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for Control

by mehmeh

person ky0kichi
schedule July 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Sasuke is SUCH a prick in this chapter! I hope it's not like this much longer.....Poor Naruto-kun
person kayoko
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
just reread the whole story. damn, it really was a cliffie.

"He’d make him cry, beg and scream until those pretty blue eyes were red-rimmed with tears."
I have high expectations since that paints such a pretty picture~

*grins*
person dakara
schedule July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh WHAT THE FUCK did you STOPPPPP *cries* WRITE NOW!!!!!!!!! ORRRRRRR DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE GRRRRRRRRR how could you leave it like that
person KARAKURI_NINGYOU
schedule July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Why..............WHY DID YOU STOP?!?!?!?! Please update soon. And another thing, because of this story I am now head over hills with the kyuubi......in his male form:)
person gasa
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omfg... this is awesome.
but.. that thing with the
"I want to fuck you in front of this old geezer's shrine"
and
"Your bedroom. Now."
made me laugh. it was just sooo.....
random and predictable.. weird huh? update soon.
person Tricycle
schedule July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I don't usually read stuff like this but this is really intriguing! I liked that scene with Kakashi, and I agree with you that the part with the Tea Country where Naruto saves Sakura from drowning annoyed me a lot. Argh! What's wrong with that girl! I'm only on the sixth chapter so I don't know if this story is completed yet or what happens in the next couple of chapters, but I only have one complaint: I'm pretty sure the villagers' feelings aren't that strong after so many years, especially the younger generation. Naruto actually has gotten quite a bit of recognition for his deeds, and bringing back Sasuke had to give him some credit. Ack, sorry, one more thing-- Naruto really seems a little too OOC and self-pitying sometimes. He never does complain about his existence as a 'demon' and such, and that's part of his character, which was established in the series very early on. Sorry about that! I wouldn't normally be so nitpicky but it seems like you're a great writer and, judging from your review responses, you take criticism really well! This is a really great fic and I'm looking forward to seeing more of it!
person Tricycle
schedule July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(chp.7 or so) Oh, my little Naruru's so wicked!!! I love it! :DDD The little bits of Kakashi/Naruto were very, very yummy. :) Sasuke still seems sort of... CRAZY, but that's cool.
person bblisblop
schedule June 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh you are gonna get it now Sasuke.Finally,hot stuff.
person Anon
schedule June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Noooooooooooo! You're abandoning this? Please at least end it? I wanna know what happens with the boys! Please? I also liked you new fic, but can't you finish this one first? Aaaaaah the horror of good fics being abandoned. Or waiting long for updates... Meh.
person angel of darkness
schedule June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
-drools- nice especially kyuubi/naru -huggles a hog tied and gagged furious kyuubi- you gotta luff him -sound of ropes snapping- ehhh shit..help? -runs away from kyuubi screaming- great story cant wait for more!! please send help befor im killed!!! lol --ducks kyuubis claws-

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