laters babe!! PerriotLeFou
person Nicole
schedule May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HAHA I check on this fic at least twice a day...pathetisaddd. :( I can't wait for an update!

I love how you control this story--you let it go wherever your mind takes it, and it's funnn.
you do such creative characterizations, that I don't care about the lack-of-plot you speak of. even if
I find the plot fun and engaging. :ppp
person Nissie
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hehe, I read this fic on Banana Oil and checked back 40 times, but it;s only up to ch 8 there, so I was so happy to stumble upon Control here! And then you went and left the hot and steamy part out! Meh, I loved it anyway! And I hope you'll update soon! Even though you say you have no plot, I feel like it's quite a deep story... But I also tried to see if that light inside the fridge stays on when you close the door, so I'm dumb. Guess I'll believe you about the plotness then, but I still think your writing is great! Forgive me for the high nonsense-factor of my review... Ja!
person Ryuukotsusei
schedule April 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whew! Sorry my review was so late! My life is WAYYYYY too full of
chaos! Anyway, on to the fic...

OMFG! This was even better than I expected! Naruto is going to
become the Hokage?! Really?! But how will the VILLAGERS feel
about that? I loved the part where Tsunade threw the mug at
Naruto! Butthat's what he gets for insulting her! I wonder how
he will do as a jounin now, hmm? And that is true about
Sakura - she seems like the only member of cell 7 without
any REAL problems! And she always has the nerve to scold
Naruto! GRAHHHHHHH! But I no longer HATE her 'cause she
kinda redeemed herself in my eyes way back when she was
brave enough to fight the sound ninjas. Anyway, moving on...

When Naruto started eating the fruit I nearly fell out of my
seat! He had to be doing that on purpose! A seductive Naruto!
I'l bet Kyuubi was whispering in his ear the entire time too!
Now if only he had added some whipped cream to that strawberry.

Naruto: O_o

But the banana scene! That knocked my scocks off! He really got
Sasuke hot and horny! Then he was holding his cock trying to make
Sasuke give him what he wanted! But Sasuke isn't too happy with
that! Will he really make him scream? Can he teach Naruto his
place or vice versa? I wonder if Itachi is that aggressive in bed?

Itachi: Do you wish to find out? *Mange Sharingan flashes*

Me: O_o

Which brings me to my next point: HOW DARE YOU LEAVE IT OFF
AT A CLIFFHANGER? IT WAS JUST GETT'N GOOD! GRRRRR! You
must update SOONNNNNNNNN!

Oh, my story is nothing like your at all, trust me. Just Kyuubi's
speech. Thanks for saying it's okay though!

So, you've watched gay porn? Is that where you made the sex
scences from, or is any of it from...experience? HMMMMM? See
ya later!
person twistedneko/Taylor-same person ^_^
schedule April 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Alright, your writing is brilliant! >_<

I think you're some kind of prodigy or something because I find many different explanations as to what is going on. (does that make sense?) Anyway, I like the way Sasuke is, and I understand Naruto isnt trying to get payback, but, rather to reduce Sasuke's (ab-fucking-normally) big ego right...? at least I can deduct that much. >_>;; <_<;;

Oh yeah...I'm really looking forward to a lemon. *puts on i <3 girly boys t-shirt...* yeah...I own one.
person Serafim
schedule April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMFG! That is THE BEST fik I have EVER reat! Cont it pls! Kisses from Russia!
person Juli
schedule April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohohoho. You're SO evil! I'll be waiting on the edge of my seat for the next chapter, that's for sure! Loved that seductive, cunning Naruto there toward the end, also. I've never pictured him that exceedingly sexy... until now. Phew. Wonderful work, as per usual!
person Editor\'s Crawl
schedule April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Mwhwhwhwhwa.....I am a sadistic piece of (censered)....Gezz, what took you so long? I love this story! Update soon, and when I say soon I damn well mean it! Your updates take sooooo late...(or maybe I just too impatient!)

Who will Naruto end up with in the end? I am still confused as to where this story is going....

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