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by trutenor

person Anon
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story. I hope to see future chapters soon
person Shiruka Chan
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! This fic is so awsome! *two thumbs up*
It's not all about my fav couple, Naru/Hina, but it's also was about fightings! I luv it! Luv it! *claps crazily* ^_________^

Pleaseeeeeeeeeeee Update soon!!! XD
person naruhina
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon!
person Andrew
schedule December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Such a beutiful story, i really love how it end up with Naruto and Hinata living together. Please get the next chapter done soon.
person firelord
schedule December 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
fantastic story please update agin when you can
person Church
schedule December 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DEAR LOR YES FINALLY UPDATED BUT GOOD CANT WAIT TILL U UPDATE AGN!!!!
person Parapsychic Psycho
schedule December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My God. When the hell are you going to update?! You're taking too long dammit!!
person Church
schedule August 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DUDE OMG IM IN LOVE WITH THIS FIC WOOT OMG ITS GOT EVERYTHING A GOOD STORY COULD ASK FOR WOOT!!!!!
person Katzztar
schedule June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good first chapter, but some spelling mistakes are stopping it from being a great chapter=
>>Naruto saw the swing that at oat on when he had failed his ninja academy exam for the third time in a row.<<
Did you mean to say "Naturo saw the swing that he sat on"?

>>In return, Sakura would constantly insult Naruto and treat him bad, even gh Ngh Naruto cared about Sakura like she was a goddess.<<
This one I couldn't dechiper. see someone that has been robof aof a chance to have a family.

>>I see someone that has been robof aof a chance to have a family.<<
Is this suppose to say "robbed of a chance to have a family'?

>>you say yoard ard everything...<< Is this 'you say you heard everything"?

THere are other mistakes. I'm not pointing them out to be evil or anything. I really like this story and it can be greater if you fixed these errors.

What was going on between the 2 young shinobi’s was soing ing that not even genjutsu, Byakugan, or the Sharigan eyuld uld detect.

The ins Nar Naruto did that;

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As I said I really liked the story, it's the spelling mistakes that are keeping a good story from being a great story.









person Katzztar
schedule June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I've really enjoyed these last 2 chapters. hehe I would think that Hinata and Naruto would work very well togwther.
At least being on the same team allows the two young lovers time together.
I can't wait to see the next chapter.

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